The West
Viewing comments for Chapter 26 "Woman"One man's journey west.
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Comment from giraffmang
Hi Thomas,
A fine continuation of the story here. The Traveler certainly gets about a fair bit.
Chippewa didn't set right with the tribe - sit?
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2018
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Hi Thomas,
A fine continuation of the story here. The Traveler certainly gets about a fair bit.
Chippewa didn't set right with the tribe - sit?
Comment Written 28-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2018
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Thanks again for correcting.
Comment from Pearl Edwards
Good interaction between The Traveller and Woman that he grew to like. I do like the voice you give Traveller in the telling of his story, straight forward with little emotion, just as one would imagine for the times you're writing about.
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2018
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Good interaction between The Traveller and Woman that he grew to like. I do like the voice you give Traveller in the telling of his story, straight forward with little emotion, just as one would imagine for the times you're writing about.
Comment Written 28-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2018
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Thanks. he was a cowboy of the Gary Cooper type.
Comment from apky
And so it goes. The traveler (I've learnt to spell it like you do, see?) continues his often hilarious but always lackadaisical defence and offence of the people his people nearly decimated. I'm still enjoying his way of taking things - easy come, easy go. Why not?
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2018
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And so it goes. The traveler (I've learnt to spell it like you do, see?) continues his often hilarious but always lackadaisical defence and offence of the people his people nearly decimated. I'm still enjoying his way of taking things - easy come, easy go. Why not?
Comment Written 27-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2018
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Thanks for reviewing.
Comment from Writingfundimension
Hi, Thomas
The traveler seems to be ready and able to pick up and move whenever the mood strikes. It apparently doesn't matter if he has a woman attached to him or not. I do appreciate HIS appreciation of the Chippewas as that is one of the more predominant tribes here in the Great Lakes.
Another interesting chapter that I enjoyed reading.
:) Bev
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2018
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Hi, Thomas
The traveler seems to be ready and able to pick up and move whenever the mood strikes. It apparently doesn't matter if he has a woman attached to him or not. I do appreciate HIS appreciation of the Chippewas as that is one of the more predominant tribes here in the Great Lakes.
Another interesting chapter that I enjoyed reading.
:) Bev
Comment Written 26-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2018
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I really appreciate that your reading. I used to live in Ohio. A lot of places in Ohio have Chippewa names.
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You're welcome, Thomas.
Comment from poetwatch
It's good Thomas. Are you writing this for the general pubic? If you are i think it needs more spice. Put some action into the scenes like a good scalping or a bad medicine man putting the whammy on somebody. "Scratching her butt" sounds nice, go that way and make it a threesome. Then again, "They who go to bed with itchy butt wake up with smelly fingers." Put some humor into it. Makes us laugh at their way of life or scare us half to death. Bring up Indian lore they have some scary stuff. Move the mountains and shake the tree see what fall off. :)
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It's good Thomas. Are you writing this for the general pubic? If you are i think it needs more spice. Put some action into the scenes like a good scalping or a bad medicine man putting the whammy on somebody. "Scratching her butt" sounds nice, go that way and make it a threesome. Then again, "They who go to bed with itchy butt wake up with smelly fingers." Put some humor into it. Makes us laugh at their way of life or scare us half to death. Bring up Indian lore they have some scary stuff. Move the mountains and shake the tree see what fall off. :)
Comment Written 26-Feb-2018
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
So you had a pet crow to keep you company. I hear they are pretty good talkers; you probably were not lonely.
Seems nobody likes the Apache much. Little wonder they want to kill everyone they meet. By the way, Little Wonder was my name when I lived with the Arpaio tribe. The sheriff gave me that name, because I could beat him at Scrabble in three languages. Good times. I had way more fun than you. :)
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2018
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So you had a pet crow to keep you company. I hear they are pretty good talkers; you probably were not lonely.
Seems nobody likes the Apache much. Little wonder they want to kill everyone they meet. By the way, Little Wonder was my name when I lived with the Arpaio tribe. The sheriff gave me that name, because I could beat him at Scrabble in three languages. Good times. I had way more fun than you. :)
Comment Written 26-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2018
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I heard that when you were an Arapaho, you were banished from the tribe for counting coup with yourself all the time.
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I was never Arapaho. I said I was in the Arpaio tribe... you know the one run by the sheriff? Or don't you pay attn to news? Sheriff Arpaio doesn't ring a bell?
Comment from Beck Fenton
Love this vignette into the life of a guy in the 1800's, I'm guessing. I like that you chose not to have him abuse the Indian woman as many white men did at the time. "I grew to like her." says a lot about the man.
I loved"Pat Sullivan could talk the wings off a mosquito."
Thanks for a good chapter in your book.
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2018
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Love this vignette into the life of a guy in the 1800's, I'm guessing. I like that you chose not to have him abuse the Indian woman as many white men did at the time. "I grew to like her." says a lot about the man.
I loved"Pat Sullivan could talk the wings off a mosquito."
Thanks for a good chapter in your book.
Comment Written 26-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2018
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Thanks for reading and commenting.
Comment from lyenochka
So sad that some human beings like war. It's a good thing that the Traveler moved on but wish he'd taken his lady with him.
One suggestion:
"I don't have to tell you woman had black hair " (suggest capitalizing Woman)
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2018
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So sad that some human beings like war. It's a good thing that the Traveler moved on but wish he'd taken his lady with him.
One suggestion:
"I don't have to tell you woman had black hair " (suggest capitalizing Woman)
Comment Written 25-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2018
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Good point. Thanks.
Comment from Bill Schott
Another fun insight into life back in the wild west days before all the air conditioning and casinos showed up. Makes me miss Death Valley Days on television.
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2018
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Another fun insight into life back in the wild west days before all the air conditioning and casinos showed up. Makes me miss Death Valley Days on television.
Comment Written 25-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2018
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Thanks for reading. I forgot about Ronald Reagan and Twenty Mule Team Borax.
Comment from MelB
Another interesting chapter to the story, Tom. This guy seems to be quite a drifter of sorts. I'm wondering who he will end up next and what town he will wind up in.
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2018
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Another interesting chapter to the story, Tom. This guy seems to be quite a drifter of sorts. I'm wondering who he will end up next and what town he will wind up in.
Comment Written 25-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2018
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His travels constantly take him west. He can't go much farther unless he turns around.
