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Comment from Jumbo J
Hi MariVal,
thought I might have had one review in me before I crashed back into a drifting state of dizziness that may very well be drifting along the same putrid creek.
Such powerful imagery and metaphors our dear weaver of words. A richness within the decay of self love, respect and humility.
It seems you are hitting emotions my way and stirring the sadness that sits just below the surface of me.
My name is nobody
and I'm an addict...
wow, that just lingers in and timeless echo of hopelessness.
What a perfect ending!
Hope you are safe and emotionally strong my dear friend.
In my thoughts and prayers,
always!
Kindest regards,
James.
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2025
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Hi MariVal,
thought I might have had one review in me before I crashed back into a drifting state of dizziness that may very well be drifting along the same putrid creek.
Such powerful imagery and metaphors our dear weaver of words. A richness within the decay of self love, respect and humility.
It seems you are hitting emotions my way and stirring the sadness that sits just below the surface of me.
My name is nobody
and I'm an addict...
wow, that just lingers in and timeless echo of hopelessness.
What a perfect ending!
Hope you are safe and emotionally strong my dear friend.
In my thoughts and prayers,
always!
Kindest regards,
James.
Comment Written 18-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2025
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Hello, James,
I lost my review in FanStory, but this time I have a document I can copy and paste. Thank goodness!
Itβs so good to hear from you. I appreciate your thoughtful and detailed review. I hope you and Jade are well.
This poem is fictional but it comes from a place in deep inside. I have my own demons to face. I have 30 years clean and sober. I never used needles but from attending AA and NA meetings I remember many stories. I owe the groups my sobriety and soul restoration. That you like this one means a lot to me.
Thank you from the bottom of my heart. May the Divine Mother care for you and bring you peace.
Besitos y Abrazos, te quiero, hermano,
MariVal
"We are not defined by the challenges in our lives, we are defined by the way we face them"
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
That was a sad, very powerful poem, Gypsy. The visuals were raw, the discarded needles on the dirty floor, broken bottles, how and why do people go down that ghastly road? Once on, it's hard to get off. I found it hard to give up cigarettes 30+ years ago, a drug has to be ten times worse. You're poem on addiction is amazing. I hope it encourages people not to go down that road. Excellent, my friend. :)) Sandra xx
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2025
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That was a sad, very powerful poem, Gypsy. The visuals were raw, the discarded needles on the dirty floor, broken bottles, how and why do people go down that ghastly road? Once on, it's hard to get off. I found it hard to give up cigarettes 30+ years ago, a drug has to be ten times worse. You're poem on addiction is amazing. I hope it encourages people not to go down that road. Excellent, my friend. :)) Sandra xx
Comment Written 18-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2025
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Thank you very much for your excellent review and kind words π
Gypsy
Comment from shelley kaye
like a dark passenger! (dexter)
great fictional free verse
smooth flow
good realistic imagery
no spag or typos
thank you for sharing!
shelley :)
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2025
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like a dark passenger! (dexter)
great fictional free verse
smooth flow
good realistic imagery
no spag or typos
thank you for sharing!
shelley :)
Comment Written 16-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2025
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Thank you very much, π
Gypsy
Comment from barbara.wilkey
This is a powerful write that is all too true for many addicts. Where I was teaching many of my students' parents were addicted and I got to see firsthand what it was like for innocent bystanders. Thank you for highlighting this problem
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2025
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This is a powerful write that is all too true for many addicts. Where I was teaching many of my students' parents were addicted and I got to see firsthand what it was like for innocent bystanders. Thank you for highlighting this problem
Comment Written 16-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2025
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Thank you very much π
Gypsy
Comment from Jesse James Doty
I have not heard of that saying before, the "Sleeping Tiger" means an addict who is in recovery is still an addict inside waiting to come back if they don't practice the twelve steps of recovery. This is news to me. I notice you write that this is fiction. I wonder if we don't all know someone who isn't addicted in one form or another.
Whether it is food, cigarettes, alcohol, or gambling, it is always alive inside of the addict ready to wake up and ruin their lives once again.
Jesse
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2025
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I have not heard of that saying before, the "Sleeping Tiger" means an addict who is in recovery is still an addict inside waiting to come back if they don't practice the twelve steps of recovery. This is news to me. I notice you write that this is fiction. I wonder if we don't all know someone who isn't addicted in one form or another.
Whether it is food, cigarettes, alcohol, or gambling, it is always alive inside of the addict ready to wake up and ruin their lives once again.
Jesse
Comment Written 16-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2025
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Thank you very much,
Gypsy π hugs
Comment from Wendy G
That is a very powerful write - of despair, misery, and hopelessness. The freedom sought in drugs has in fact become worse than a prison, and unfortunately these wasted lives are increasingly prevalent and relevant. The carefully chosen image is a powerful accompaniment to the harsh and stark words. Six-worthy. Well done.
Wendy
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2025
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That is a very powerful write - of despair, misery, and hopelessness. The freedom sought in drugs has in fact become worse than a prison, and unfortunately these wasted lives are increasingly prevalent and relevant. The carefully chosen image is a powerful accompaniment to the harsh and stark words. Six-worthy. Well done.
Wendy
Comment Written 15-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2025
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Thank you very much π
Gypsy
Comment from Mike Stevens
Another excellent poem, Gypsy, and if you just take the first part of this poem it could apply to so many people, taken as a whole, a very powerful poem
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2025
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Another excellent poem, Gypsy, and if you just take the first part of this poem it could apply to so many people, taken as a whole, a very powerful poem
Comment Written 15-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2025
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Thank you very much π
Gypsy
Comment from RJ Heritage
Graphic and real depiction of addiction. For many people life of addiction is a life that is their reality. As a society we must continue to look for answers, which granted is never easy. We who have lived long enough, certainly have known someone affected by this condition. Some of the brightest minds fall victim to it, but it stretches across a wide field of people. Well written and presented piece.
RJ
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2025
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Graphic and real depiction of addiction. For many people life of addiction is a life that is their reality. As a society we must continue to look for answers, which granted is never easy. We who have lived long enough, certainly have known someone affected by this condition. Some of the brightest minds fall victim to it, but it stretches across a wide field of people. Well written and presented piece.
RJ
Comment Written 15-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2025
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Thank you very much π
Gypsy
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You're welcome
RJ
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
What a powerful free verse about addiction. The visual alone is striking but you match it perfectly with your evocative sentiments of decay and waste, generated from a doomed childhood. I could virtually smell that smoke! Well done, Gypsy. Debbie
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2025
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What a powerful free verse about addiction. The visual alone is striking but you match it perfectly with your evocative sentiments of decay and waste, generated from a doomed childhood. I could virtually smell that smoke! Well done, Gypsy. Debbie
Comment Written 15-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2025
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Thank you very much π
Gypsy
Comment from patcelaw
Addiction is a very difficult thing to deal with. So many in this world today are Addicted not only to drugs, but also to alcohol and many other forms of addiction. There's gambling addiction. There's the addiction for technology. There is so much addiction in this world. This is a very well written piece and I enjoyed it very much. Patricia.
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reply by the author on 15-Jan-2025
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Addiction is a very difficult thing to deal with. So many in this world today are Addicted not only to drugs, but also to alcohol and many other forms of addiction. There's gambling addiction. There's the addiction for technology. There is so much addiction in this world. This is a very well written piece and I enjoyed it very much. Patricia.
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Comment Written 15-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2025
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Thank you very much π
Gypsy
