One Thousand Cranes
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Comment from w.j.debi
I have a feeling the sunset would be glorious whether someone was watching it or not.
This is a beautiful presentation. I want to just keep reading the verse and looking at the picture. So serene. Wish I had a six.
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2023
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I have a feeling the sunset would be glorious whether someone was watching it or not.
This is a beautiful presentation. I want to just keep reading the verse and looking at the picture. So serene. Wish I had a six.
Comment Written 04-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2023
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Thank you very much for the kind words and insightful review. I am happy you like it.
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Comment from barbara.wilkey
I am not a poet, so I am probably totally wrong, but I read it quite a few times and I read the first line as 'nobody's around tonight.' I'm sure by saying that I am breaking all sorts of poetic rules, but I just had to let you know. I love the poem and the image.
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2023
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I am not a poet, so I am probably totally wrong, but I read it quite a few times and I read the first line as 'nobody's around tonight.' I'm sure by saying that I am breaking all sorts of poetic rules, but I just had to let you know. I love the poem and the image.
Comment Written 04-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2023
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Barbara,
I changed the line to nobody's around tonight. I was wondering if nobody's is considered one word or two? The poem is 8 words limit.
Thank you very much for the kind words and insightful review. I am happy you like it.
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It's one word. I just checked.
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Thank you!
Comment from kahpot
Sunsets are beautiful, but like so many things in nature, they do go unseen, and unappreciated, very well written and presented, best wishes for your contest****kahpot
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2023
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Sunsets are beautiful, but like so many things in nature, they do go unseen, and unappreciated, very well written and presented, best wishes for your contest****kahpot
Comment Written 03-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2023
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Thank you very much for your time, kind review, and helpfull feedback.
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Comment from AP Apgar
I like your eight word, 17 syllable modern haiku - you are amazing. Beautiful picture presentation. Poem has an excellent theme..making the best of...sometimes nobody around is a blessing, and especially if you are in such a beautiful place as in the picture. Even better than meditating with a bird? Poem has a clear uncomplicated message, good word count and flow. Good Job. Have a wonderful weekend AP
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2023
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I like your eight word, 17 syllable modern haiku - you are amazing. Beautiful picture presentation. Poem has an excellent theme..making the best of...sometimes nobody around is a blessing, and especially if you are in such a beautiful place as in the picture. Even better than meditating with a bird? Poem has a clear uncomplicated message, good word count and flow. Good Job. Have a wonderful weekend AP
Comment Written 03-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2023
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Thank you very much for your time, kind review, and helpfull feedback.
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Comment from LateBloomer
Hi Gypsy, I like the sentiment in this poem. As we sit in solitude, the sun soothes our soul and releases the stresses of the day. Of special note:
the sunset is glorious
(Indeed, it is)
Well done. Great photo choices. Beautiful presentation. A pleasure to read. This poem made me smile. Xo. M
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2023
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Hi Gypsy, I like the sentiment in this poem. As we sit in solitude, the sun soothes our soul and releases the stresses of the day. Of special note:
the sunset is glorious
(Indeed, it is)
Well done. Great photo choices. Beautiful presentation. A pleasure to read. This poem made me smile. Xo. M
Comment Written 03-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2023
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Margaret
Thank you very much for your time and kind review and helpfull feedback. Have a wonderful weekend!
Gypsy hugs
Comment from lyenochka
Loved your formatting of the eight words and it really grabs your attention to have that "regardless" right in the middle of the poem to shift from the "nobody" line in the beginning and all the beauty that is not noticed at the end. Best wishes in the contest!!
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2023
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Loved your formatting of the eight words and it really grabs your attention to have that "regardless" right in the middle of the poem to shift from the "nobody" line in the beginning and all the beauty that is not noticed at the end. Best wishes in the contest!!
Comment Written 03-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2023
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Thank you, big sister. I hope I win (*<>*) but it's fun to try anyway.
Have a wonderful weekend, big sister.
Love
Marival ❤️
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I hope so, too! 💖
Comment from patcelaw
God does such beautiful paintings in the sky at night and again in the morning it is always a blessing to see a beautiful sunrise or a beautiful sunset. Your poem helps me to understand that I need to appreciate each and every sky filled with brightness. Patricia
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2023
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God does such beautiful paintings in the sky at night and again in the morning it is always a blessing to see a beautiful sunrise or a beautiful sunset. Your poem helps me to understand that I need to appreciate each and every sky filled with brightness. Patricia
Comment Written 03-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2023
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Patricia
Thank you very much for your time and kind review and helpfull feedback. Have a wonderful weekend!
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