One Thousand Cranes
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Comment from LateBloomer
Hi Gypsy, real writing. Of special note:
I am jealous of the insane with family and friends.
(The above is so true. Many people with mental health issues have no one, usually because they've burned so many bridges--not saying that it's their fault.)
Good haiku. Vivid imagery and good satori line.
Well chosen photo. Well done. Keep the blue waters flowing.
Margaret ~ LateBloomer
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reply by the author on 14-Oct-2022
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Hi Gypsy, real writing. Of special note:
I am jealous of the insane with family and friends.
(The above is so true. Many people with mental health issues have no one, usually because they've burned so many bridges--not saying that it's their fault.)
Good haiku. Vivid imagery and good satori line.
Well chosen photo. Well done. Keep the blue waters flowing.
Margaret ~ LateBloomer
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Comment Written 14-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2022
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Margaret,
Thank you for reading and reviewing my poem. Have a wonderful weekend.
Gypsy hugs
"Poetry heals the wounds inflicted by reason".- Novalis
Comment from Tom Horonzy
Really, I never knew you wrote anything but haiku and associate styles of writing like quinzaine, zanzes and 5-7-5 's etc., etc., but you did and I liked it a lot.
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2022
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Really, I never knew you wrote anything but haiku and associate styles of writing like quinzaine, zanzes and 5-7-5 's etc., etc., but you did and I liked it a lot.
Comment Written 10-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2022
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Japanese poetry is very extensive, unfortunately many Americans think it's only 5/7/5 haiku. Thank you for your interest. Thank you very much for your time and kind review and helpfull feedback.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from jake cosmos aller
very powerful poem about being a mental patient in an institution. when I was in college my roommate took too much LSD and became convinced he was the reincarnation of Jesus sent by God to save us all from nuclear war. we had to have him committed for his own safety and ours. When we visited him in the hospital, I said,
"well if you weren't crazy when you got here, you will be when you leave." they could only keep him 72 hours. We tracked down his parents who came to pick him up. They were Jehovah's witnesses and were quite insane in their own Jehovah's Witness way. I have been wanting to write a novel about this experience one of these days. The title would be God's Roomate.
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2022
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very powerful poem about being a mental patient in an institution. when I was in college my roommate took too much LSD and became convinced he was the reincarnation of Jesus sent by God to save us all from nuclear war. we had to have him committed for his own safety and ours. When we visited him in the hospital, I said,
"well if you weren't crazy when you got here, you will be when you leave." they could only keep him 72 hours. We tracked down his parents who came to pick him up. They were Jehovah's witnesses and were quite insane in their own Jehovah's Witness way. I have been wanting to write a novel about this experience one of these days. The title would be God's Roomate.
Comment Written 09-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2022
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I like the idea and title for your book. I never tried LSD. I don't like not having control of my mind. Jehovahs witnes are weird.
Thank you very much for your time, kind review, and helpfull feedback.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from Mary Vigasin
An interesting and intriguing format. Gypsy. I think it is great. Here you tackle mental illness and the effects of drugs and suicide.
It has been years since I have seen the film, but no doubt you captured the essence of the story.
Well done.
Best wishes,
Mary
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2022
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An interesting and intriguing format. Gypsy. I think it is great. Here you tackle mental illness and the effects of drugs and suicide.
It has been years since I have seen the film, but no doubt you captured the essence of the story.
Well done.
Best wishes,
Mary
Comment Written 09-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2022
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Thanks it's one of my favorite movies.
you very much for your time, kind review, and helpfull feedback.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from Ulla
Hola Marival, you probably already know that haibun is one my favourite Japanese forms and yours was no exception. It must be bleak and lonely to be in a situation like that, something that comes through both in your prose section and the haiku poem which says it all.
Quicksand mind is a wonderful satori. Un abrazo, Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2022
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Hola Marival, you probably already know that haibun is one my favourite Japanese forms and yours was no exception. It must be bleak and lonely to be in a situation like that, something that comes through both in your prose section and the haiku poem which says it all.
Quicksand mind is a wonderful satori. Un abrazo, Ulla:)))
Comment Written 09-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2022
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Gracias, guapa,
I like haibun too.
Thank you very much for your time, kind review, and helpfull feedback.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from jessizero
This really sounds like what it's like in a mental hospital. I never understood why administration insists on making patients participate in activities when the medicine makes them so drowsy. Thanks for sharing, and best wishes to you.
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2022
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This really sounds like what it's like in a mental hospital. I never understood why administration insists on making patients participate in activities when the medicine makes them so drowsy. Thanks for sharing, and best wishes to you.
Comment Written 08-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2022
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Thank you very much for your time, kind review, and helpfull feedback.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from Mike Stevens
Another fine poem, Gypsy, one that highlights a subject people need to think about, mental health, one that seems to be growing in these bizarre times
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2022
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Another fine poem, Gypsy, one that highlights a subject people need to think about, mental health, one that seems to be growing in these bizarre times
Comment Written 08-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2022
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Thank you very much for your time, kind review, and helpfull feedback.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from Pam Lonsdale
This is an interesting mix of prose and poem. I loved this movie, and I appreciate the reference to it, even though your story is unique.
Thanks for the notes - they help a lot.
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2022
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This is an interesting mix of prose and poem. I loved this movie, and I appreciate the reference to it, even though your story is unique.
Thanks for the notes - they help a lot.
Comment Written 08-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2022
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Thank you very much for your time, kind review, and helpfull feedback.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from dragonpoet
Hey Gyspsy,This is a well done haibun. The poem describes the mind of a person on drugs for mental illness and also the general psyche of one in a psych ward. The prose is a good recap of the movie.
Keep writing and stay healthy.
Joan
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2022
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Hey Gyspsy,This is a well done haibun. The poem describes the mind of a person on drugs for mental illness and also the general psyche of one in a psych ward. The prose is a good recap of the movie.
Keep writing and stay healthy.
Joan
Comment Written 08-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2022
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Thank you very much for your time, kind review, and helpfull feedback.
Gypsy hugs
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You are most welcome on all accounts, MariVal.
JOan
Comment from Charles W. Johnson
Thanks for the introduction and explanation of haibun poetry. I enjoyed your piece. Your dark prose set up the 4-4-3 beautifully. I'm curious, did you compose the 4-4-3 first and then backfill the prose, or write the prose first and complete it with the 4-4-3?
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2022
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Thanks for the introduction and explanation of haibun poetry. I enjoyed your piece. Your dark prose set up the 4-4-3 beautifully. I'm curious, did you compose the 4-4-3 first and then backfill the prose, or write the prose first and complete it with the 4-4-3?
Comment Written 08-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2022
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Hello, Charles, how wonderful of you to take the time to read and review my poem. The prose comes first and the haiku expands the story. It's a symbiotic process. I am happy you like it. Have a great day.
Gypsy
"Every sunset brings the promise of a new dawn." - Ralph Waldo Emerson
