One Thousand Cranes
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Comment from royowen
I guess we'll never really know whether creatures of the earth grieve for a lost mate, or rather, in what form is it manifest, even injury brings no negative reaction from them, they just get on with life. Beautifully written Gypsy, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2022
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I guess we'll never really know whether creatures of the earth grieve for a lost mate, or rather, in what form is it manifest, even injury brings no negative reaction from them, they just get on with life. Beautifully written Gypsy, blessings Roy
Comment Written 18-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2022
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Thank you very much for your time, kind review, and helpfull feedback.
Gypsy
"Poetry heals the wounds inflicted by reason".- Novalis
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Well done
Comment from K.L. Rockquemore
This is a melancholy verse laced with love and loss.
Your phraseology is excellent!
The sensory details that were woven together especially;
" sizzling amber waves"
and " draped with raging cries," are noteworthy.
You have penned a provocation piece that will stay with me awhile as the message lingers, like a first kiss.
I appreciate the beautiful presentation and detailed author notes.
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2022
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This is a melancholy verse laced with love and loss.
Your phraseology is excellent!
The sensory details that were woven together especially;
" sizzling amber waves"
and " draped with raging cries," are noteworthy.
You have penned a provocation piece that will stay with me awhile as the message lingers, like a first kiss.
I appreciate the beautiful presentation and detailed author notes.
Comment Written 17-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2022
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Thank you very much for your time and kind review and helpfull feedback.
Gypsy
Comment from Mary Vigasin
Very sad words. Birds often mate for life which makes these words even sadder.
Brilliant use of repetition as if we are hearing the mournful cries of the bird.
Beautifully presented and written.
Best wishes
Mary
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2022
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Very sad words. Birds often mate for life which makes these words even sadder.
Brilliant use of repetition as if we are hearing the mournful cries of the bird.
Beautifully presented and written.
Best wishes
Mary
Comment Written 17-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2022
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Thank you very much for your time and kind review.
Gypsy
"The poet waits quietly to paint the unsaid." -Atticus
Comment from AP Apgar
I like your poem - interesting format - good presentation - picture very nice - poem paints a single theme of the a little bird loss and elaborates in detail of his perceived corresponding emotions -lost love, pain in his heart, raging cries, loneliness - very descriptive good job.
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2022
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I like your poem - interesting format - good presentation - picture very nice - poem paints a single theme of the a little bird loss and elaborates in detail of his perceived corresponding emotions -lost love, pain in his heart, raging cries, loneliness - very descriptive good job.
Comment Written 17-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2022
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Thank you very much for your time and kind review.
Gypsy
"The poet waits quietly to paint the unsaid." -Atticus
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
There is much loneliness in these words as birds often mate for life and when they lose their partner they are left on their own, a deep meaningful write, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2022
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There is much loneliness in these words as birds often mate for life and when they lose their partner they are left on their own, a deep meaningful write, love Dolly x
Comment Written 17-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2022
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Thank you very much for your time and kind review.
Gypsy
"The poet waits quietly to paint the unsaid." -Atticus
Comment from lyenochka
You really used the repetition in a moving way and it mimics the bird song which repeats the same notes over and over. Many bird couples mate for life and it's really sad when one loses the other. You captured that well here.
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2022
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You really used the repetition in a moving way and it mimics the bird song which repeats the same notes over and over. Many bird couples mate for life and it's really sad when one loses the other. You captured that well here.
Comment Written 17-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2022
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Hello, Helen,
Yes, poor little bird. I know how it feels to be alone without a partner.
Thank you very much for your time and kind review.
Gypsy
"The poet waits quietly to paint the unsaid." -Atticus
Comment from LateBloomer
Hi Gypsy, your poem is beautifully penned and yet so very sad.
The thought of a lone bird on a burned bough singing his song
to empty air is heartbreaking. I can hear the yearning in his
whistle call. Your poem reads and flows well and has vivid imagery
within. Of special note:
admist cinders of lost love
(G, whether it's a bird or a person lost love burns)
Well chosen photo. Beautiful presention. A pleasure to read.
Keep the blue waters flowing. LateBloomer
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2022
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Hi Gypsy, your poem is beautifully penned and yet so very sad.
The thought of a lone bird on a burned bough singing his song
to empty air is heartbreaking. I can hear the yearning in his
whistle call. Your poem reads and flows well and has vivid imagery
within. Of special note:
admist cinders of lost love
(G, whether it's a bird or a person lost love burns)
Well chosen photo. Beautiful presention. A pleasure to read.
Keep the blue waters flowing. LateBloomer
Comment Written 16-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2022
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Hello, LateBloomer,
Thank you very much for your time and kind review.
Gypsy
"The poet waits quietly to paint the unsaid." -Atticus
Comment from Theodore McDowell
Very nice poem, Gypsy. I like the repetitive refrains that run throughout the poem and seem to stream down the page. Nice imagery throughout. Well done. Hope everything is well with you.
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2022
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Very nice poem, Gypsy. I like the repetitive refrains that run throughout the poem and seem to stream down the page. Nice imagery throughout. Well done. Hope everything is well with you.
Comment Written 16-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2022
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Thank you very much for your time, kind review, and helpfull feedback.
Gypsy
The poet waits quietly to paint the unsaid.--Atticus
Comment from Jay Squires
What a sad poem, Gypsy. It grabs your heart and won't let go. Love and loyalty can be so sad when observed in the animal kingdom, where it likes much deeper than thought, but in their very instincts for survival. Very sad! Good luck with your entry.
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2022
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What a sad poem, Gypsy. It grabs your heart and won't let go. Love and loyalty can be so sad when observed in the animal kingdom, where it likes much deeper than thought, but in their very instincts for survival. Very sad! Good luck with your entry.
Comment Written 16-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2022
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Thank you very much for your time, kind review, and helpfull feedback.
Gypsy
The poet waits quietly to paint the unsaid.--Atticus
Comment from aryr
Definitely sad but rather enjoyable reading, Gypsy. This poor little bird is crying out for its mate who has died in the forest fire. Such a sad little thing. I really enjoyed your poem. Blessed be n hugs!
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2022
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Definitely sad but rather enjoyable reading, Gypsy. This poor little bird is crying out for its mate who has died in the forest fire. Such a sad little thing. I really enjoyed your poem. Blessed be n hugs!
Comment Written 16-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2022
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Thank you very much for your time, kind review, and helpfull feedback. Blessed be and hugs <3
Gypsy
The poet waits quietly to paint the unsaid.--Atticus
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Most welcome, Gypsy. Blessed be n hugs!