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Johnnie Motorcycle rides again

Childhood games

31 total reviews 
Comment from muffinmama
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Hi Mary.
What a nostalgic trip back to childhood. Wonderful images of the games we all used to play. Eddie sounds like a true leader! Charisma shows up early.
I particularly related to you always ending up dead. My brother was 5 years older and he and his friends didn't want me tailing after them, so they always played War. Of course, I was always the first to be shot and had to stay there while they would run off to do their thing.

How lucky that children can innocently play their games without knowing what the future will bring. The imagination and courage brought to those games should not have been snuffed out in vain.

Small typos:
- "...he was, actually..." - either remove the comma or add another one after 'actually'
- "Unfortunately, he chose Ellen, she was inches taller than all of us, and..." Either a period or a semi-colon after 'Ellen'
- "I was also given a role, meet Cheeta; the chimpanzee!" Period after 'role', caps for 'meet', comma after 'Cheeta'

 Comment Written 17-Apr-2021


reply by the author on 18-Apr-2021
    Thank you for your kind comments and review.
    Thank you for your suggestions. I made the corrections.
    Regards,
    Mary
Comment from royowen
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My younger brother was a Vietnam veteran, in fact he was wounded, I missed the draft because just too old to qualify, (not that I wanted to go) but this beautifully written story is very sad Mary, but beautifully written, I enjoyed, childhood memories are quite often very sad, well done, blessings Roy

 Comment Written 16-Apr-2021


reply by the author on 16-Apr-2021
    Blessing to you Roy. I appreciate your review and kind thoughts.
    Mary
reply by royowen on 17-Apr-2021
    Good one
Comment from Gert sherwood
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Mary Vigasin your post Childhood Games
and telling us about Johnnie Motorcycle rides again. I love the beginning of your true story.
And I felt sadness at the end of your excellent story, telling that Eddie you did not see Eddie until he was 21 years old. There he was dressed in a corporal's uniform as a United States Marine during the Vietnam War.
Gert

 Comment Written 15-Apr-2021


reply by the author on 15-Apr-2021
    Thank you Gert for your kind thoughts and review. Eddie's family was popular and well-known in our neighborhood. His mom and my mom were friends and they were kind to us when she passed away. It was tough to see them so heartbroken at Eddie's wake.
    Mary
reply by Gert sherwood on 15-Apr-2021
    You are so welcomr
    Mary Vigasin
    Gert
Comment from Goodadvicechan
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This is a sad story. You did a good job to recall the young ages. Eddie was a leader in the neighborhood. Unfortunately he sacrificed his life in the war... Such is a sad story. I am sure there are many others too.

Vietnam war remind of howdy family suffer from the war too, how I lived in fear when I was a kid...

Thanks for sharing.

 Comment Written 15-Apr-2021


reply by the author on 15-Apr-2021
    Thank you for your review and kind comments.
    It is appreciated.
    Regards,
    Mary
Comment from Iza Deleanu
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I laughed reading this part - I was also given a role, meet Cheeta; the chimpanzee!: Poor girl and welcome to the jungle.
Thank you for sharing and good luck with your writings.

 Comment Written 15-Apr-2021


reply by the author on 15-Apr-2021
    Thank you for your review. It is appreciated.
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    Cheeta!
Comment from papa55mike
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We've lost too many Eddie's in too many wars and conflicts. What a wonderfully written tribute to a childhood friend. Best of luck with your writing!

Have a great day and God bless.
mike

 Comment Written 14-Apr-2021


reply by the author on 14-Apr-2021
    I truly appreciate your comments and kind thoughts. Thank you for the rating it made my day.
    Thank you again and God bless you.
    Mary
Comment from Dilettante junior
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Greatly expressed. The prose flows well from childhood to present day. Reminds us of how carefree we all were, with cartoons to emphasize our priorities. The shocking end was not expected. Blunt but very effective!

 Comment Written 14-Apr-2021


reply by the author on 14-Apr-2021
    Thank you for your review and kind words. It is appreciated.
    Regards
    Mary
Comment from Elizabeth Emerald
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Charming reminscence, proceeding to poignant reflection on his moving away--then comes a shocking twist. Gut-wrenching ending, masterfully played. Stunning piece.

 Comment Written 14-Apr-2021


reply by the author on 14-Apr-2021
    Thank you. I appreciate your review and kind comments.
    Take care and regards
    Mary
Comment from Wendy G
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Oh no, what an ending! I was shocked. You have written his story so well, and with such realism that I could imagine all the children playing together like that. However, your story is a lovely tribute to him and his courage. Very well written.

 Comment Written 14-Apr-2021


reply by the author on 14-Apr-2021
    Thank you Wendy. I appreciate your kind thoughts and review.
    Take care and Regards,
    Mary
Comment from Leann DS
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I smiled throughout the beginning of your essay, as the activities you describe where charming and very like many girls all over the United States and elsewhere. Then, bang! I can't believe he died in the war. So sad. Thank you for sharing this. Hugs and blessings to you.

 Comment Written 13-Apr-2021


reply by the author on 13-Apr-2021
    Thank you for your review and particularly your kind thoughts.
    It is appreciated.
    Regards.
    Mary