NaPoWriMo 2021
Viewing comments for Chapter 3 "3. Play"NaPoWriMo 2021 Poetry Challenge
16 total reviews
Comment from Sharon Davis
A great reminder of a popular childhood game. This Cube16 poem is well composed and recreates the game's rules in a very creative manner. The artwork you paired with the poem fits perfectly.
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2021
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A great reminder of a popular childhood game. This Cube16 poem is well composed and recreates the game's rules in a very creative manner. The artwork you paired with the poem fits perfectly.
Comment Written 04-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2021
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Thank you so much for your lovely feedback, Sharon :)
Best wishes, Debra
Comment from Joanne Gill-Maddick
This is a nicely written cube 16 poem. Very well written. I remember playing hide and seek as a child. My children played it and now the grandkids. Nice children's poem. great photo to go with your words as well ð???
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2021
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This is a nicely written cube 16 poem. Very well written. I remember playing hide and seek as a child. My children played it and now the grandkids. Nice children's poem. great photo to go with your words as well ð???
Comment Written 04-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2021
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Thank you so much, Joanne, for your lovely feedback. I appreciate it. Best wishes, Debra :)
Comment from Lulube
loved the game as well, especially in a new home your visiting. lol
nice style. great rhymes, but noticed a small error in last verse. Going with the abcb rhyming scheme, you should change base to home (or equivalent) to stay true.
lulube
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2021
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loved the game as well, especially in a new home your visiting. lol
nice style. great rhymes, but noticed a small error in last verse. Going with the abcb rhyming scheme, you should change base to home (or equivalent) to stay true.
lulube
Comment Written 04-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2021
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Hi Lulube :)
Thanks for the feedback. You're right! I didn't even notice I'd slipped into an abab rhyme scheme LOL
Thanks for the nod!
Best wishes, Debra
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lol intense writing debra
lulube
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
I loved the last line even though it is out of meter as (ready) is stressed on the first syllable, but it still works for me, a fine write Debra, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2021
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I loved the last line even though it is out of meter as (ready) is stressed on the first syllable, but it still works for me, a fine write Debra, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
Comment Written 04-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2021
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Hi Dolly :) Thank you for your feedback! I thought the same thing myself about the last line, but I thought I'd turn a blind eye!
Thank you for the nod, though, I appreciate it :) Best wishes as always, Debra
Comment from Gloria ....
Z's Cube is the perfect form choice for this delightful poem. Hide and Seek was a fun game for sure, and of course no one peeked, yes? Perfect rhyme and metre and just the thing for we forever children at heart.
A fine entry into your NaPo project, Debra. :))
Gloria
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2021
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Z's Cube is the perfect form choice for this delightful poem. Hide and Seek was a fun game for sure, and of course no one peeked, yes? Perfect rhyme and metre and just the thing for we forever children at heart.
A fine entry into your NaPo project, Debra. :))
Gloria
Comment Written 03-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2021
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Thank you so much, Gloria :) I appreciate your feedback. Best wishes, Debra
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
I enjoyed your fun cube16 for the club, Debra. Your lines read smooth and at a quickened pace. You did a great job recounting the rules of the game. We always played it like you mentioned in your notes about running back to base. Your picture is perfect for your well-composed poem. Thanks for sharing.
Respectfully, Jan
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2021
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I enjoyed your fun cube16 for the club, Debra. Your lines read smooth and at a quickened pace. You did a great job recounting the rules of the game. We always played it like you mentioned in your notes about running back to base. Your picture is perfect for your well-composed poem. Thanks for sharing.
Respectfully, Jan
Comment Written 03-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2021
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Thank you so much, Jan :) I appreciate your feedback. Best wishes as always, Debra
Comment from Elizabeth Emerald
Charming--print this up in color for the kiddies--perhaps they'll be tempted to play outdoors for a change rather than on their iphones. Evocative of the old days!
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2021
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Charming--print this up in color for the kiddies--perhaps they'll be tempted to play outdoors for a change rather than on their iphones. Evocative of the old days!
Comment Written 03-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2021
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Great idea! Thanks for the feedback, Liz :)
Best wishes, Debra
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
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by Debra White
Hello, Debra,
Congratulations with keeping up with the NaPoWriMo 2021 challenge. I loved the hide and seek game when I was little. You followed the cube 16 rules well, as far as I can tell. Well done!
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2021
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by Debra White
Hello, Debra,
Congratulations with keeping up with the NaPoWriMo 2021 challenge. I loved the hide and seek game when I was little. You followed the cube 16 rules well, as far as I can tell. Well done!
Comment Written 03-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2021
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Thanks, Gypsy :) Best wishes, Debra
Comment from lyenochka
This is just the perfect poem to describe a children's game. The peppy short lines build up excitement. It's a game known and played all around the world.
Lets play a game (Let's) for the contraction
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2021
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This is just the perfect poem to describe a children's game. The peppy short lines build up excitement. It's a game known and played all around the world.
Lets play a game (Let's) for the contraction
Comment Written 03-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2021
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Hi Helen, thanks for the great review and also for picking up on my schoolgirl error! I appreciate it :)
Best wishes, Debra
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Great artwork and
presentation, Debra.
-Notes are appreciated.
-The form fits the topic very well.
-Effective imagery and rhyme
as you describe the game.
-A child would enjoy hearing
or reading this poem.
-I can hear all kinds of responses,
like, "Can we play now, please?!"
-Well done.
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2021
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-Great artwork and
presentation, Debra.
-Notes are appreciated.
-The form fits the topic very well.
-Effective imagery and rhyme
as you describe the game.
-A child would enjoy hearing
or reading this poem.
-I can hear all kinds of responses,
like, "Can we play now, please?!"
-Well done.
Comment Written 03-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2021
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Hello Pam :)
Thank you so much for your lovely feedback. I appreciate your kind encouragement.
Best wishes, Debra
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You are very welcome, Debra.