NaPoWriMo 2021
Viewing comments for Chapter 1 "1. Firsts"NaPoWriMo 2021 Poetry Challenge
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Comment from Pam (respa)
-Nice image, Debra, and
a good choice for your
first word in the list.
-You wrote a very nice
tribute to your firstborn
son, with all of firsts
that have been or are
still to come.
-A very good conclusion, too.
-Continued success in NaPoWriMo!
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2021
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-Nice image, Debra, and
a good choice for your
first word in the list.
-You wrote a very nice
tribute to your firstborn
son, with all of firsts
that have been or are
still to come.
-A very good conclusion, too.
-Continued success in NaPoWriMo!
Comment Written 02-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2021
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Thank you so much, Pam, for your lovely feedback. I appreciate your good wishes for the challenge too :)
Kind regards, Debra
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You are very welcome, Debra.
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
I didn't realise how clever we are!! We learn most of that in our first five years. The rest takes a little longer. Lol. This is a lovely poem for your firstborn, Debra, they are always special, but you also have that first feeling when we see the second babe for the first time.... Live is amazing. Poem one, 29 to go. Well done, my friend. Happy Easter. :)) Sandra xx
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2021
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I didn't realise how clever we are!! We learn most of that in our first five years. The rest takes a little longer. Lol. This is a lovely poem for your firstborn, Debra, they are always special, but you also have that first feeling when we see the second babe for the first time.... Live is amazing. Poem one, 29 to go. Well done, my friend. Happy Easter. :)) Sandra xx
Comment Written 02-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2021
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Hi Sandra :)
Completely true... you feel the same overwhelming and unconditional love for each baby that comes along.
Thank you for your lovely feedback. 29 to go.... indeed! LOL (Help!)
Best wishes, Debra x
Comment from 4theloveoftrees
Hello there! A beautiful first entry for the contest, all about all of the firsts in life. I love it. This is beautifully written and an enjoyable read.
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2021
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Hello there! A beautiful first entry for the contest, all about all of the firsts in life. I love it. This is beautifully written and an enjoyable read.
Comment Written 01-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2021
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Thank you so much, for your lovely feedback :)
Best wishes, Debra
Comment from Elizabeth Emerald
Charming and poignant--brilliant wrap-up! Kudos for not taking the obvious route by playing off April Fools' Day. I'd been anticipating the theme of wicked pranks you pulled!
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2021
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Charming and poignant--brilliant wrap-up! Kudos for not taking the obvious route by playing off April Fools' Day. I'd been anticipating the theme of wicked pranks you pulled!
Comment Written 01-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2021
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Hi Liz :) Thank you for your lovely feedback.
Best wishes, Debra
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Firsts
by Debra White
I bet Ben loved his poem. My first born is a girl. I had her at 17, we grew up together. I miss her very much. I haven't seen her for over a year.
It's a lovely rhymed poem many can relate to.
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2021
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Firsts
by Debra White
I bet Ben loved his poem. My first born is a girl. I had her at 17, we grew up together. I miss her very much. I haven't seen her for over a year.
It's a lovely rhymed poem many can relate to.
Comment Written 01-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2021
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Hi Gypsy, Thank you for your feedback.
I'm sorry you haven't been able to see your daughter for so long. I can only imagine how tough that must be. Hugs.
Ben will be 16 in June, he acts embarrassed by 'mum being mushy' but I think he secretly appreciates it!
Best wishes, Debra
Comment from lyenochka
This is such a beautiful poem! I hope you'll share it with your beautiful firstborn. It really shows a mother's heart, rejoicing in the the growth of her baby. Every mother can relate to this.
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2021
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This is such a beautiful poem! I hope you'll share it with your beautiful firstborn. It really shows a mother's heart, rejoicing in the the growth of her baby. Every mother can relate to this.
Comment Written 01-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2021
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Thank you so much, Helen, for your lovely feedback. Best wishes, Debra :)
Comment from royowen
They say that first born children hold a special place in a mother's heart, not a favourite place, but a special place. This was beautifully written and great present for the apple of your eye, well done, Debra, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2021
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They say that first born children hold a special place in a mother's heart, not a favourite place, but a special place. This was beautifully written and great present for the apple of your eye, well done, Debra, blessings Roy
Comment Written 01-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2021
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Thank you so much, Roy :)
Best wishes, Debra
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Bless you
Comment from Iza Deleanu
I love your poem , you are right it's a reminder that we need to be grateful for what we have: "
First dates, first love, first broken heart,
first job, first home, first drunk tattoo.
Of all my firsts, I treasure most
my answered prayer - My firstborn. You." Thank you for sharing and good luck with your writings.
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2021
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I love your poem , you are right it's a reminder that we need to be grateful for what we have: "
First dates, first love, first broken heart,
first job, first home, first drunk tattoo.
Of all my firsts, I treasure most
my answered prayer - My firstborn. You." Thank you for sharing and good luck with your writings.
Comment Written 01-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2021
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Thank you, Iza, for your feedback :)
Best wishes, Debra
Comment from Sugarray77
Debra, this is a wonderful poem to start your NaPo book. I love the affection and fondness incorporated in the examples you list for the firsts. So well done!!
Melissa
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2021
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Debra, this is a wonderful poem to start your NaPo book. I love the affection and fondness incorporated in the examples you list for the firsts. So well done!!
Melissa
Comment Written 01-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2021
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Thank you so much, Melissa, for your lovely feedback. Best wishes, Debra :)
Comment from rindy ryan
I would consider the layout of this. The ending really touched me. Super sweet! I wonder why you used "flush" instead of "blush"? And I understand you put tattoo where you did to rhyme, but it seems terribly out of time order. ;)
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reply by the author on 01-Apr-2021
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I would consider the layout of this. The ending really touched me. Super sweet! I wonder why you used "flush" instead of "blush"? And I understand you put tattoo where you did to rhyme, but it seems terribly out of time order. ;)
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Comment Written 01-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2021
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Hello :)
Thank you for your lovely feedback, I'm glad you enjoyed my poem!
Thanks for your questions too! Here's my answers ;)
When I wrote 'first flush of youth', the first 'flush' of anything means: the beginning or early stages of something or a time when something is new and exciting.
I put the 'drunk tattoo' where I did in the timeline because, a) as you said, it fit with the rhyme scheme (LOL) and b) because I got my one and only tattoo when I was 41!
Thanks again :) Debra
