Comment from tdragonfly

Exceptional

The poem starts out with how one so willingly gives themselves in lust. Only to become hopelessly and completely in love.

 Comment Written 24-Aug-2014

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reply by the author on 24-Aug-2014

True, so very true, tdragonfly...

Thanks for your kind review and exceptional rating. Not doing too well in the contest now, but it is still very early in the game. I sincerely appreciate it!

reply by tdragonfly on 24-Aug-2014

But you have done good. Do not lose sight of that. Deborah

Comment from MissMerri

Excellent

This poem is almost funny, with its over-the-top Shakespearean language and effusive descriptions, (ranging from soft, divine skin to my favorite, "loathsome succubus") but at the same time, it describes a situation so believable, and real in any century, of lust and surrender in spite of conscience. I am torn between laughter and tears with this one, not sure what the writer intended, but nevertheless, impressed with the story-telling and poetic skill of its author. Most interesting poem!

 Comment Written 24-Aug-2014

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reply by the author on 24-Aug-2014

Thanks, MissMerri. Now, if only more voters felt as you do, perhaps I would be laughing right along with you, LOL.

I really appreciate the very entertaining review and comments, my friend. Much obliged.:)

Comment from Titan Black

Excellent

Very Nice poetic alliteration, that you
use. You have a way with expressing words.
And you had my attention throughout. Nice
job. Keep writing.

 Comment Written 24-Aug-2014

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reply by the author on 24-Aug-2014

Thanks, TB, that's good, right? Being able to hold someone's attention throughout, I mean?

Thanks for the read & review.:)

Comment from kiwijenny

Excellent

Oooooo delightfully dark..........a succubus......what is it's fare? Will it take you any where....fueled by love so poisonous......you realize it but get it anyway...like putting diesel in when gas is needed....I know it's a prompt ...but still...I ........hope you know I am punning:o) I enjoyed the ride your poem takes us on
God bless

 Comment Written 24-Aug-2014

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reply by the author on 24-Aug-2014

Ha, yeah, and I happen to like to have a little pun now and again myself, kiwijenny.

I appreciate the punny...er-r, ha-ha...I mean funny review.:)

Comment from w.j.debi

Exceptional

She certainly has an evil glint in her eye. Interesting tale and so other worldly. It is the first time I can recall a succubus being mentioned on the site, but so fitting to the theme of the prompt. The writing is excellent. You use alliteration and assonance to wonderful effect which makes this fun to read aloud.

 Comment Written 24-Aug-2014

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reply by the author on 24-Aug-2014

Yes, she sure does, doesn't she, Debi?

I'm happy to know that you read and review poetry aloud. I feel it is necessary to get the full effect, don't you? I wish it were doing up to the standards of your exceptional rating and review in the voting booth, but I do appreciate it all the same.:}

Comment from sweetwoodjax

Excellent

this is very well written, mystery writer (wink wink) you created an excellent poem about the love that is supernatural and unnatural but can't be rejected. I wish you the best of luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 24-Aug-2014

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reply by the author on 24-Aug-2014

Yeah, well, I'm gonna' need lots of luck in this one, sweet.

I truly appreciate the review.

Comment from royowen

Excellent

I had one love for me, we first liaised when I was a boy of 18, that went bad, heartbreaking for me! The second with her was 9years later, same result, it left me broken, I didn't learn the first time! So your poem I relate to, very, although yours is a little 'unusual', a very good write eery and articulate, I bet I know who wrote it! Well done and good luck, blessings, Roy.

 Comment Written 24-Aug-2014

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reply by the author on 24-Aug-2014

Yeah, it is a bit eerie, Roy. But love is often eerie as well. Or, I should clarify and say lust.

Thanks for the review.

Comment from Eric1

Excellent

This is a superb and beautifully written poem for this competition, I have a feeling I know this poet, I kept thinking, where have I heard 'Fair thee well' before, it was of course in the Dubliners song, 'The leaving of Liverpool', A great poem with good rhyme and proximate rhyme, a great rhythm and a wonderful flow, good luck in the contest my friend.

 Comment Written 24-Aug-2014

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reply by the author on 24-Aug-2014

Thanks, Eric, and as always, I really appreciate your opinions and review.:)

reply by Eric1 on 24-Aug-2014

You are very welcome my friend.

Comment from rhonny

Good

A gallant effort to describe the pains of love-gone0wrong. However I think the lines that attempt to rhyme are out of sync and aren't true rhymes. I think free-verse would be better hire.

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 Comment Written 24-Aug-2014

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reply by the author on 24-Aug-2014

"I think free-verse would be better hire here." And I think "here" would have been better...well, here, rhonny.

Thanks for the review, lol...

Comment from James Dooney

Excellent

Yep she looks like an angel but has the eyes of a bitch !! Good work here I must say. And good luck for the writing prompt !

 Comment Written 24-Aug-2014

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reply by the author on 24-Aug-2014

Thanks, James, i appreciate the well wishes for the contest. It looks like I'm gonna need 'em, buddy!:)