Letters to a Hurricane
Just for fun ABC's of Hurricanes.30 total reviews
Comment from 24chas
I enjoyed this read, Tina. After having been through countless hurricanes, I can appreciate your poem. Good job with the ABC's, and expectedly works for me.
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2019
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I enjoyed this read, Tina. After having been through countless hurricanes, I can appreciate your poem. Good job with the ABC's, and expectedly works for me.
Comment Written 09-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2019
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This was my first try at an acrostic and it was fun, wracking my brain for violent words! Thank you so so much. This encourages me:)
Comment from misscookie
I love the artwork you choose to go with your poem
It is a perfect match
You captured my attention from the first line to the last I could vision the angry water come to a higher plateau only to harshly pushing to intertwine with the rest of the sea.
Thank you for sharing this interesting write.
Cookie
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2019
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I love the artwork you choose to go with your poem
It is a perfect match
You captured my attention from the first line to the last I could vision the angry water come to a higher plateau only to harshly pushing to intertwine with the rest of the sea.
Thank you for sharing this interesting write.
Cookie
Comment Written 09-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2019
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Miss Cookie, you are so poetic, even in your messages and reviews! Bless your heart for taking the time to review my little poem! So glad you liked it!
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Sometimes my muse never stops. when I need it sometimes it's asleep. (smile)I enjoyed reading your work my friend
Hugs and prayers to you and yours.
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Comment from kiwijenny
Gallavanting gusts, generate
Huge, howling horror,
Inevitably imparting injury. It
Jostles and jumps, (just joking). It
Kisses land with karate kicks, and ....I loved the roller coaster goofiness of this,,,
God bless
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2019
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Gallavanting gusts, generate
Huge, howling horror,
Inevitably imparting injury. It
Jostles and jumps, (just joking). It
Kisses land with karate kicks, and ....I loved the roller coaster goofiness of this,,,
God bless
Comment Written 09-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2019
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Roller coaster goofiness...yes, that's a good description! I didn't want to be too serious, as it's a terrible thing to be in a hurricane! To me, its like a bull in a china shop....as my mom used to say about us kids in the house, lol. God bless, and thanks for the review and input:)
Comment from Lance S. Loria
Good artwork. Nice work on ABC structure with a few exceptions. In the first line for A's the word Ocean stands out. In 2nd line a minor typo with space comma. In the K's line the word land stands out. Nice creative work!! Thanks for sharing.
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reply by the author on 09-Apr-2019
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Good artwork. Nice work on ABC structure with a few exceptions. In the first line for A's the word Ocean stands out. In 2nd line a minor typo with space comma. In the K's line the word land stands out. Nice creative work!! Thanks for sharing.
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Comment Written 09-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2019
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Thank you for your detailed corrections. I will look at them. I got so excited writing it, that I hurried, I guess. Thanks for your input.
Comment from Coco Jane
Nicely done!
You stretch the vocabulary well.
The only suggestion I have is to consider using dashes in the last lines. Thus:
Yielding--yes, you guessed it--
Zero.
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2019
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Nicely done!
You stretch the vocabulary well.
The only suggestion I have is to consider using dashes in the last lines. Thus:
Yielding--yes, you guessed it--
Zero.
Comment Written 09-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2019
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I responded to this in a message, but thank you again! You really made me gasp when I opened the message. My hubby asked what was the matter, lol!
Have a great day tomorrow:)
Comment from LisaMay
I can see you have quite a bit of fun creating this poem, first through having to pay attention to the acrostic, then wrestling the language to fit, and also relishing the words themselves. There's some lovely alliteration here, I particularly liked "Wielding worrisome wreckage".
Just a couple of blips:
Breeze ,blown (delete space before comma, put space after it)
Gallavanting (this word is spelled Gallivanting)
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2019
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I can see you have quite a bit of fun creating this poem, first through having to pay attention to the acrostic, then wrestling the language to fit, and also relishing the words themselves. There's some lovely alliteration here, I particularly liked "Wielding worrisome wreckage".
Just a couple of blips:
Breeze ,blown (delete space before comma, put space after it)
Gallavanting (this word is spelled Gallivanting)
Comment Written 09-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2019
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Thank you for the tips. I will take a look! It was fun...my first time at it. Thank you for the review!
Comment from susand3022
I'd never seen an 'ABC' poem like this before. I like it! A hurricane was a fine choice and you had a lot of great words to chose from. I'm an East Coast girl so I've been through my share! I don't know that I'd have used "Zero"... that one did confuse me before I read the Author's notes... maybe something about zig-zag lightning... zap! lol I know it's not the most common element... but I've seen it happen! ;)
Loved the Painting too, what a wild ride! :)
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2019
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I'd never seen an 'ABC' poem like this before. I like it! A hurricane was a fine choice and you had a lot of great words to chose from. I'm an East Coast girl so I've been through my share! I don't know that I'd have used "Zero"... that one did confuse me before I read the Author's notes... maybe something about zig-zag lightning... zap! lol I know it's not the most common element... but I've seen it happen! ;)
Loved the Painting too, what a wild ride! :)
Comment Written 09-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2019
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Yes "z" was a toughie...I did consider zig-zag ruining! What do you think? Thanks for your input!
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Yeah... Z's a real toughie alright... I know why you discarded that one... the storm itself doesn't really zig, or zag... the lightning IS more likely to be seen in a Nor' Easter or maybe a Bomb Cyclone... I'm certain it can be found in all of those central state storms, tornadoes and the like... (glad I don't live there!) I'll take my two-week long storm warning... thanks! lol
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I am still contemplating the "z" thing, lol...may change it any day! I do so appreciate your input:)
Comment from Ross E Silke
This is a very interesting read with lots of unique imagers and it flows nicely. I appreciate the message and it's written succinctly. It is fairly easy to read and follow. I like the blue colours and the picture attracts the reader and hooks them in. It's beautifully detailed and captivating. I'm not sure the 'X' needs to be capitalized in 'eXpectedly'--is that intentional? Very clever the thoughts, imagery, and imagination. Good job
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2019
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This is a very interesting read with lots of unique imagers and it flows nicely. I appreciate the message and it's written succinctly. It is fairly easy to read and follow. I like the blue colours and the picture attracts the reader and hooks them in. It's beautifully detailed and captivating. I'm not sure the 'X' needs to be capitalized in 'eXpectedly'--is that intentional? Very clever the thoughts, imagery, and imagination. Good job
Comment Written 09-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2019
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Yes, intentional because I didn't use a word beginning with an "x". Perhaps I could leave it lower case. I will consider, Thanks! Thank you for the read and review!
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Or maybe just include it in your author notes as to why--:0) Thanks for your reply; now I understand better
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Ok, I will do that. Thanks, friend. I am no longer mad at you that I failed your fruit test, lol. I thought I aced it, haha!
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Oh, lol, I guess I could lose friends that way if they don't pass with the score they want, ha! 6/10 is a pass though!--you didn't fail, lol. :0)) You still get your fruit diploma, you can always retry for 'honours,' lol!
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I really don't like fruit very much, so its fair! No worries:) I have to force myself to eat it sometimes!
Comment from Miss Sherry
This is my first experience with an ABC poem and you have written it so well I will have no trouble trying one myself. I learn best by observation. Love your artwork...the ocean is my passion. You have done a splendid job with this!
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2019
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This is my first experience with an ABC poem and you have written it so well I will have no trouble trying one myself. I learn best by observation. Love your artwork...the ocean is my passion. You have done a splendid job with this!
Comment Written 09-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2019
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Thank you! It was my first. You will like it, it's fun. I'm going to try a new form or style more often. I like the ocean but my husband , he loves it like you do!
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Thank you! It was my first. You will like it, it's fun. I'm going to try a new form or style more often. I like the ocean but my husband , he loves it like you do!
Comment from TPAC
A beautiful read, having many delights to desire, although I disagree about the zero, seeing action more like one sweep a house. All given in my opinion about this conveyance.
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2019
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A beautiful read, having many delights to desire, although I disagree about the zero, seeing action more like one sweep a house. All given in my opinion about this conveyance.
Comment Written 08-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2019
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Thank you for your review and for your opinion! When I said yielding zero I was trying to convey that a hurricane is unyielding, but I guess it comes across more the way you're saying. I will take another look at it and try to make it more clear. I really appreciate you commenting on that. Thanks!
