Comment from Mastery

Excellent

Outstanding sonnet, Luna. I see magic in your words, like these lines:

"Where centaurs bold and fairies bright
come play together in the night,
under the smiling moon they prance.
Mystical meadow creatures dance."

Good rhymes all the way through, too.

Bravo! Bob

 Comment Written 17-Nov-2016

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reply by the author on 17-Nov-2016

Dear Bob,

I'm honored by your kind and thoughtful review. Thank you for seeing magic in my words and showing me that particular stanza. I'm thrilled that this poem reached you in the way I had hoped it would reach those who read it.

I hope to see you again soon. ❤️ ❤️ ❤️

Comment from William Ross

Excellent

very good, nicely done on this style sonnet, has good rhyming with good meter reads and flows great. Thanks for the share on this mystical poem, and have a great day.

 Comment Written 17-Nov-2016

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reply by the author on 17-Nov-2016

Dear William, thank you for your kind and thoughtful review of my poem. I hope to see you again soon. ❤️ ❤️ ❤️

Comment from LIJ Red

Excellent

The Kyreille sonnet form seems to be the backbone of this post, although the imagery calls to mind the 34th chapter of Isaiah, Centaurs, satyrs and the lilith
dancing in the moonlight...excellent use of the form, fine images.

 Comment Written 17-Nov-2016

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reply by the author on 17-Nov-2016

Dear red,

I'm happy the imagery in this piece touched you.

thank you for your kind and thoughtful review of my poem. I hope to see you again soon. ❤️ ❤️ ❤️

Comment from MelB

Excellent

Hi Luna, beautiful artwork and poem. Wonderful rhyme and flow. Syllable count is spot on. I read your profile. I'm deeply sorry to hear of the loss of your son. I've heard the battle is very hard to fight against heroin.

 Comment Written 17-Nov-2016

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reply by the author on 17-Nov-2016

Dear Mel

Thanks so very much for your kind condolences and for your kind words regarding my poetry.

Comment from Thal1959

Exceptional

One of the best poems I have read on Fanstory. The theme, story, wording, rhymes and rhythm are all perfect. About the only thing that would have made this better, is if you could have gotten a screen shot from "A Midsummer's Night Dream," with its many dancing faeries, and of course, Mickey Rooney!

 Comment Written 16-Nov-2016

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reply by the author on 17-Nov-2016

Dear Thal, I'm shocked and honored by this six star reeve on my poem, and indeed your extraordinarily kind words regarding my poetry. I can't thank you bé.

reply by Thal1959 on 17-Nov-2016

You're welcome. It was my pleasure.

Comment from frogbook

Excellent

Quite lovely and etheal. I was touched by your profile. A very sad and all too frequent tragedy. My daughter was using heroin. She is clean for now and in jail. Sadly i feel she is safer. God bless. JoAnn.

 Comment Written 16-Nov-2016

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reply by the author on 17-Nov-2016

JoAnn,

Thank you so kindly for your condolences and for sharing a piece of your personal life with me.

I'm happy you enjoyed my writing. I definitely hope to see you again soon and will seek out and read your work. ❤️ ❤️ ❤️

Comment from crybry67

Excellent

I am so sorry for your loss.

Your poem is beautifully written. You've given it excellent rhyme and rhythm, wonderful flow. I love the alliteration used.

 Comment Written 16-Nov-2016

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reply by the author on 21-Nov-2016

Thank you so much for your condolences.

I'm sorry this reply to your kind review is so late. I've just returned from Philadelphia dealing with the loss of my dear sister-in-law. I hope you understand.

Again, thank you for the review!

Comment from Irish Rain

Excellent

I just love this, I love the Kyrielle form, itself, and the refrain you chose, 'Mystical meadow creatures dance', is quite memorable...lovely tribute to your son, blessings...

 Comment Written 16-Nov-2016

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reply by the author on 21-Nov-2016

Thanks for your lovely review, Irish Rain! I'll be visiting your portfolio in a very short time.

I'm sorry this reply to your kind review is so late. I've just returned from Philadelphia dealing with the loss of my dear sister-in-law. I hope you understand.

Again, thank you for the review!

Comment from Cindy Warren

Excellent

That's lovely. You make it easy to imagine all the little creatures dancing in a moonlit meadow. I'm sure Mickey would love it. Great picture and color scheme.

 Comment Written 16-Nov-2016

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reply by the author on 21-Nov-2016

I'm sorry this reply to your kind review is so late. I've just returned from Philadelphia dealing with the loss of my dear sister-in-law. I hope you understand.

Again, thank you for the review!

Comment from Janet Foor

Exceptional

So sorry for your loss Luna. No parent should lose a child..
Your poem is like a fantasy, almost lyrical and mystical with a sing-song cadence. I enjoyed reading it aloud.

Well done.

Blessings
Janet

 Comment Written 16-Nov-2016

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reply by the author on 21-Nov-2016

Dear Janet,

I must thank you for the WONDERFUL six-star review and your condolences as well. I'm glad you enoyed reading it aloud!