Sonnets
Viewing comments for Chapter 2 "A Tryst For Three"A collection of sonnets
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Comment from ProjectBluebook
alliterations: creating a calloused coarse cover. spent with smiles. rigor mortis this word I like but I always get red-lined when I use it. This is the only way to spell it. The orange-red jumps out at you against the black dark matter. the words are just as good as the image. Count your doubloon. Well, they got me sixers already. This is a virtual six, all I got but this is a six, do not mistaken readers. I'm astonished, I really thought this looked like Dean's darkness. .
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alliterations: creating a calloused coarse cover. spent with smiles. rigor mortis this word I like but I always get red-lined when I use it. This is the only way to spell it. The orange-red jumps out at you against the black dark matter. the words are just as good as the image. Count your doubloon. Well, they got me sixers already. This is a virtual six, all I got but this is a six, do not mistaken readers. I'm astonished, I really thought this looked like Dean's darkness. .
Comment Written 24-Jun-2015
Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca
Your soul will be damned because you went against the rules and restrictions.
But I loved it. you are right, iambic would have ruined the whole thing. My last poem I submitted, I was cut down because the words didn't rhyme, but then I was disqualified from another because they said no rhyming but told me that moon and bloom were rhyming words. Cant win.
Anyway, I loved it
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Your soul will be damned because you went against the rules and restrictions.
But I loved it. you are right, iambic would have ruined the whole thing. My last poem I submitted, I was cut down because the words didn't rhyme, but then I was disqualified from another because they said no rhyming but told me that moon and bloom were rhyming words. Cant win.
Anyway, I loved it
Comment Written 24-Jun-2015
Comment from Jacqueline M Franklin
Hi, Mike...
_ This fella is one a person should never cross.
_ Who knew he'd get so ticked off?
_ And they say women are not to be trifled with.
_ I did want to draw and quarter my ex when I caught him cheating-----but, jail did not appeal to me. No sir!
_ Another super job!
Cheers & Blessings
Keep Smilin'... Jax (*:*)
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Hi, Mike...
_ This fella is one a person should never cross.
_ Who knew he'd get so ticked off?
_ And they say women are not to be trifled with.
_ I did want to draw and quarter my ex when I caught him cheating-----but, jail did not appeal to me. No sir!
_ Another super job!
Cheers & Blessings
Keep Smilin'... Jax (*:*)
Comment Written 23-Jun-2015
Comment from nordicgirl
This is a wonderful and unique piece. Your skill with words is apparent. This flows as it should pausing and flowing by your design. I agree, pure iambic would not have suited nearly as well. True poetry. What a genius opening line!
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This is a wonderful and unique piece. Your skill with words is apparent. This flows as it should pausing and flowing by your design. I agree, pure iambic would not have suited nearly as well. True poetry. What a genius opening line!
Comment Written 23-Jun-2015
Comment from Linda Engel
Oh Mike, what big teeth you have. And you certainly took a bite out of her affair. A taste of revenge is at times sweet to the tongue. I like the no rules form , free verse, story telling. It is the storytelling that will catch the eye. nicely done. (remind me to never make you mad).
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Oh Mike, what big teeth you have. And you certainly took a bite out of her affair. A taste of revenge is at times sweet to the tongue. I like the no rules form , free verse, story telling. It is the storytelling that will catch the eye. nicely done. (remind me to never make you mad).
Comment Written 23-Jun-2015
Comment from His Grayness
This one is a true ripper! Make that a Shocker! with huge grip of photo and verse to hold the reader compelled all the way from beginning to end! I'm sorry to be short of the deserved sixth star but shall prick my finger and place some blood on my keyboard to bury my shame! Love this! Thanks, HIS GRAYNESS: Vance
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This one is a true ripper! Make that a Shocker! with huge grip of photo and verse to hold the reader compelled all the way from beginning to end! I'm sorry to be short of the deserved sixth star but shall prick my finger and place some blood on my keyboard to bury my shame! Love this! Thanks, HIS GRAYNESS: Vance
Comment Written 23-Jun-2015
Comment from Julia.
Love the last two lines of this; they're a great close to the poem. Overall, though, even though this fell out of iambic pentameter a bit, it still sounds pretty good--and modern sonnets don't have to be strictly iambic all the way through. Much more variation is allowed, even in the rhyme scheme.
AS for blank verse, there are really few restrictions other than a regular meter and no set rhyme scheme (you can still have internal rhymes and scattered end rhymes if you like).
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Love the last two lines of this; they're a great close to the poem. Overall, though, even though this fell out of iambic pentameter a bit, it still sounds pretty good--and modern sonnets don't have to be strictly iambic all the way through. Much more variation is allowed, even in the rhyme scheme.
AS for blank verse, there are really few restrictions other than a regular meter and no set rhyme scheme (you can still have internal rhymes and scattered end rhymes if you like).
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Comment Written 23-Jun-2015
Comment from justafan
OH SNAP...love gone horribly wrong!!! Hi you lil rascal welcome home :) It's good to see your still out there breaking all the rules ... lol. I like it Mikey :)
Always your fan,
Missy
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OH SNAP...love gone horribly wrong!!! Hi you lil rascal welcome home :) It's good to see your still out there breaking all the rules ... lol. I like it Mikey :)
Always your fan,
Missy
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Comment Written 23-Jun-2015
