Comment from winnona

Exceptional

Your choice of words say just enough to get the point across. The rest is all on the reader to fill in the gaps with their imagination and ideas. The sound effects and visual effects complete the piece into much more than a poem. Very well done.

 Comment Written 10-Jun-2016

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reply by the author on 10-Jun-2016

Thank you very much for reading and reviewing AGHAST, winnona.
I am very pleased to know that you enjoyed it, and your six stars are jsut the icing on an already sweet cake.
Much obliged...

Comment from danpald

Excellent

The night in the swamp
The sounds so harsh
Filling the air with fear
When the green rises so near

May it be only swamp gas
Yet there is the grasp
For the heart skips a beat
Just to hear the swamp creak

 Comment Written 08-Jun-2016

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reply by the author on 08-Jun-2016

Thank you for your as always poetic reply, Dan.
~Dean

Comment from Stephanie Kastner

Excellent

I always love the visual effects that accompany your poems. Halloween must be your favorite holiday. You do a good job creating suspense within the confines of a poem. And it seems you followed the rules of an Octogram Poem, although, to tell you the truth, that seems like a lot of rules to follow.

 Comment Written 07-Jun-2016

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reply by the author on 08-Jun-2016

Octogram poetry is not too difficult to write once you get the hang of it, Stephanie.
Thanks so much for the R&R.
~Dean :}

Comment from Treischel

Excellent

No that's putting an Octogram to spooky use as your repeated like invokes how frozen in his tracks your victim really is, upon seeing that pulsating green phantasm. Very spooky bog.

 Comment Written 07-Jun-2016

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reply by the author on 07-Jun-2016

Thank you as always for your R&R, Tom.
I deeply appreciate you taking the time to read it.
~Dean

Comment from tfawcus

Excellent

Your usual superb presentation enhances this creepy tale superbly. The repeated line and the haunting quality of an echo and your word choice builds a chilling atmosphere.

 Comment Written 07-Jun-2016

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reply by the author on 07-Jun-2016

Thank you very much for taking the time to read and comment on AGHAST, Tony.
I do appreciate it.

Comment from P1

Excellent

the colors the noises the pictures
the voice...you're voice i guess
the whole thing totally creeps me
out. you have the ability to make me
look behind me every time i read one
of your poems. enjoyed it as always

 Comment Written 07-Jun-2016

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reply by the author on 08-Jun-2016

Thank you for reading AGHAST, Paige.
Much obliged.
~Dean

Comment from F. Wehr3

Excellent

Very nicely done! You've got this creepy thing down, lol. Was that your voice in the recording? I am beginning to enjoy the octogram format having read a few pieces recently. I think you did a great job with it.

Take care,
Russell

 Comment Written 07-Jun-2016

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reply by the author on 08-Jun-2016

Thank you for , Russell, for the R&R.
I appreciate it.
~Dean

Comment from RodG

Excellent

Ah, Dean, you are at your creepy best in this poem.
Some wonderful graphic description of what we will find in the bog.
I especially like the light-hearted tone. I think a young audience would, too.
Rod

 Comment Written 07-Jun-2016

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reply by the author on 07-Jun-2016

Thank you, Rod.
The poem's done okay, it's not burning up the FanStory six machines or anything like that.
Take care, and thanks for reading.
~Dean

Comment from chcbeck

Excellent

I enjoyed learning about this style, you have created a great poem within the boundaries of this style. A well presented, scary entertaining read, thanks for sharing.

 Comment Written 07-Jun-2016

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reply by the author on 07-Jun-2016

Thanks for the R&R.

Comment from TPAC

Excellent

Say its a lady well the last picture states all: what a look-er. This write had strong spots and sways in intensity in its read course, nice compelling story.

 Comment Written 07-Jun-2016

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reply by the author on 07-Jun-2016

Thanks for the great R&R, TPAC.
Much appreciated, as always.
~Dean :}