Picture Poems
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Comment from GregoryCody
WOW. Okay I know I should give it a six simply because I am SO HONORED. I took a screenshot. This is so incredibly cool.
That being said, I'm giving it a six because it's GREAT.
I've heard, swift waters bring this bird nice alliteration, awesome assonance in heard and bird, it makes the opening Fantastic
The American
Great White Pelican,
to fish the river,
sustenance giver,
as Fates deliver.
This flow is perfect. Perfect rhymes give it such a fluid feel.
Massive beak is swung.
Food will feed its young.
Same here!
An elemental gift conferred.
Strong close.
Your word choices as always, are unique and beautiful. Like your close. Sustenance giver too.
PERFECT. I really liked this. And the form is pretty cool ;)
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2019
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WOW. Okay I know I should give it a six simply because I am SO HONORED. I took a screenshot. This is so incredibly cool.
That being said, I'm giving it a six because it's GREAT.
I've heard, swift waters bring this bird nice alliteration, awesome assonance in heard and bird, it makes the opening Fantastic
The American
Great White Pelican,
to fish the river,
sustenance giver,
as Fates deliver.
This flow is perfect. Perfect rhymes give it such a fluid feel.
Massive beak is swung.
Food will feed its young.
Same here!
An elemental gift conferred.
Strong close.
Your word choices as always, are unique and beautiful. Like your close. Sustenance giver too.
PERFECT. I really liked this. And the form is pretty cool ;)
Comment Written 22-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2019
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Thank you Greg. I wasn't really fishing for a 6, but I'll take it! I just wanted to let you know that a form you created is being posted. Thanks for the excellent review and comments. That is a good example of how a good review should be.
Comment from robyn corum
Tom,
There is a place near me I can't help but think you would LOVE. It's called the Wheeler National Wildlife Refuge. It's one of the parks here in Alabama and they're doing big nature stuff all the time.
One of the things they're famous for is the Festival of Cranes. (Each January, I think).
They call it:
"Alabama's busiest natural airport, the Wheeler National Wildlife Refuge"
--> haha
Thanks a bunch for another entertaining post!
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2019
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Tom,
There is a place near me I can't help but think you would LOVE. It's called the Wheeler National Wildlife Refuge. It's one of the parks here in Alabama and they're doing big nature stuff all the time.
One of the things they're famous for is the Festival of Cranes. (Each January, I think).
They call it:
"Alabama's busiest natural airport, the Wheeler National Wildlife Refuge"
--> haha
Thanks a bunch for another entertaining post!
Comment Written 22-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2019
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Thank you Robyn, Yes indeed I would love it. In fact I have been trying to get a good picture of a Sandhill Crane for 3 years. Any place called a wildlife refuge would make me happy.
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They have a really cool observatory (Well, I say 'cool' - I don't want to deceive you... the cool part is the location... smack in the middle of the swampy area the cranes play in - the observatory itself is nice, but I don't know enough about them to compare.) where you can get up close and personal with the birds. There are tons of them. You really would love it. And if you decide to come, you can holler and we'll provide you a meal or two!
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I'd love to get down there sometime. For now, I am tied up being a caregiver to my ailing, bedridden wife. I had to sell my RV last summer, as she can't go anywhere for now. So, I'm stuck close to home.
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Great photo,Treischel.
-Thanks for sharing the notes.
-I like your poem and the form.
-It flows well, and the imagery
gives us a word picture of the pelican.
-The last line is a good concluding one.
-Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2019
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-Great photo,Treischel.
-Thanks for sharing the notes.
-I like your poem and the form.
-It flows well, and the imagery
gives us a word picture of the pelican.
-The last line is a good concluding one.
-Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 21-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2019
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Thank you Pam for your excellent review. I appreciate your detailed analysis.
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You are very welcome.
Comment from Pantygynt
I was born in 1941, during WW2. My mother was following my father's regiment wherever it was posted in the UK. She found accommodation that summer with a titled family Sir Ronald Letchmere of Severn End, Worcestershire. The family coat of arms featured a pelican 'in her piety' and to this days the main gate to the property is guarded by two of thes birds carved in stone on the pillars supporting the gate.
My father, less of a romantic used to recite the humorous rhyme,
'What a wonderful bird is the pelican
Its beak can hold more than its belly can.
It can hold in its beak enough food for a week.
I wonder how in the hell he can'.
I checked the thyme out. It seems quite well know with several minor variations and seems to have emanated from the prolific pen of 'Anon'.
Yours has more subtle rhyming.
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2019
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I was born in 1941, during WW2. My mother was following my father's regiment wherever it was posted in the UK. She found accommodation that summer with a titled family Sir Ronald Letchmere of Severn End, Worcestershire. The family coat of arms featured a pelican 'in her piety' and to this days the main gate to the property is guarded by two of thes birds carved in stone on the pillars supporting the gate.
My father, less of a romantic used to recite the humorous rhyme,
'What a wonderful bird is the pelican
Its beak can hold more than its belly can.
It can hold in its beak enough food for a week.
I wonder how in the hell he can'.
I checked the thyme out. It seems quite well know with several minor variations and seems to have emanated from the prolific pen of 'Anon'.
Yours has more subtle rhyming.
Comment Written 19-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2019
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Thank you Jim, Quite interesting your experience with the Pelican heraldry. I am familiar with that poem as well. I am glad you enjoyed it, i think.
Comment from Joy Graham
The picture of the pelican is a beauty. When I was in Mexico several years ago I saw brown pelicans for the first time in my life ever. It was awesome. We went to a snorkel park and there were tons of them. I also saw a pink flamingo in flight. My first time seeing one flying AND in the wild. For that reason, I enjoyed reading your poem and connecting with those memories :)
Joy xx
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2019
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The picture of the pelican is a beauty. When I was in Mexico several years ago I saw brown pelicans for the first time in my life ever. It was awesome. We went to a snorkel park and there were tons of them. I also saw a pink flamingo in flight. My first time seeing one flying AND in the wild. For that reason, I enjoyed reading your poem and connecting with those memories :)
Joy xx
Comment Written 18-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2019
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Thank you Joy. Wonderful memories. Glad I revived them for you.
Comment from zanya
A beautiful poetic tribute to an elegant, majestic bird with pure white feathers extolling its role in the ecosystem and portrayed through a format(with which I have to admit I'm not familiar) the Cordary- the picture is powerful capturing the bird in all it splendour - well done
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2019
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A beautiful poetic tribute to an elegant, majestic bird with pure white feathers extolling its role in the ecosystem and portrayed through a format(with which I have to admit I'm not familiar) the Cordary- the picture is powerful capturing the bird in all it splendour - well done
Comment Written 18-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2019
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Thank you so much zanya. I am always glad to share formats Glad you liked it. Feel free to try it anytime. I appreciate your review and comments, as well as those stars.
Comment from Joan E.
Thank you for the fascinating photograph of the Great White Pelican with its head feathers blowing in the wind, plus additional details in your notes. Your Codary is very effective in capturing the creature. Cheers- Joan
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2019
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Thank you for the fascinating photograph of the Great White Pelican with its head feathers blowing in the wind, plus additional details in your notes. Your Codary is very effective in capturing the creature. Cheers- Joan
Comment Written 18-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2019
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Thank you Joan. He/she (not sure which) was very photogenic.
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written Codary about the great white pelican with interesting history of the role of the pelican in the Christian world and how the mother sacrifice her own flesh for her children to survive.
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2019
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A very well-written Codary about the great white pelican with interesting history of the role of the pelican in the Christian world and how the mother sacrifice her own flesh for her children to survive.
Comment Written 18-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2019
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Thank you Sandra. Indeed, an interesting bit of mythology, especially if it were true.
Comment from TheStoryMan
This is another well written poem. It's not a style of poetry that I've read before. You did an excellent job with this poem...I like the photo too. Well done.
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2019
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This is another well written poem. It's not a style of poetry that I've read before. You did an excellent job with this poem...I like the photo too. Well done.
Comment Written 18-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2019
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Thank you theStoryMan, Hope you likes the from and feel free to try it.
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
This poem works very well with this style, Tom. I love the photo, you've taken an amazing shot there. This is the only shooting I agree with, by camera. lol. You have taught me a lot about the pelican and how it will feed her young by self harming herself. That is a loving mother for you. I enjoyed this one and all the authors notes you gave us. Well done, my friend. :) Sandra xx
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2019
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This poem works very well with this style, Tom. I love the photo, you've taken an amazing shot there. This is the only shooting I agree with, by camera. lol. You have taught me a lot about the pelican and how it will feed her young by self harming herself. That is a loving mother for you. I enjoyed this one and all the authors notes you gave us. Well done, my friend. :) Sandra xx
Comment Written 18-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2019
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Thank you Sandra. Always happy to share new things that people might not know.
