Picture Poems
Viewing comments for Chapter 247 "Hummingbirds"Photograph Inspired Poems
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Comment from Just2Write
Very nice, Tom - Thanks for letting me know you wrote a Progresso Quattro so that I could look it up. It was a bit tricky to find, but worth the hunt. The stanzas do build beautifully, and your chosen theme is excellent.
You do an excellent job of describing the hummingbirds that come to your feeder.
Especially so, with Stanza 3.
Try as I might - Hummingbirds are not enticed to come to my hummingbird feeders. I get lots and lots of other birds - but the hummingbird remains elusive. I know they're in the neighbourhood - but only visit other peoples' feeders.
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2016
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Very nice, Tom - Thanks for letting me know you wrote a Progresso Quattro so that I could look it up. It was a bit tricky to find, but worth the hunt. The stanzas do build beautifully, and your chosen theme is excellent.
You do an excellent job of describing the hummingbirds that come to your feeder.
Especially so, with Stanza 3.
Try as I might - Hummingbirds are not enticed to come to my hummingbird feeders. I get lots and lots of other birds - but the hummingbird remains elusive. I know they're in the neighbourhood - but only visit other peoples' feeders.
Comment Written 14-Oct-2016
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2016
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Thank you very much. Yes, hummingbirds are very territorial.
Comment from Irish Rain
Magnificent pictures!!!! We had a couple hummingbirds this year, really not near as many as usual, since I had tons of flowers outside. I loved your notes.....very informative, and this is a beautiful poem, blessings....
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2016
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Magnificent pictures!!!! We had a couple hummingbirds this year, really not near as many as usual, since I had tons of flowers outside. I loved your notes.....very informative, and this is a beautiful poem, blessings....
Comment Written 23-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2016
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Thank you So much Irish Rain, Sane here, only a few this year.
Comment from Preston McWhorter
Hi, Treischel,
"Hummingbirds" is another colorful, beautiful cameo of nature this time found in your back yard around a bird feeder. It is written in an unusual complicated form which shows off your poetic craftsmanship to the best advantage. The figurative language is excellent "thrum". The flow is excellent and rhyme is good, simple, and the rhyme scheme followed.
Your friend and colleague,
Preston
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2016
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Hi, Treischel,
"Hummingbirds" is another colorful, beautiful cameo of nature this time found in your back yard around a bird feeder. It is written in an unusual complicated form which shows off your poetic craftsmanship to the best advantage. The figurative language is excellent "thrum". The flow is excellent and rhyme is good, simple, and the rhyme scheme followed.
Your friend and colleague,
Preston
Comment Written 22-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2016
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Thank you Oreston for that fine assessment.
Comment from patcelaw
It is always a delight to watch hummingbirds in flight. We have several differing types here. However, in late July and early August the one hummer that is not at all welcomed by the other hummers is the Ruphus hummer. This hummer is a bit mean to the others/ Patricia
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2016
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It is always a delight to watch hummingbirds in flight. We have several differing types here. However, in late July and early August the one hummer that is not at all welcomed by the other hummers is the Ruphus hummer. This hummer is a bit mean to the others/ Patricia
Comment Written 21-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2016
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Thank you Patricia. When I was in Colorado, we had many more varieties than here.
Comment from TAB_that's me
We've only had one hummingbird at the feeder this fall. They are so amazing though. Your poem has good imagery and well written.
Teresa
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2016
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We've only had one hummingbird at the feeder this fall. They are so amazing though. Your poem has good imagery and well written.
Teresa
Comment Written 21-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2016
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Thank you Teresa,
Comment from William Ross
very nice, very well done, great write on the hummingbird. great rhyme, meter flows well and reads great. wonderful job, have a great day.
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2016
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very nice, very well done, great write on the hummingbird. great rhyme, meter flows well and reads great. wonderful job, have a great day.
Comment Written 21-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2016
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Thank you William.
Comment from Pantygynt
I don't think I have ever seen one of these amazing creatures and I know I have not seen an example of this form before. somehow the progressive build up of the lines is appropriate to the frenetic activitity of the little creature.
A nice match of form and content.
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2016
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I don't think I have ever seen one of these amazing creatures and I know I have not seen an example of this form before. somehow the progressive build up of the lines is appropriate to the frenetic activitity of the little creature.
A nice match of form and content.
Comment Written 21-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2016
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Thank you Pantygynt. Glad you liked the Orem. These are amazing little guys.
Comment from Maureen's Pen
Dear Tom, sorry to say I can't help you on the format of this poem. I can only tell you it sang to me as I read it aloud. Beautiful work, you capture them in everyway I have seen them. Brought them to life on my screen.
As always your imagery stands out for me, smooth and a wonderful read.
Thanks for sharing.
m
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2016
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Dear Tom, sorry to say I can't help you on the format of this poem. I can only tell you it sang to me as I read it aloud. Beautiful work, you capture them in everyway I have seen them. Brought them to life on my screen.
As always your imagery stands out for me, smooth and a wonderful read.
Thanks for sharing.
m
Comment Written 21-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2016
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Thank you Maureen. I and glad you enjoyed the as they are such a delight.
Comment from Joan E.
Wow--you caught so many hummingbirds at your feeder! I enjoyed your notes and the use of this special form, which seems to parallel the bird's action. I liked the way you captured the sound and the colors and intensified your message with the rhymes and your circular repeat of the first line. Smiles back at you- Joan
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2016
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Wow--you caught so many hummingbirds at your feeder! I enjoyed your notes and the use of this special form, which seems to parallel the bird's action. I liked the way you captured the sound and the colors and intensified your message with the rhymes and your circular repeat of the first line. Smiles back at you- Joan
Comment Written 21-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2016
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Thank you Joan. I just love to watch them buzz about. Glad you enjoyed my work.
Comment from frierajac
It seems quaint. And that the form itself was created with these birds in mind.
You might enjoy the book, " A Summer of Hummingbirds" about Emily Dickinson,
and Walt Whitman and the artist in the Audubon Society that first found the
hummingbirds in Brazil, and Central America
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reply by the author on 21-Sep-2016
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It seems quaint. And that the form itself was created with these birds in mind.
You might enjoy the book, " A Summer of Hummingbirds" about Emily Dickinson,
and Walt Whitman and the artist in the Audubon Society that first found the
hummingbirds in Brazil, and Central America
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 21-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2016
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Thank you frierajac, for a good review and wonderful suggestion.
