Picture Poems
Viewing comments for Chapter 252 "Preening"Photograph Inspired Poems
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Comment from Joan E.
I enjoyed your vivid description of the heron and your matching photograph. Your addition of alliteration to the cinquain form is very effective. Best wishes in the contest- Joan
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2016
I enjoyed your vivid description of the heron and your matching photograph. Your addition of alliteration to the cinquain form is very effective. Best wishes in the contest- Joan
Comment Written 22-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2016
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Thank you Joan.
Comment from brenda bickers
Hi Trieschel.
this I think is a really hard form to write but your word choice
and picture are fantastic. Very descriptive. Great read.
Brenda:))x
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2016
Hi Trieschel.
this I think is a really hard form to write but your word choice
and picture are fantastic. Very descriptive. Great read.
Brenda:))x
Comment Written 22-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2016
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Thank you Brenda, your enthusiastic review makes me happy.
Comment from nancy_e_davis
A new reality for a crick in the neck. LOL
This is a great cinquin for the contest Tom.
Great picture as well. Good lock in the contest.
xx Nancy
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2016
A new reality for a crick in the neck. LOL
This is a great cinquin for the contest Tom.
Great picture as well. Good lock in the contest.
xx Nancy
Comment Written 22-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2016
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Thank you Nancy, that is quite neck, Lol.
Comment from Preston McWhorter
Hi, Treischel,
"Preening" is an excellent poem in the difficult cinquain format. Syllable requirements were met. The image painted is realistic as verified by the picture.
The figurative language is unusual and colorful. ("bends beak to tactile task") is excellent description using seldom used words including the feeling sense. The alliteration is good. Good work I enjoyed this poem.
Your friend and colleague,
Preston
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2016
Hi, Treischel,
"Preening" is an excellent poem in the difficult cinquain format. Syllable requirements were met. The image painted is realistic as verified by the picture.
The figurative language is unusual and colorful. ("bends beak to tactile task") is excellent description using seldom used words including the feeling sense. The alliteration is good. Good work I enjoyed this poem.
Your friend and colleague,
Preston
Comment Written 22-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2016
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Thank you very much Preston. Your poetic perception has blossomed beautifully since your return. This is a very fine review.
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Thank you very much Preston. Your poetic perception has blossomed beautifully since your return. This is a very fine review.
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written Cinquain. The Heron was cspturedat the moment while busy preening his feathers. Excellent photo. Good luck with the contest.
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2016
A very well-written Cinquain. The Heron was cspturedat the moment while busy preening his feathers. Excellent photo. Good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 22-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2016
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Thank you Sandra.
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Thank you Sandra.
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
This is an awesome picture! I enjoyed your cinquain. Good job on the correct syllables per line. Your words/lines flow smoothly with such great info. Even if no picture was included, readers would still have a great image in their mind due to the descriptive words chosen.
Good job & best wishes in the contest. Jan
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2016
This is an awesome picture! I enjoyed your cinquain. Good job on the correct syllables per line. Your words/lines flow smoothly with such great info. Even if no picture was included, readers would still have a great image in their mind due to the descriptive words chosen.
Good job & best wishes in the contest. Jan
Comment Written 22-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2016
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Thank you Jan, for this review and the best wishes.
Comment from TAB_that's me
I wish I could do that like that bird:) I've never tried a cinquan. I like reading the form - I'll have to try one. Good luck in the contest.
teresa
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2016
I wish I could do that like that bird:) I've never tried a cinquan. I like reading the form - I'll have to try one. Good luck in the contest.
teresa
Comment Written 21-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2016
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Thank you Teresa. You'd need a much longer neck, Lol. Yes, give one a try. I'm sure you'll do fine!
Comment from I am Cat
Nicely done, Tom,
Heron (2)
feathers askew (4)
bends beak to tactile task (6)
to smooth and readjust his trim (8)
Preening (2)
perfect syllabic fit, nice alliterative line in line three bends/beak and to/tactile/task (nicely done)
good job, very nice photo, and I enjoyed this. Great luck in the contest
Cat
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2016
Nicely done, Tom,
Heron (2)
feathers askew (4)
bends beak to tactile task (6)
to smooth and readjust his trim (8)
Preening (2)
perfect syllabic fit, nice alliterative line in line three bends/beak and to/tactile/task (nicely done)
good job, very nice photo, and I enjoyed this. Great luck in the contest
Cat
Comment Written 21-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2016
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Thank you Cat. In appreciate the review, syllable check, and most notably, best wishes.
Comment from Pantygynt
Some great alliteration in such a tiny thing. There is also a lot of information in here as to how and why the heron carries out this task. I may have said this to you before but you could do a children's book involving stuff like this, your photos and a cinquaine for each beast. A sort of modern day bestiary.
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2016
Some great alliteration in such a tiny thing. There is also a lot of information in here as to how and why the heron carries out this task. I may have said this to you before but you could do a children's book involving stuff like this, your photos and a cinquaine for each beast. A sort of modern day bestiary.
Comment Written 21-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2016
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Thank you Pantygynt. Yes, you have mentioned that before, and it's a good idea.
Comment from patcelaw
Tom, this is as wonderful poem for the contest. The photo is a delight to see.
I wish the very best in the contest. I am waiting for the weather to cool her as it has been over 100 degrees each day for almost 3 weeks. Patricia.
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reply by the author on 21-Jul-2016
Tom, this is as wonderful poem for the contest. The photo is a delight to see.
I wish the very best in the contest. I am waiting for the weather to cool her as it has been over 100 degrees each day for almost 3 weeks. Patricia.
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Comment Written 21-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2016
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Thank you Patricia. It got up to 98 here today, with high humidity. Thank God for Air Conditioning.