Picture Poems
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9 total reviews
Comment from Green Lake Girl
Lovely photo! The white and red colors make the photo pop. Winter can be very dreary, so why not take a carriage ride? I enjoyed the format. I read your poem out loud--a lively, pleasing pace. Well done, Tom.
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2016
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Lovely photo! The white and red colors make the photo pop. Winter can be very dreary, so why not take a carriage ride? I enjoyed the format. I read your poem out loud--a lively, pleasing pace. Well done, Tom.
Comment Written 08-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2016
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Thank you. It's been a pretty mild winter too, so why not.
Comment from IndianaIrish
I've always wanted to tour a city in a horse-drawn carriage, and your poem makes me even more, Treischel. Even in the cold weather, it would be a delight. Your poem reads so rhymically and your photo is wonderful.
Smiles,
Karyn :-)
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2016
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I've always wanted to tour a city in a horse-drawn carriage, and your poem makes me even more, Treischel. Even in the cold weather, it would be a delight. Your poem reads so rhymically and your photo is wonderful.
Smiles,
Karyn :-)
Comment Written 03-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2016
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Thank you Karyn. Certainly, go for it!
Comment from I am Cat
Love this! such lovely alliterative verse which begs..
Go ride!
and with wonderful alliteration:
....with wheels that whirl to expedite
a tour of city sights. Just right
to set the tone
on cobbled stone. ..
in the author's notes: and ending with a 2 syllable line that car(r)ies an
('caries' are cavities in your teeth, and though the horses certainly have those, I don't think that's what you meant ;) ) lol
well done, I enjoyed it!
Cat
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2016
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Love this! such lovely alliterative verse which begs..
Go ride!
and with wonderful alliteration:
....with wheels that whirl to expedite
a tour of city sights. Just right
to set the tone
on cobbled stone. ..
in the author's notes: and ending with a 2 syllable line that car(r)ies an
('caries' are cavities in your teeth, and though the horses certainly have those, I don't think that's what you meant ;) ) lol
well done, I enjoyed it!
Cat
Comment Written 02-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2016
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Thanks Cat. Hmmm, horses tooth cavities. No there's inspiration that Mr. Ed would chortle at. I'll got fix that one.
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lol... I just wrote a 12 line exhortation in honor of YOU and Dr. Seuss... ;)
it doesn't get any better than that, Tom ;)
Comment from Joan E.
I had forgotten about your Exhortation form--thank you for creating another example. And thanks for sharing what must be an exhilarating ride in a horse-drawn carriage this time of the year. I enjoyed your rhymes and happy commands, along with the "steel shod feet" image. Cheers- Joan
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2016
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I had forgotten about your Exhortation form--thank you for creating another example. And thanks for sharing what must be an exhilarating ride in a horse-drawn carriage this time of the year. I enjoyed your rhymes and happy commands, along with the "steel shod feet" image. Cheers- Joan
Comment Written 02-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2016
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Thank you Joan. Weather never stops us hardy Minnesotans, or is that fool-hardy.
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You are a hardy lot! Be careful and stay warm- Joan
Comment from Shirley E Kennedy
A great picture and fine poem starter.
The poem flows well and the message is clear...just get outside & go ride.
The style has been well executed with good presentation and a clever
melding of word and image.
There seems to be power and positivity in the message and an inherent energy in the tone.
:-) Shirley
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2016
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A great picture and fine poem starter.
The poem flows well and the message is clear...just get outside & go ride.
The style has been well executed with good presentation and a clever
melding of word and image.
There seems to be power and positivity in the message and an inherent energy in the tone.
:-) Shirley
Comment Written 01-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2016
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Thank you Shirley. For a wonderful review and all those stars too.
Comment from lightink
Hi Tom, the play with the length of lines does wonders in breaking a possible monotony of the mono rhymes. It was a very good idea on your end! It sounds great and the rhythm is refreshing. The choice of topic is lovely - I would call it romantic, especially with the skillful wording like "to set the tone
on cobbled stone". Also, the rich use of enjambment created a good flow.
My sister-in-law drives these horse buggies at professional competitions :).
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2016
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Hi Tom, the play with the length of lines does wonders in breaking a possible monotony of the mono rhymes. It was a very good idea on your end! It sounds great and the rhythm is refreshing. The choice of topic is lovely - I would call it romantic, especially with the skillful wording like "to set the tone
on cobbled stone". Also, the rich use of enjambment created a good flow.
My sister-in-law drives these horse buggies at professional competitions :).
Comment Written 01-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2016
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Thank you Jyoti. How cool is that!
Comment from Pantygynt
I think I have seen one of your 12 line exhortations before in the last year. I particularly remember the examples given in the notes. If that is a surrey, then where is the fringe on top? Nice little number.
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2016
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I think I have seen one of your 12 line exhortations before in the last year. I particularly remember the examples given in the notes. If that is a surrey, then where is the fringe on top? Nice little number.
Comment Written 01-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2016
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Thank you Pantygynt. Good point, I needed another two syllable word for carriage, and wagon wasn't colorful enough. Surrey sounded prettier.
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
An old fashioned horse carriage ride. That is the type of things we always do when we went on holidays. Walks on the beach, visit to the aqwarium or the planetarium on bad weather days. An excellent photo.
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2016
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An old fashioned horse carriage ride. That is the type of things we always do when we went on holidays. Walks on the beach, visit to the aqwarium or the planetarium on bad weather days. An excellent photo.
Comment Written 01-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2016
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Thank you Sandra. That sounds delightful.
Comment from foxangie123
Where have you been hiding Hun? This is awesome as is all you have written thus far in my opinion. I'm repetative but it's the truth either way..
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2016
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Where have you been hiding Hun? This is awesome as is all you have written thus far in my opinion. I'm repetative but it's the truth either way..
Comment Written 01-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2016
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Thank you foxangie. I am glad you like my work and appreciate your enthusiasm.
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I do love your writing..
