Picture Poems
Viewing comments for Chapter 235 "Hidden House Finch"Photograph Inspired Poems
10 total reviews
Comment from LateBloomer
Hello Treischel, I enjoyed reading your poem and loved the photo. I have the same bird in my yard, and I've wondered what they're called ... I knew it was not a cardinal, but did not what??? Your poem reads and flows with joyful happiness and I can feel the airy spirits within. I especially liked:
and there, upon a barren twig,
a bird danced its twitching jig.
(Good imagery)
A fun poem that made me smile. Keep the blue waters flowing. LateBloomer
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2016
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Hello Treischel, I enjoyed reading your poem and loved the photo. I have the same bird in my yard, and I've wondered what they're called ... I knew it was not a cardinal, but did not what??? Your poem reads and flows with joyful happiness and I can feel the airy spirits within. I especially liked:
and there, upon a barren twig,
a bird danced its twitching jig.
(Good imagery)
A fun poem that made me smile. Keep the blue waters flowing. LateBloomer
Comment Written 18-Feb-2016
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2016
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Thank you LateBloomer. I will try.
Comment from nancy_e_davis
Yes. We see them all day. They are native to Nevada. They do have a lovely song. It sounds like "Pretty, pretty, pretty. sweet, sweet, sweet. You're so sweeeeeet!" I wish you could hear it. It is truly a joyful twitter. LOL Nice poem Tom. Lovely picture. Nancy
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2016
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Yes. We see them all day. They are native to Nevada. They do have a lovely song. It sounds like "Pretty, pretty, pretty. sweet, sweet, sweet. You're so sweeeeeet!" I wish you could hear it. It is truly a joyful twitter. LOL Nice poem Tom. Lovely picture. Nancy
Comment Written 18-Feb-2016
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2016
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Thank you Nancy. You description of their song made me smile.
Comment from Pantygynt
A charming little septet, and the enveloping a rhyme workrd really well. I particularly like the feminine rhyme fltter/clutter in the second stanza that implied the other things that could have been said such as rustle/bustle etc. an excellent choice of vocabulary and a splendid form and content partnership.
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2016
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A charming little septet, and the enveloping a rhyme workrd really well. I particularly like the feminine rhyme fltter/clutter in the second stanza that implied the other things that could have been said such as rustle/bustle etc. an excellent choice of vocabulary and a splendid form and content partnership.
Comment Written 18-Feb-2016
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2016
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Thank you very much Pantygynt.
Comment from Caressa_08
Oh, Thanks so much for a beautiful nature poem and wonderful photography shown. The author notes are also appreciated, and wish I had a six to give. As had no clue they used to be pets in the US. Though it doesn't surprise me. I've seen some in Illinois where I reside, especially out in the rural areas.
Caressa_08
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2016
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Oh, Thanks so much for a beautiful nature poem and wonderful photography shown. The author notes are also appreciated, and wish I had a six to give. As had no clue they used to be pets in the US. Though it doesn't surprise me. I've seen some in Illinois where I reside, especially out in the rural areas.
Caressa_08
Comment Written 18-Feb-2016
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2016
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Thank you Caressa. I am glad you enjoyed my poem.
Comment from BruceMiller
I loved everything about this poem except to for fact that I didn't write it. You've told a lovely story that just happens to be in poetic form. Your syntax gathered the words together into a smooth-flowing, effortless, and (more importantly) understandable read. (Excuse me, now; I'm gonna go into my portfolio and throw rocks at my stuff. lol)
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2016
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I loved everything about this poem except to for fact that I didn't write it. You've told a lovely story that just happens to be in poetic form. Your syntax gathered the words together into a smooth-flowing, effortless, and (more importantly) understandable read. (Excuse me, now; I'm gonna go into my portfolio and throw rocks at my stuff. lol)
Comment Written 18-Feb-2016
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2016
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Thank you Bruce. I really like enthusiasm and those stars, but please hold off throwing those stones. Lol.
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
I enjoyed your poem. Good job on the format. The picture is awesome. Thanks for the notes, too. They were interesting. I like the rhyme of your poem. Your lines flow smoothly.
Good job and thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2016
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I enjoyed your poem. Good job on the format. The picture is awesome. Thanks for the notes, too. They were interesting. I like the rhyme of your poem. Your lines flow smoothly.
Good job and thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 18-Feb-2016
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2016
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Thank you Jannypan for a wonderful review.
Comment from ciliverde
That's a cute little bird! I enjoyed your notes, as well as your poem, about the history of these guys in the U.S.
In the first stanza, the sixth line took me by surprise in that, I couldn't find the rhythm of it initially. It worked better, to me, read aloud.
The second stanza flowed smoothly and nicely, in particular "until I heard the flutter,
there among the oak leaf clutter" - that's very nice.
A well-done poem that I enjoyed - and I learned about what a septet is, which I did not know.
Carol
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2016
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That's a cute little bird! I enjoyed your notes, as well as your poem, about the history of these guys in the U.S.
In the first stanza, the sixth line took me by surprise in that, I couldn't find the rhythm of it initially. It worked better, to me, read aloud.
The second stanza flowed smoothly and nicely, in particular "until I heard the flutter,
there among the oak leaf clutter" - that's very nice.
A well-done poem that I enjoyed - and I learned about what a septet is, which I did not know.
Carol
Comment Written 17-Feb-2016
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2016
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Thank you Carol. Your enthusiasm is infectious.
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A well written Septet. A very beautiful little bird and an interesting piece of information about the Finch. An excellent capture on the camera.
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2016
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A well written Septet. A very beautiful little bird and an interesting piece of information about the Finch. An excellent capture on the camera.
Comment Written 17-Feb-2016
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2016
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Thank you Sandra. I was inspired by your bird poem.
Comment from Joan E.
Thank you for your fascinating notes about the House Finch--I had no idea it was a native of Mexico and the Southwest and was introduced elsewhere. Your photograph and the double septet capture the divine creature. I enjoyed your rhymes and could imagine the "twitching jig". Cheers- Joan
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2016
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Thank you for your fascinating notes about the House Finch--I had no idea it was a native of Mexico and the Southwest and was introduced elsewhere. Your photograph and the double septet capture the divine creature. I enjoyed your rhymes and could imagine the "twitching jig". Cheers- Joan
Comment Written 17-Feb-2016
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2016
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Thank you Joan. Glad you liked it.
Comment from patcelaw
Treischel , I must say, I enjoyed you telling of how you got this photo. You have captured some amazing photos with your camera. I am sure you probably have a photo to fit with any subject you write about. Patricia
I will have to try a Septet sometime.
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2016
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Treischel , I must say, I enjoyed you telling of how you got this photo. You have captured some amazing photos with your camera. I am sure you probably have a photo to fit with any subject you write about. Patricia
I will have to try a Septet sometime.
Comment Written 17-Feb-2016
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2016
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Thank you Patricia. Yes, pretty much so. Do give one a try. I'm sure you'll shine.
