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Comment from ciliverde
Nice job on this sonnet, Tom, you make good use of the language, Olde English included.
"Pray, grace this place, where pastel pinks apply" is a compelling line.
The second stanza feels delicately beautiful, as is this small flower you describe. "Thy leaves are merely wisps that heaven grants." - be still, my heart! I love that line.
Third stanza feels more bold, as the flower "holds her own" within the wild bouquet. "I ponder now, thy unknown sobriquet,
whilst viewing hence, this petulant display." - the flower is really making an impression - unassuming yet upright, pure beauty.
Well done! Very enjoyable. I liked the poem even more each time I read it through. A great one to read aloud,
Carol
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2016
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Nice job on this sonnet, Tom, you make good use of the language, Olde English included.
"Pray, grace this place, where pastel pinks apply" is a compelling line.
The second stanza feels delicately beautiful, as is this small flower you describe. "Thy leaves are merely wisps that heaven grants." - be still, my heart! I love that line.
Third stanza feels more bold, as the flower "holds her own" within the wild bouquet. "I ponder now, thy unknown sobriquet,
whilst viewing hence, this petulant display." - the flower is really making an impression - unassuming yet upright, pure beauty.
Well done! Very enjoyable. I liked the poem even more each time I read it through. A great one to read aloud,
Carol
Comment Written 17-Feb-2016
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2016
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Thank you Carol. I thouroughly enjoyed this very detailed review. It was a pleasure to receive your analysis.
Comment from rhymelord
Dear Tom,
A touch of class, one has to say, in this very elegant sonnet, which not many people on this site can attain. Like the use of ye olde English. Lends a lot of authenticity.
Regards
Reg
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2016
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Dear Tom,
A touch of class, one has to say, in this very elegant sonnet, which not many people on this site can attain. Like the use of ye olde English. Lends a lot of authenticity.
Regards
Reg
Comment Written 17-Feb-2016
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2016
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Thank you Reg. I am very glad that you could appreciate its elegance. I almost did throw a "Ye" in, but it didn't resonate well.
Comment from nancy_e_davis
What you have there is a Cosmo. It is a flower that grows very well here in Ely Nevada. Seems to like the weather and the soil. I think it is an annual as it has never reproduced on its own. It grows really tall. Almost three feet in some places and should be planted in the back row of a flower bed.
It's a lovely flower Tom. xxx Nancy
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2016
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What you have there is a Cosmo. It is a flower that grows very well here in Ely Nevada. Seems to like the weather and the soil. I think it is an annual as it has never reproduced on its own. It grows really tall. Almost three feet in some places and should be planted in the back row of a flower bed.
It's a lovely flower Tom. xxx Nancy
Comment Written 16-Feb-2016
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2016
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Thank you Nancy. Yes, the Cosmo seems to fit. In fact I Googled it, and found an exact match, I had researched the Coreopsis group before, because of the narrow leaves, but didn't find a match. You made me happy, solving it for me.
Comment from brenda bickers
Hi Trieschel,
Thank you for the beautiful picture I just love flowers but I am unable to identify the name of this one. It looks like a daisy.
A great poem and a lovely read.
Brenda
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2016
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Hi Trieschel,
Thank you for the beautiful picture I just love flowers but I am unable to identify the name of this one. It looks like a daisy.
A great poem and a lovely read.
Brenda
Comment Written 16-Feb-2016
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2016
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Pt hank you Brenda " several people have suggested Daisy, some Cosmos,
Comment from Pantygynt
You declared your intention to "throw in", as you put it, a touch of old English, long before I got to the notes, in your first line in fact. This begs the question whether you should continue to play it that way, and I think really that you should as you use it enough here for it to become a unity, the style of the sonnet.
Had you swung completely back to modern usage in the volta I would have accepted that as part of the nature of voltas but you get modern in the ninth line, ancient in the eleventh and back modern in the couplet.
Some excellent alliteration and consonance in here as well but I'm sorry I cant help you with nomenclature so ppfs they'll have to stay.
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2016
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You declared your intention to "throw in", as you put it, a touch of old English, long before I got to the notes, in your first line in fact. This begs the question whether you should continue to play it that way, and I think really that you should as you use it enough here for it to become a unity, the style of the sonnet.
Had you swung completely back to modern usage in the volta I would have accepted that as part of the nature of voltas but you get modern in the ninth line, ancient in the eleventh and back modern in the couplet.
Some excellent alliteration and consonance in here as well but I'm sorry I cant help you with nomenclature so ppfs they'll have to stay.
Comment Written 16-Feb-2016
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2016
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Thank you Pantygynt. I wanted to change all the you and your words to thou and thy, but they just didn't work well. I even considered using a Ye, but didn't like it either. In the end, I stayed with the modern, and held the alliteration. Of course, only a few scholars would even pick that point up.
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Right pernickety bastards like me you mean - scholars! Flatterer.
Comment from Caressa_08
Nature has so many attributes and even tiny flowers, like alias, PPF are still part of all its wonder. And Thanks for the author notes which adds a nice touch to your poem, & too, the pciture of that pretty pink flower is quite a view even on a computer screen.
Thanks for Sharing & God Bless...Caressa_08
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2016
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Nature has so many attributes and even tiny flowers, like alias, PPF are still part of all its wonder. And Thanks for the author notes which adds a nice touch to your poem, & too, the pciture of that pretty pink flower is quite a view even on a computer screen.
Thanks for Sharing & God Bless...Caressa_08
Comment Written 16-Feb-2016
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2016
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Thank you Caressa.
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
It is a very pretty pink flower. I think it is a variety of the Cosmos we find here, also a wild flower. I am not sure what their scientific bame is.
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2016
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It is a very pretty pink flower. I think it is a variety of the Cosmos we find here, also a wild flower. I am not sure what their scientific bame is.
Comment Written 15-Feb-2016
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2016
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Thank you Sandra.
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You can search under 'cosmos flower' the scientific name 'Coreopsideae'
Comment from chcbeck
A fantastic sonnet I truly my enjoy reading them, not writing them. Your words are beautifully chosen. What a great subject and way to encourage people to find the name of that flower. Good luck with that quest.
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2016
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A fantastic sonnet I truly my enjoy reading them, not writing them. Your words are beautifully chosen. What a great subject and way to encourage people to find the name of that flower. Good luck with that quest.
Comment Written 15-Feb-2016
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2016
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Thank you chcbeck.
Comment from robyn corum
You know I always enjoy your pictures, Tom. And I love sonnets. This was particularly lovely to me. Good job!
About your PPF, check photos for all the different varieties of Phlox and Thrift. Those are what it reminds me of. Was the plant a ground cover? Blooming in early spring and late fall - course diff ones bloom diff times, I guess. But these are only about 4-8" high.
Good luck in the discovering!
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2016
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You know I always enjoy your pictures, Tom. And I love sonnets. This was particularly lovely to me. Good job!
About your PPF, check photos for all the different varieties of Phlox and Thrift. Those are what it reminds me of. Was the plant a ground cover? Blooming in early spring and late fall - course diff ones bloom diff times, I guess. But these are only about 4-8" high.
Good luck in the discovering!
Comment Written 15-Feb-2016
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2016
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Thank you Robyn I appreciate the tips and will enjoy the search.
Comment from Joan E.
Thank you for the context for the unusual title--I thought your mystery flowers were pink daisies. Regardless what "pedigree," I admired your analogy to "a nymph" and "wisps". Your rhymes and rhythmic lines and alliteration of "p's" were quite effective in this floral sonnet. Smiles- Joan
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2016
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Thank you for the context for the unusual title--I thought your mystery flowers were pink daisies. Regardless what "pedigree," I admired your analogy to "a nymph" and "wisps". Your rhymes and rhythmic lines and alliteration of "p's" were quite effective in this floral sonnet. Smiles- Joan
Comment Written 15-Feb-2016
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2016
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Thank you Joan.
