Comment from His Grayness

Excellent

Wishing I had the deserved sixth star for this lovely work full of Emotional GRIP and well presented in graphics as well. There is no recommendation of any kind that I might offer this author to improve this work! ONLY MY THANKS! HIS GRAYNESS

 Comment Written 29-Jan-2016

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reply by the author on 29-Jan-2016

Thank you Vance. I appreciate it.

Comment from lightink

Excellent

This is fascinating and so cleverly written!
I love how you make the "frozen mind" into a useful thing, that actually helps story things as opposed to an enemy paralyzing us.
"fissures as apprentices" - what a fresh way to look at our imperfections: yes, they are opportunity - but you made it sound so up-lifting that I almost feel like going straight for my faults just to greet and applaud them!

The second stanza describes the result of harvesting those with so much passion and liveliness! Fascinating and inspiring!

 Comment Written 29-Jan-2016

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reply by the author on 29-Jan-2016

Thank you Jyoti. I am glad you liked it. I reprised to bring a new perspective within the confines of the Rispetto format.

reply by the author on 29-Jan-2016

Thank you Jyoti. I am glad you liked it. I reprised to bring a new perspective within the confines of the Rispetto format.

Comment from Pantygynt

Excellent

I have come to the conclusion that these rispettos work best when there are two aspects of a single theme to be dealt with and if they can somehow fit snugly into their respective rhyme schemes that's even better.

Here you have a single theme - cold and the two aspect seem to be stationary cold and moving cold. In the first stanza everything is frozen, motion less, but the wind blows thoughts into the motion of words in the second stanza and as a result this seems to fit my theory quite well.

I was at first confused as to your choice of play. I was convinced it was more than just a convience of rhyme for breath. It is your play on the word "blue" that provided the answer. This drama is pretty coldblooded stuff right through and the only piece of "blue" comic relief comes with the porter's appearance. And it is by Elizabethan term pretty "blue". Too blue even for iambic pentameters - it has to be one of the few instances of prose in any of Shakespeare's plays.

So o we do have a good balance of form and content here.

I have a new form out by the way. Tony Fawcus calls it the "Pantygynt" The poem is "To Paint a Sunset".

 Comment Written 29-Jan-2016

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reply by the author on 29-Jan-2016

Thank you Pantygynt. Not many people could pick up that nuance. I am surprised that anyone did. Bravo. I also thought it might just detract a bit from the audacity of the statement about Shakespeare. At any rate I look forward to reading you latest creation.

reply by Pantygynt on 29-Jan-2016

It's up there now (my creation). It did occur to me that I might be reading too much into it. now I'm glad I did. Let's see if you can pick up the extremely obscure nuances in mine.

Comment from TAB_that's me

Excellent

You take amazing photographs and then write such wonderful imagery to go with them:) Good luck in the contest.
~~teresa~~

 Comment Written 29-Jan-2016

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reply by the author on 29-Jan-2016

Thank you Teresa. I appreciate the compliment.

Comment from CALLAHANMR

Excellent

I can see that your muse likes to curl up in bed, waiting for warm ideas to thaw your mind. I like the vivid imagery of ideas coming to life.

Thank you for sharing.

Roger

 Comment Written 29-Jan-2016

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reply by the author on 29-Jan-2016

Thank you Roger.

Comment from robyn corum

Excellent

Tom,

Sometimes your poetry is soooo like the old romantic poets - it gives me chills. My favorite lines:

To blow like snow from Winter's breath
In words that rival Bard's MacBeth
Derived from icy pillars, cold
With phrases blue and written bold

 Comment Written 28-Jan-2016

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reply by the author on 28-Jan-2016

Thank you Robyn. I am pleased.

Comment from Liberty Justice

Excellent

Seems poets muse has been frozen in time. Writer had tomoeer on crevices of the mind to discover something to write about. Thoughts were frozen. liberty justice

 Comment Written 28-Jan-2016

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reply by the author on 28-Jan-2016

Thanks Liberty.

Comment from IndianaIrish

Excellent

I enjoyed your contest entry, Tom, and I wish you the best of luck. Enjoyed your rhymes, and I love to read iambic tetrameter out loud...always sounds so musical to my ears. I liked your line that imagination comes alive in the winter, because mine does, too.
Smiles,
Karyn :-)

 Comment Written 28-Jan-2016

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reply by the author on 28-Jan-2016

Thank you Karyn, for a wonderful review.

Comment from William Ross

Excellent

Very good and well written nice rhyming and a great rhythm when read, really well done. good luck to you. have a wonderful evening.

 Comment Written 28-Jan-2016

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reply by the author on 28-Jan-2016

Thank you William.

Comment from nancy_e_davis

Excellent

Nice poem. I love the reference to that rival Bard's Macbeth. I just had a thought creep in when I read the last line. May I suggest you tweak it like this?
"With phrases new, but written bold"
Just a thought. You may not like it but it seems like it is rivaling MacBeth with new bold words. Great job. Great picture Tom! Well done. Good Luck. Nancy

 Comment Written 28-Jan-2016

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reply by the author on 28-Jan-2016

Thank you Nancy. I'll give that some thought.