Picture Poems
Viewing comments for Chapter 232 "Outside My Window"Photograph Inspired Poems
9 total reviews
Comment from I am Cat
Hi Tom,
Without the snow, looks like the scene outside our windows. ;)
Beautiful... a lovely triolet and a gorgeous photograph as well.
Well done and I like the repeating line you've chosen.
Good luck in the contest!
CAt
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2016
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Hi Tom,
Without the snow, looks like the scene outside our windows. ;)
Beautiful... a lovely triolet and a gorgeous photograph as well.
Well done and I like the repeating line you've chosen.
Good luck in the contest!
CAt
Comment Written 12-Jan-2016
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2016
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Thanks so much Cat, it's a nice scene to have. It is, it is.
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Indeed it is. ;)
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
Is that from your window, Tom? How wonderful to see that, and what a lot of snow! I thought your triolet very well done, my friend. Just outside my window, what a wonderful view to look upon. Good luck in this contest, another excellent entry. xsx Sandra.
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2016
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Is that from your window, Tom? How wonderful to see that, and what a lot of snow! I thought your triolet very well done, my friend. Just outside my window, what a wonderful view to look upon. Good luck in this contest, another excellent entry. xsx Sandra.
Comment Written 12-Jan-2016
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2016
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Thank you Sandra. Yes, that is one of my windows. I appreciate the best wishes too.
Comment from RodG
Oh, do i envy your setting. A perfect photo to accompany your poem.
The triolet is an ideal format for this short tale as the refrains emphasize the beauty of what Nature provides.
One small flaw: in your last line "peaks" should be "peeks."
Enjoy that view for both of us! Rod
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2016
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Oh, do i envy your setting. A perfect photo to accompany your poem.
The triolet is an ideal format for this short tale as the refrains emphasize the beauty of what Nature provides.
One small flaw: in your last line "peaks" should be "peeks."
Enjoy that view for both of us! Rod
Comment Written 12-Jan-2016
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2016
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Thank you RodG. Yup, I fixed it. Thanks.
Comment from MacMhuirich
Nicely crafted triolet with good rhyme, flow and imagery. Love the photo with the deer in the snow, the repeating lines are strong. Best wishes for the contest.
Bless you
John
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2016
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Nicely crafted triolet with good rhyme, flow and imagery. Love the photo with the deer in the snow, the repeating lines are strong. Best wishes for the contest.
Bless you
John
Comment Written 12-Jan-2016
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2016
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Thank you John. Appreciate the wishes and blessing.
Comment from Joan E.
Wow--you truly captured this marvelous scene "Just outside" your window! I enjoyed your rhymes and alliteration of "was". Cheers- Joan
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2016
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Wow--you truly captured this marvelous scene "Just outside" your window! I enjoyed your rhymes and alliteration of "was". Cheers- Joan
Comment Written 12-Jan-2016
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2016
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Thank you Joan. Yup, that is my window.
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
It is an awesome triolet and if that scene was outside my window, I will do nothing else than stare and do what I do best. That is daydreaming. A beautiful photo as well.
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2016
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It is an awesome triolet and if that scene was outside my window, I will do nothing else than stare and do what I do best. That is daydreaming. A beautiful photo as well.
Comment Written 12-Jan-2016
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2016
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Thank you Sandra. Yes, that is one of my windows. The deer come by often.
Comment from patcelaw
Treischel this is a simple triolet. I am wondering though if you meant to say peeks, not peaks? I wish you a lovely day and stay warm. Blessings, Patricia
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2016
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Treischel this is a simple triolet. I am wondering though if you meant to say peeks, not peaks? I wish you a lovely day and stay warm. Blessings, Patricia
Comment Written 12-Jan-2016
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2016
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Thank you Pstricia. Yup, I'll have to fix that.
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You still need to change the words peaks to peeks in the last line as well.
Are you feeling okay sir? I ask because I am seeing more typos from you than usual.
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No, I was just tired, I guess. But thanks for your concern.
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I was a bit worried about you. Stay well and get as much rest as you can.
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You still need to change the words peaks to peeks in the last line as well.
Are you feeling okay sir? I ask because I am seeing more typos from you than usual.
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I was a bit worried about you. Stay well and get as much rest as you can.
Comment from Pantygynt
A neat triolet and the window certainly frames the world in a very human way so the doe appears as the interloper in man's world. Without the window we'd probably seethe picture as being the other way around.
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2016
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A neat triolet and the window certainly frames the world in a very human way so the doe appears as the interloper in man's world. Without the window we'd probably seethe picture as being the other way around.
Comment Written 12-Jan-2016
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2016
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Thank you Exactly right. Sorry, I haven't reviewed enough to to put money on it yet.
Comment from Neonewman
Man oh man! What a wonderful view you must have if this is your window. Nature is one of the most inspirational things. Well crafted piece you have delivered my friend.
God bless
Steve
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2016
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Man oh man! What a wonderful view you must have if this is your window. Nature is one of the most inspirational things. Well crafted piece you have delivered my friend.
God bless
Steve
Comment Written 12-Jan-2016
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2016
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Thank you Neonewman. Yes, that is my window.
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Awesome view! My pleasure.
