Picture Poems
Viewing comments for Chapter 227 "Pebbles on the Beach"Photograph Inspired Poems
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Comment from Selina Stambi
Such gems the ocean waves have spun ... like this line.
Tom, you create such gems yourself. This one sparkles. Sweet, simple. Love the final lines in the quatrains. The repetition gives the poem a sweet, thoughtful child-like ring to it.
Sonali
What lessons do the stones (there) teach?
Right (there), exposed within your reach ... Tom, you've got 'there' twice in quick succession. How about replacing one of them with 'here'? ... sorry, me being picky.
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2016
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Such gems the ocean waves have spun ... like this line.
Tom, you create such gems yourself. This one sparkles. Sweet, simple. Love the final lines in the quatrains. The repetition gives the poem a sweet, thoughtful child-like ring to it.
Sonali
What lessons do the stones (there) teach?
Right (there), exposed within your reach ... Tom, you've got 'there' twice in quick succession. How about replacing one of them with 'here'? ... sorry, me being picky.
Comment Written 08-Jan-2016
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2016
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Egos point. I'll fix one.
Comment from Joan E.
I love to collect rocks of all kinds, but I don't have a tumbler--I've always just enjoyed them in their natural state since I was a kid. I enjoyed your rhyme scheme in these quatrains and the refrains. From one rock hound to another- Joan
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2016
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I love to collect rocks of all kinds, but I don't have a tumbler--I've always just enjoyed them in their natural state since I was a kid. I enjoyed your rhyme scheme in these quatrains and the refrains. From one rock hound to another- Joan
Comment Written 07-Jan-2016
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2016
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Thank you Joan. Happy hunting!
Comment from I am Cat
Hi Tom,
First of all, love your new profile pic. Playful and adorbs, just like you. ;)
Secondly, the rhyme scheme in this is heavenly! I love it and will have to try this myself. It really sits well with me (though you know I may have to switch it up to be uneven syllables) LOL ;)
love the repeating lines and it's very jaunty
I, too, love rocks... especially lovely smooth ones shaped like hearts. ;)
mushy, eh? I have a giant one out front, I"ll have to write a poem about that one.
It's huge and I've take it from Arkansas, to San Antonio, now to North Texas... it's about 12 inches across, another 8 inches from top to bottom and about 6-8 inches high... it's a big big heart. ;)
It sits in my rock garden out front. lol
Lovely poem, most especially this part:
Their colors glisten in the sun.
Unique is each and every one.
Such gems the ocean waves have spun!
I'd like to take some home.
well done!
Cat
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2016
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Hi Tom,
First of all, love your new profile pic. Playful and adorbs, just like you. ;)
Secondly, the rhyme scheme in this is heavenly! I love it and will have to try this myself. It really sits well with me (though you know I may have to switch it up to be uneven syllables) LOL ;)
love the repeating lines and it's very jaunty
I, too, love rocks... especially lovely smooth ones shaped like hearts. ;)
mushy, eh? I have a giant one out front, I"ll have to write a poem about that one.
It's huge and I've take it from Arkansas, to San Antonio, now to North Texas... it's about 12 inches across, another 8 inches from top to bottom and about 6-8 inches high... it's a big big heart. ;)
It sits in my rock garden out front. lol
Lovely poem, most especially this part:
Their colors glisten in the sun.
Unique is each and every one.
Such gems the ocean waves have spun!
I'd like to take some home.
well done!
Cat
Comment Written 06-Jan-2016
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2016
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Thank you Cat. I can well understand why you've brought that one everywhere. If it's a natural heart, that is tremendous. I actually found some small heart shaped ones. Glad you line my goofy mug shot.
Comment from Liberty Justice
Man, you were born to write. You are a born poet. This poem sends inspiration and joy down my spine. It is so wonderful the way your verses rhyme and bounce from line to line detailing your excursions. A little scientific discovery thrown in there, also. liberty justice
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2016
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Man, you were born to write. You are a born poet. This poem sends inspiration and joy down my spine. It is so wonderful the way your verses rhyme and bounce from line to line detailing your excursions. A little scientific discovery thrown in there, also. liberty justice
Comment Written 06-Jan-2016
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2016
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Ethan's you Liberty. I appreciate the compliment.
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
I used to love walking on an early morning on the beach picking up shells spit out by the ocean, and when we come home wash and dry them to use and make portrait frames.
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2016
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I used to love walking on an early morning on the beach picking up shells spit out by the ocean, and when we come home wash and dry them to use and make portrait frames.
Comment Written 06-Jan-2016
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2016
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Thank you Sandra. Yes, shells would be sweet too.
Comment from Joyce Long
How fun to collect rocks and tumble them. Do all rocks polish out to pretty colors or gems? I've not had the privilege to walk on Lake Superior, but I wouldn't have expected so many rocks. I like your line "Were they first born in deep sea caves?" I'm not certain about the last line of your last two stanzas. "I'd like to take some home." The plan is to take some home, but this seems to indicate that the writer can't take them home. "I'm thrilled to take some home."
Well done. Thanks for sharing.
Joyce 01-06-16
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2016
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How fun to collect rocks and tumble them. Do all rocks polish out to pretty colors or gems? I've not had the privilege to walk on Lake Superior, but I wouldn't have expected so many rocks. I like your line "Were they first born in deep sea caves?" I'm not certain about the last line of your last two stanzas. "I'd like to take some home." The plan is to take some home, but this seems to indicate that the writer can't take them home. "I'm thrilled to take some home."
Well done. Thanks for sharing.
Joyce 01-06-16
Comment Written 06-Jan-2016
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2016
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Thank you Joyce, not all stones can be polished. The soft ones don't turn out. Need the hard smooth ones. I don't think the last line precludes taking them home.
Comment from Pantygynt
A friend of mine used to collect pebbles off the beach to place around the shrubs in her garden and guess who always had to carry the weighty bags of rocks back to the car!
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2016
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A friend of mine used to collect pebbles off the beach to place around the shrubs in her garden and guess who always had to carry the weighty bags of rocks back to the car!
Comment Written 06-Jan-2016
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2016
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Thank you Pantygynt. We both know the answer to that rhetorical question.
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Mmmm! I thought a rhetorical question wasn't supposed to have an answer. Lol.
Comment from prettybluebirds
Excellent. Lovely picture. Are you going to put the picture in fan art? This is a beautifully written poem. Very pleasant to read. My son was a rock collector too.
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2016
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Excellent. Lovely picture. Are you going to put the picture in fan art? This is a beautifully written poem. Very pleasant to read. My son was a rock collector too.
Comment Written 06-Jan-2016
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2016
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Thank you prettybluebirds. No, I haven't been on Fanaat for a couple years. Sorry.
