cocaine and psychedelics
contest entry (see author notes)52 total reviews
Comment from mfowler
As that's not an experience I've had, I can only suspect that this is an authentic retelling of what happens. If it is, the images you describe, the feelings portrayed and the sheer horror of it make me think that the cocaine trip is something no one should be subject to. This is such powerful free verse, in an your face, no punches pulled rendition of drug hell. This stanza got me:
a coca brain paints its canvas
with white horses,
bright colors and pink flowers
under azure skies ,a yellow sun
and silky clouds of eider down
It's sounds like achild's nursery but you juxtapose it brilliantly with the aftermath and ram home the misery:
but the skies will blacken
and darkness will smother...
pain will ooze from every pore
collapsing the mind
into smoldering coca hell...
stealing the spirit of the soul to slay
I think you've done this very well. You will be hard to beat.
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2015
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As that's not an experience I've had, I can only suspect that this is an authentic retelling of what happens. If it is, the images you describe, the feelings portrayed and the sheer horror of it make me think that the cocaine trip is something no one should be subject to. This is such powerful free verse, in an your face, no punches pulled rendition of drug hell. This stanza got me:
a coca brain paints its canvas
with white horses,
bright colors and pink flowers
under azure skies ,a yellow sun
and silky clouds of eider down
It's sounds like achild's nursery but you juxtapose it brilliantly with the aftermath and ram home the misery:
but the skies will blacken
and darkness will smother...
pain will ooze from every pore
collapsing the mind
into smoldering coca hell...
stealing the spirit of the soul to slay
I think you've done this very well. You will be hard to beat.
Comment Written 09-Dec-2015
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2015
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thank you so much for the kind review. i enjoyed writing the poem. it was fun but is a very serious subject. have a merry Christmas :-))
Comment from Judvan2
Love the presentation. So true about this wonderful medicinal that leads to insanity in the users hands. Good write, good read. Thanks for sharing. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2015
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Love the presentation. So true about this wonderful medicinal that leads to insanity in the users hands. Good write, good read. Thanks for sharing. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 08-Dec-2015
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2015
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Thank you for you kind review. i enjoyed writing the poem even though the subject is very serious. have a merry Christmas :-))
Comment from anabellapongasi
How horrible indeed. I can not and don't want to imagine the high and the low of it. But you have described it all so well in this piece. Sounds like real hell. I hope and pray that those who are under the shackles of drug addiction will find deliverance before it's too late.
Blessings,
Anabella
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2015
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How horrible indeed. I can not and don't want to imagine the high and the low of it. But you have described it all so well in this piece. Sounds like real hell. I hope and pray that those who are under the shackles of drug addiction will find deliverance before it's too late.
Blessings,
Anabella
Comment Written 08-Dec-2015
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2015
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Thank you for taking the time to review the poem. the poem was fun to write but the subject is deadly serious. have a merry Christmas and a good night :-))
Comment from Amy Greta
Your poem is absolutely brilliant! The tone and mood goes from a drugged euphoria to the collapsed mind of the aftermath. Your black coal eyes of a snowman is so descriptive of drug addiction, and then when I read about snowman being another term for cocaine, it took it up twelve notches to spectacular! The color, the font, the word placement, the black background, it's all perfection!
Amy
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2015
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Your poem is absolutely brilliant! The tone and mood goes from a drugged euphoria to the collapsed mind of the aftermath. Your black coal eyes of a snowman is so descriptive of drug addiction, and then when I read about snowman being another term for cocaine, it took it up twelve notches to spectacular! The color, the font, the word placement, the black background, it's all perfection!
Amy
Comment Written 08-Dec-2015
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2015
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Your words are so kind and encouraging. I appreciate you taking time to read the poem and reviewing. The Six stars are very much appreciated as well. have a merry Christmas. :-))
Comment from amahra
Wow this was very beautifully written and (is seems) painstakingly show cased. You put a lot of effort into the visual presentation of the poem. The art work is awesome. Great job .
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2015
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Wow this was very beautifully written and (is seems) painstakingly show cased. You put a lot of effort into the visual presentation of the poem. The art work is awesome. Great job .
Comment Written 08-Dec-2015
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2015
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Thank you for your kind review. i enjoyed writing the poem . however, the message is deadly serious. merry Christmas :-))
Comment from trumby
Well written piece of work.
I assume that you didn't get 1st hand experience at how to get high.
I've done a few years of street evangelism with Teen Challenge. I've also got a Diploma In Street Evangelism & counselling.
I'm very glad that God helped you to get free from this horrible addiction
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2015
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Well written piece of work.
I assume that you didn't get 1st hand experience at how to get high.
I've done a few years of street evangelism with Teen Challenge. I've also got a Diploma In Street Evangelism & counselling.
I'm very glad that God helped you to get free from this horrible addiction
Comment Written 08-Dec-2015
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2015
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Thank you so much for reading the poem. I do have first hand experience but have been in recovery for many years. i never forget though. i enjoyed writing the poem . it was fun. however, the subject is deadly serious merry Christmas :-))
Comment from kiwijenny
But the skies will blacken
Yes it is the blackest of black
What a delusion the devil sends in the guise of fun
Yikes yikes ...I love your author notes
God bless
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2015
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But the skies will blacken
Yes it is the blackest of black
What a delusion the devil sends in the guise of fun
Yikes yikes ...I love your author notes
God bless
Comment Written 08-Dec-2015
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2015
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Thank you for taking the time to review the poem. the poem was fun to write but the subject is deadly serious. have a merry Christmas and a good night :-))
Comment from Jay Squires
It seems the poem was written from the vantage point of personal experience. I thought "horse" was describing "heroin". Very dramatically town, my friend. Yes, it describes the horrors of drug addiction.
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2015
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It seems the poem was written from the vantage point of personal experience. I thought "horse" was describing "heroin". Very dramatically town, my friend. Yes, it describes the horrors of drug addiction.
Comment Written 08-Dec-2015
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2015
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thank you so much for reading the poem and reviewing. white horse is slang for heroin and cocaine. have a merry Christmas :-))
Comment from patcelaw
The way you describe cocaine a is frightening. I cannot for the life of me how someone could become a slave to that stuff. However, many years ago I had a teen girl placed in my home as her foster parent. She was an addict and in 3 days, she just took off because she needed her fix and knew she could not get it in my home. I have often wondered what happened to her. So sad. Patricia
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2015
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The way you describe cocaine a is frightening. I cannot for the life of me how someone could become a slave to that stuff. However, many years ago I had a teen girl placed in my home as her foster parent. She was an addict and in 3 days, she just took off because she needed her fix and knew she could not get it in my home. I have often wondered what happened to her. So sad. Patricia
Comment Written 08-Dec-2015
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2015
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But for the grace of God.... Anyone can make a few poor choices and find themselves trapped in a world of addiction. doesn't take long. stars out innocently just out of curiosity and BAM. good people fall. have a merry Christmas :-))
Comment from LanceHill
Very nicely written. Cocaine is yet another drug that knows no boundaries. It doesn't care what race you are or if you are rich or poor. It's temporary pleasure causes permanent scarring. Thanks for sharing. God bless.
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2015
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Very nicely written. Cocaine is yet another drug that knows no boundaries. It doesn't care what race you are or if you are rich or poor. It's temporary pleasure causes permanent scarring. Thanks for sharing. God bless.
Comment Written 08-Dec-2015
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2015
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Thank you for taking the time to review the poem. the poem was fun to write but the subject is deadly serious. have a merry Christmas and a good night :-))
