Picture Poems
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Comment from rod007
Imagine if men could court the females the way turkeys do, it would a sight for sore eyes indeed. This came to my mind when I read this wonderful poem. How do men court women anyway---an interesting thought. Well done, Tom.
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2015
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Imagine if men could court the females the way turkeys do, it would a sight for sore eyes indeed. This came to my mind when I read this wonderful poem. How do men court women anyway---an interesting thought. Well done, Tom.
Comment Written 17-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2015
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Thank you Rod, we court them by spending a lot of money on them, maybe even get em drunk.
Hmmm, is there even such a thing as courtship these days?
Comment from Pantygynt
Why do I think this style of poem is so apt? Fo me the repetitive rhyme seems to complement the repetitive movement's of the cock bird's display. He goes through this rigmarole time and again and it is a bit like a poet rhyming on ten successive lines. A neat mach of form and content.
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2015
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Why do I think this style of poem is so apt? Fo me the repetitive rhyme seems to complement the repetitive movement's of the cock bird's display. He goes through this rigmarole time and again and it is a bit like a poet rhyming on ten successive lines. A neat mach of form and content.
Comment Written 15-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2015
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Thank you Pantygynt. That was my thought in choosing this firm.
Comment from poetadeu
Your art is a fantastic piece of work. These are
such beautiful creature's, and fair game at
Thanksgiving; unfortunate for them. Your
poem is also an equally interesting piece of
work. The structure in itself would take some
effort, which you make seem easy. I like the
notes and enjoyed the whole presentation.
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2015
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Your art is a fantastic piece of work. These are
such beautiful creature's, and fair game at
Thanksgiving; unfortunate for them. Your
poem is also an equally interesting piece of
work. The structure in itself would take some
effort, which you make seem easy. I like the
notes and enjoyed the whole presentation.
Comment Written 13-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2015
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Thank you poetadeau.
Comment from nancy_e_davis
Never heard of this form as I recall. My son had these Turkeys on his ranch. Everything you say is true. The toms became mean and they were so big they had to be cut in half in order to get them in the oven. Nicely structured poem Tom, well done. Nancy
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2015
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Never heard of this form as I recall. My son had these Turkeys on his ranch. Everything you say is true. The toms became mean and they were so big they had to be cut in half in order to get them in the oven. Nicely structured poem Tom, well done. Nancy
Comment Written 13-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2015
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Thank you Nancy. Big, but delicious.
Comment from RGstar
Good author's notes here. Your form is spot on as usual, treischel.
your poem speaks well in regards to the customs of the turkey, and a sight to see with open wings.
A nice write, once again.
Keep up the work.
Best wishes,
RGstar
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2015
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Good author's notes here. Your form is spot on as usual, treischel.
your poem speaks well in regards to the customs of the turkey, and a sight to see with open wings.
A nice write, once again.
Keep up the work.
Best wishes,
RGstar
Comment Written 13-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2015
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Thank you RG.
Comment from robina1978
You made an excellent photo of these turkeys in a wild part, and it complements your poem perfectly. You used yet an other form. I liked this rhyme form and your poem flows well. Turkeys doing their love dance.
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2015
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You made an excellent photo of these turkeys in a wild part, and it complements your poem perfectly. You used yet an other form. I liked this rhyme form and your poem flows well. Turkeys doing their love dance.
Comment Written 13-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2015
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Thank you Ine. For a lovely review.
Comment from Shirley E Kennedy
Our brush turkeys in Oz are getting a little frisky this spring also. Lol.
The perfect style for the story you tell.
Check your formatting because I see lines 3-8 indented similar to a new paragraph.
I can see the observation and care you have taken to
present the perfect verbal picture.
:-) Shirley
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2015
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Our brush turkeys in Oz are getting a little frisky this spring also. Lol.
The perfect style for the story you tell.
Check your formatting because I see lines 3-8 indented similar to a new paragraph.
I can see the observation and care you have taken to
present the perfect verbal picture.
:-) Shirley
Comment Written 13-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2015
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Thank you Shirley. That indentation is part of this particular format. I think I said that in the notes.
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Sorry, must have missed that.
I'm doing catch up reviews and I'm fighting a losing battle. I apologise.
:-) Shirley
Comment from robyn corum
1.) present (an?) urgent signal sight,
2.) a turkey trick whose show just might
release the mood she's holding tight.
--> hahahahahaha!
3.) (then) he'll realize the joy she brings.
--> re·al·ize -- Ë?rÄ?(É?)Ë?lÄ«z/
--> are you counting 'realize as 3 syllables ?
Thanks for this! It was fun and very enjoyable!
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reply by the author on 13-Sep-2015
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1.) present (an?) urgent signal sight,
2.) a turkey trick whose show just might
release the mood she's holding tight.
--> hahahahahaha!
3.) (then) he'll realize the joy she brings.
--> re·al·ize -- Ë?rÄ?(É?)Ë?lÄ«z/
--> are you counting 'realize as 3 syllables ?
Thanks for this! It was fun and very enjoyable!
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 13-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2015
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Thank you Robyn. Yes I'm counting realize as 3, re--al- ize.
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oops! Just REALIZED that when I copied and pasted the pronounciation from the dictionary Evil Ediie got it!
Comment from Brett Matthew West
"gaging" should be "gauging". Well written poem that depicts the male of the species always after the female, isn't that the truth whether it is turkeys or anything else? Notes are interesting also.
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2015
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"gaging" should be "gauging". Well written poem that depicts the male of the species always after the female, isn't that the truth whether it is turkeys or anything else? Notes are interesting also.
Comment Written 13-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2015
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Thank you Brett.
Comment from Joan E.
On the way home from Oregon, near Fresno, I saw two wild turkeys in a rough field--pretty exciting--thanks for bringing back the memory. Thanks for the details about the bird and the Duo-rhyme. I enjoyed the mono-rhyme sandwich and the rhythm, along with the shape that looks like a turkey's tale. Hugs and happy Sunday- Joan
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2015
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On the way home from Oregon, near Fresno, I saw two wild turkeys in a rough field--pretty exciting--thanks for bringing back the memory. Thanks for the details about the bird and the Duo-rhyme. I enjoyed the mono-rhyme sandwich and the rhythm, along with the shape that looks like a turkey's tale. Hugs and happy Sunday- Joan
Comment Written 12-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2015
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Thank you Joan. As always, so perceptive.
