Picture Poems
Viewing comments for Chapter 219 "Grasshopper, Hop!"Photograph Inspired Poems
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Comment from Joan E.
I could not resist the title and the photograph and appreciated your notes on the creature plus your own exhortation form. I enjoyed the clever repeat and rhymes. Here's to more happy camping- Joan, from Oregon, where camping rules!
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2015
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I could not resist the title and the photograph and appreciated your notes on the creature plus your own exhortation form. I enjoyed the clever repeat and rhymes. Here's to more happy camping- Joan, from Oregon, where camping rules!
Comment Written 06-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2015
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Thank you Joan. Yup, I need to get out there.
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We first came to the Festival on our honeymoon, and we have returned most of the 44 years subsequently. More remarkably, our son still joins us! Hugs and happy Sunday- Joan
Comment from rod007
I like this. It was more like a command from a drill sergeant but in the process with this melodious chat you'll save that grasshoppers life. That is a wonderful deed to accomplish but will our friend listen. I thought he was deaf, dumb and mute, lol. Well done, Tom.
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2015
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I like this. It was more like a command from a drill sergeant but in the process with this melodious chat you'll save that grasshoppers life. That is a wonderful deed to accomplish but will our friend listen. I thought he was deaf, dumb and mute, lol. Well done, Tom.
Comment Written 05-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2015
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Thank you rod. He did hop away eventually.
Comment from Pantygynt
A truly original form incorporating your favourite triple line rhymes. It is a neat form that could well be used for telling folk you didn't much go for to "Get lost!" There are the first and last lines. Now to think of someone I want to say it to.
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2015
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A truly original form incorporating your favourite triple line rhymes. It is a neat form that could well be used for telling folk you didn't much go for to "Get lost!" There are the first and last lines. Now to think of someone I want to say it to.
Comment Written 05-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2015
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Thank you Pantygynt. Go for it! I sure there is someone who fits the bill.
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oh I'll find someone soon enough. Cometh the hour etc.
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I have no doubt one lurks about.
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
Interesting poem form. Subject just as interesting. We usually see them as a nuisance, but you bring a new meaning to a grasshoppers life.
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2015
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Interesting poem form. Subject just as interesting. We usually see them as a nuisance, but you bring a new meaning to a grasshoppers life.
Comment Written 05-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2015
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Thank you Sandra. All things have their purpose.
Comment from robyn corum
Oh! Not only do I like this poem form -- Kudos! -- but I like this poem AND your photo. You have a well-rounded effort here! The poem made me smile! Thanks!
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2015
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Oh! Not only do I like this poem form -- Kudos! -- but I like this poem AND your photo. You have a well-rounded effort here! The poem made me smile! Thanks!
Comment Written 04-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2015
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Thank you Robyn. Alway happy to make someone smile.
Comment from ciliverde
Great poem, good job following the form and nice subject matter. My only suggestion is that the 3rd line feels a little bit awkward - the rhythm of it is difficult. I think you could keep the idea just the same, try different wording...something like
"you must hide in leafy morass."
The rest of it is perfect; it flows nicely.
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2015
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Great poem, good job following the form and nice subject matter. My only suggestion is that the 3rd line feels a little bit awkward - the rhythm of it is difficult. I think you could keep the idea just the same, try different wording...something like
"you must hide in leafy morass."
The rest of it is perfect; it flows nicely.
Comment Written 04-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2015
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Thank you cliverde. I reread it and agree, so I made a change.
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I'm glad to be able to help, although I'm no expert. :)
Comment from Wabigoon
Treischel--
Quite a journey you made on this poem! After reading your extensive notes I wish you'd included some of them -- like the religious laws about eating insects!
I know you are sticking to a tight form that you have created but I could not help amending that last line to "So, hop, idiot!"
Thanks, this was fun, informative as well.
Wabigoon/Jeff
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2015
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Treischel--
Quite a journey you made on this poem! After reading your extensive notes I wish you'd included some of them -- like the religious laws about eating insects!
I know you are sticking to a tight form that you have created but I could not help amending that last line to "So, hop, idiot!"
Thanks, this was fun, informative as well.
Wabigoon/Jeff
Comment Written 04-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2015
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Thank you wabigoon. I know what you mean.
Comment from kiwijenny
I've eaten crickets. They have a grainy texture. Weird but crispy
Well penned ..there is a need to hop so you don't become food
Great art ...I like the green font too
Good job
God bless
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2015
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I've eaten crickets. They have a grainy texture. Weird but crispy
Well penned ..there is a need to hop so you don't become food
Great art ...I like the green font too
Good job
God bless
Comment Written 04-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2015
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Thank you kiwijenny. Those must be Kosher too! appreciate you noticing thew font.
