Savannah Love
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Comment from humpwhistle
On the one hand, Barbara, one rejection letter isn't the end of the world. But if this is an issue that's been niggling around in the back of your mind anyway, maybe you should make an adjustment. Is it possible that moving the entire Chickamauga bit into the third of forth position (as opposed to the first) you might avoid a major re-write?
Just a thought. If the first two chapters of the Paige and Cash story contain hints about a ghostly presence, maybe the readers will want to hear Bradley's story at that point.
Good luck, Barbara.
Peace, Lww
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2015
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On the one hand, Barbara, one rejection letter isn't the end of the world. But if this is an issue that's been niggling around in the back of your mind anyway, maybe you should make an adjustment. Is it possible that moving the entire Chickamauga bit into the third of forth position (as opposed to the first) you might avoid a major re-write?
Just a thought. If the first two chapters of the Paige and Cash story contain hints about a ghostly presence, maybe the readers will want to hear Bradley's story at that point.
Good luck, Barbara.
Peace, Lww
Comment Written 08-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2015
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I can add to the journals that Paige reads to find out about the Bookman history. A large part is written by Alice, Bradley's wife. It has been bothering me from the beginning, so I guess I will make the change. It should be fairly easy to do. Thank you.
Comment from Sasha
Yes, I think you need to incorporate Bradley's story into the book rather than designate it as background information. I guess I haven't used enough words so I have to add blah, blah, blah to meet the site's quota.
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2015
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Yes, I think you need to incorporate Bradley's story into the book rather than designate it as background information. I guess I haven't used enough words so I have to add blah, blah, blah to meet the site's quota.
Comment Written 08-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2015
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Thank you. I think that's what I'll do.
Comment from judiverse
Hey, if I have a chance to earn a few member cents, I'll take it! I really enjoyed your story, and one rejection is just that, one. I don't know if you were given any guidance about what they thought or what their recommendations were. If you are re-thinking the Bradley Bookman story, you might start the novel with Paige appearing to take possession of the house. You might consider having someone tell his story to Paige. I've forgotten the name of the great character, the black man, who seems a lot of history. Maybe he could come in early on to tell part of the story. judi
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2015
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Hey, if I have a chance to earn a few member cents, I'll take it! I really enjoyed your story, and one rejection is just that, one. I don't know if you were given any guidance about what they thought or what their recommendations were. If you are re-thinking the Bradley Bookman story, you might start the novel with Paige appearing to take possession of the house. You might consider having someone tell his story to Paige. I've forgotten the name of the great character, the black man, who seems a lot of history. Maybe he could come in early on to tell part of the story. judi
Comment Written 08-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2015
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Amos is the gentleman's name. I think I can also add it when Paige is reviewing the journals about what Alice wrote. The publisher said nothing except it wasn't their type of story. Thank you.
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You're welcome. So often it takes several tries to find a publisher. I believe Bob "Mastery" tried quite a few before he got published. judi
Comment from Jay Squires
I'm sorry, but I don't understand what you mean by, "I am wondering if I just need to incorporate Bradley's story during the novel." Rather, I'm not sure how you would incorporate it. Would you wait until there is the first "visit" by Bradley to give his back-story?
Either that, or have the transferer of the property give the "quaint" back-story of his death in the Civil War?
Something like that?
I'd like to help you more, but I just need to get my footing on what you are intending.
Oh, and if I am lucky enough to be one of the two readers to get a chance at a pump, I'll take it, thank you. LOL, any furtherance I can do on PM.
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reply by the author on 08-Aug-2015
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I'm sorry, but I don't understand what you mean by, "I am wondering if I just need to incorporate Bradley's story during the novel." Rather, I'm not sure how you would incorporate it. Would you wait until there is the first "visit" by Bradley to give his back-story?
Either that, or have the transferer of the property give the "quaint" back-story of his death in the Civil War?
Something like that?
I'd like to help you more, but I just need to get my footing on what you are intending.
Oh, and if I am lucky enough to be one of the two readers to get a chance at a pump, I'll take it, thank you. LOL, any furtherance I can do on PM.
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Comment Written 08-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2015
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Paige goes through the journals that Alice wrote so I could add it to that. Thank you for the question.
Comment from barkingdog
They--who ever THEY are--say that it's best to reveal key information a bit at a time rather than all at once.
It would probably be better to let everyone, characters and readers, discover who is haunting and why gradually. It adds a mystery line to the story.
I'm trying to learn to do this myself. It keeps a reader reading.
:) ellen
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reply by the author on 08-Aug-2015
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They--who ever THEY are--say that it's best to reveal key information a bit at a time rather than all at once.
It would probably be better to let everyone, characters and readers, discover who is haunting and why gradually. It adds a mystery line to the story.
I'm trying to learn to do this myself. It keeps a reader reading.
:) ellen
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Comment Written 08-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2015
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I think I will do that. I can add it to Alice's journals. Thank you.
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It's like eating that delicious box of candy. Make it last. :) e
