The Clown's Masquerade
minute poem16 total reviews
Comment from Pantygynt
This is deep stuff for a minute poem. Are we not always behind such a mask as you portray. Ou personas greet the world and all that's in it. While egos hide behind their masks every minute. I enjoyed this it reminded me of my drama course at college and the comedia della arte masks, or half masks that allow the actors mouth to move alive and speak the word while ego hides behind the painted and bejewelled mask that presents persona to the worls.
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2015
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This is deep stuff for a minute poem. Are we not always behind such a mask as you portray. Ou personas greet the world and all that's in it. While egos hide behind their masks every minute. I enjoyed this it reminded me of my drama course at college and the comedia della arte masks, or half masks that allow the actors mouth to move alive and speak the word while ego hides behind the painted and bejewelled mask that presents persona to the worls.
Comment Written 21-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2015
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Oh what a Lovely review. You're a gem here. Rare is it that you find someone to really be thorough, dive into a piece. I truly appreciate that.
And yes, I think we all do as well. Ha, it's funny. When I looked for this picture, those half masks came up everywhere!
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If I think a poem is worth a decent review it gets it - as yours did! lol!
Comment from reconciled
"Breach far if you must"....Hey Greg...-smile- how are you man...? Hope you and your family are well. Love your poem....just have a bit of trouble with the ending. I've heard it said so many times...with varied explanations when asked what exactly was meant by that. Usually followed by nervous laughter and a brushing aside. Immediately signaling they're ignorance of the power of God and the Gospel of the New Testament in general. One could, would say that the God whom created us and the world we live in ...is in control and has always been. But ...He says He has given it over for a time...it- His creation...to-...evil...unless, we being in grafted into the vine, choose to stop it...not by turning away...but by bold confrontation...beginning inwardly at the root. So really He has given us control with choice ...to either succumb to it or stand against it. It now being evil....sorry...haha..."to clip soul heavy, Honor Christ's memory"...wink...love Michael
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2015
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"Breach far if you must"....Hey Greg...-smile- how are you man...? Hope you and your family are well. Love your poem....just have a bit of trouble with the ending. I've heard it said so many times...with varied explanations when asked what exactly was meant by that. Usually followed by nervous laughter and a brushing aside. Immediately signaling they're ignorance of the power of God and the Gospel of the New Testament in general. One could, would say that the God whom created us and the world we live in ...is in control and has always been. But ...He says He has given it over for a time...it- His creation...to-...evil...unless, we being in grafted into the vine, choose to stop it...not by turning away...but by bold confrontation...beginning inwardly at the root. So really He has given us control with choice ...to either succumb to it or stand against it. It now being evil....sorry...haha..."to clip soul heavy, Honor Christ's memory"...wink...love Michael
Comment Written 21-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2015
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Hey man! Thank you so much for that! You're awesome. And yeah, that last part is tough to do. I've been battling anxiety my entire life. Recently I've tried to just let Him take control, trust in His plan. The other stuff is pointless to worry about!
Ahh but easier said than done. I sometimes CANNOT let anxiety go. It's like it's a piece of me. Same thing with addictive voices, etc. I think it's just me. It's sad but maybe I Can change one day. Maybe I just give God a little of the weight to carry each day.
And yes, the world is broken. We made it that way. But I don't know man, I really think the end of days could be nearer than ever. Societies have Always said that, yes. But this is a VERY different tine. Things are far too advanced for our own good. Things are too CLOSE. From bad messages spread instantly, to hateful words typed.
I just don't know.
But I DO know that I am really grateful for you reading this. I've been a away for a bit, prompts here or there, but I'm starting to post again! I'll be reading you soon. Any pieces to start with?
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Sorry Bro...I may have sounded mean...but I wasnt trying to be. Its just that I've spent a long time searching for that "plan". Waiting for my Goliath to prove my love. I'm almost offended by some empty phrases now...that end up maps without direction. Perhaps the "plan" is and has always been Christ Jesus...His atonement...if...we follow His example as best we can in each our own worlds. Sounds so simple...but yep...its not...it is sacrifice. It means killing something that doesn't want to die...everyday. I just wrote a poem Mike....lol...ahh love you Bro...glad you're back...-headshake-...I gotta gets some air....cheers-
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Oh I know! I just wanted you to know that I understood that fight. As you know. And yeah it's not easy. It's so hard. But I try... :)
I'll check that out
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I didn't see your poem on your page?
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Oh no....I was being funny....I was being you...telling me...to give you a break..."I just wrote a poem mike....leave me alone"....lol...ahh well sometimes it works...sometimes not so much...love-
Comment from rspoet
You've written an excellent minute poem for the contest
It has exact syllables per the form
The rhymes are very good
Played out upon a stage
The masquerade dance
behind facades
but ultimately must reach to Him
Excellent picture, rather large for the poem
well done
Good luck in the contest
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2015
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You've written an excellent minute poem for the contest
It has exact syllables per the form
The rhymes are very good
Played out upon a stage
The masquerade dance
behind facades
but ultimately must reach to Him
Excellent picture, rather large for the poem
well done
Good luck in the contest
Comment Written 21-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2015
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Haha I know I saw that about the picture too. It's huge! :) Thank you so much for reading this!
Comment from I am Cat
Well well well... I just sent you an email you may completely disregard! LOL
You didn't need me at all, young man (which doesn't surprise me in the least! ;)
You've got this poetry thang under control.
I'm always amazed and delighted with your word choices and
you end up pulling me right into that soul of yours.
I enjoy the journey each and every time.
I wouldn't change a thing, my dear.
Not a thing.
I absolutely love the artwork you chose... and this part (the middle)
Dance behind mascarade's painted
facades, tainted
Greet grins, make rounds...
parade of clowns
is my favorite part.
well done.
But then, I'm not surprised at all.
Cat
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reply by the author on 21-Jul-2015
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Well well well... I just sent you an email you may completely disregard! LOL
You didn't need me at all, young man (which doesn't surprise me in the least! ;)
You've got this poetry thang under control.
I'm always amazed and delighted with your word choices and
you end up pulling me right into that soul of yours.
I enjoy the journey each and every time.
I wouldn't change a thing, my dear.
Not a thing.
I absolutely love the artwork you chose... and this part (the middle)
Dance behind mascarade's painted
facades, tainted
Greet grins, make rounds...
parade of clowns
is my favorite part.
well done.
But then, I'm not surprised at all.
Cat
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Comment Written 21-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2015
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Wow that's so sweet. Thank you. I just saw your revisions. I seriously love them but I think I have to fit in those "constraints". My favorite! Lol.
But really thank you for seeing this and reviewing. It means a lot. Especially your compliments. It makes me feel like I have some talent. Ugh my confidence is awful ;)
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Oh believe me... you have plenty of talent... we'll work on the confidence thing, ok? The talent? You've got skads of that! ;)
No worries! ;)
Comment from royowen
A really good entry in this Minute poem's contest Gregory, I love the theme, it reminds me a little of "send in the clowns". The sad almost tragic life and background of the clown, sometimes tragically portrayed life, hidden behind make up, well done, Gregory, did the prompt require 3 stanzas or is this your own initiative? Good qualifier, excellent theme, well written and inspired, well done, great entry, good luck, blessings, Roy.
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reply by the author on 21-Jul-2015
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A really good entry in this Minute poem's contest Gregory, I love the theme, it reminds me a little of "send in the clowns". The sad almost tragic life and background of the clown, sometimes tragically portrayed life, hidden behind make up, well done, Gregory, did the prompt require 3 stanzas or is this your own initiative? Good qualifier, excellent theme, well written and inspired, well done, great entry, good luck, blessings, Roy.
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Comment Written 21-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2015
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Roy you're the best. Thank you so much. I got that same vibe when I just looked again! You have interpreted this Perfectly. That's such a relief. Thank you Roy!
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My pleasure, my friend,
Comment from Chunger
The rhythm of this poem is fantastic! I love the simplicity as well as the depth of meaning. In addition, I do not generally like images with poetry because I feel it narrows the reader's opportunity for interpretation, but in this case it works very well. Great job!
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2015
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The rhythm of this poem is fantastic! I love the simplicity as well as the depth of meaning. In addition, I do not generally like images with poetry because I feel it narrows the reader's opportunity for interpretation, but in this case it works very well. Great job!
Comment Written 21-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2015
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Wow. I'm blown away. Thank you! Truly that means more than you know. And, I feel the same way about images! I never used to but then I felt it was a disservice to those who like them? Hmm not sure. TRULY thank you so much...
