Picture Poems
Viewing comments for Chapter 213 "Rain-soaked Roses"Photograph Inspired Poems
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Comment from Shirley E Kennedy
The Rondel is an impressive style and you have used it well to portray the beauty of rain-soaked roses.
The words, repeated lines and image are lovely.
It is a shame that the print is small for when combined with gold colour choice it is quite difficult to see.
I magnified it to read it -some may not bother.
( Not a criticism just a point to ponder)
:-) Shirley
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2015
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The Rondel is an impressive style and you have used it well to portray the beauty of rain-soaked roses.
The words, repeated lines and image are lovely.
It is a shame that the print is small for when combined with gold colour choice it is quite difficult to see.
I magnified it to read it -some may not bother.
( Not a criticism just a point to ponder)
:-) Shirley
Comment Written 15-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2015
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Thank you Shirley. My wife said the same at first, but said once you get going it not too bad, so i left it.
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
This is a lovely poem, Tom, and I love roses, these ones really are beautiful. You say to photographed them but didn't say whether or not they were in your garden? They certainly are a lovely cluster. Excellent again, poem and photo made for each other. :) Sandra
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2015
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This is a lovely poem, Tom, and I love roses, these ones really are beautiful. You say to photographed them but didn't say whether or not they were in your garden? They certainly are a lovely cluster. Excellent again, poem and photo made for each other. :) Sandra
Comment Written 14-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2015
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Thank you Sandra. Actually they were at a cemetery.
Comment from Pantygynt
This is ridiculous! I'm sitting here repeating the word "orange" aloud in an attempt to make it sound singularly syllabic! Now ah c'n mimic American accents till the cows come home but no way sirree c'n ah git orange into one syllable! unless ah gits rid o' the "a" so ornge! Aw shucks!
It is a pretty poem for a pretty scene. You have to choose that "a" line ending carefully to allow for all the rhymes you have to produce in this rondeau form.
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2015
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This is ridiculous! I'm sitting here repeating the word "orange" aloud in an attempt to make it sound singularly syllabic! Now ah c'n mimic American accents till the cows come home but no way sirree c'n ah git orange into one syllable! unless ah gits rid o' the "a" so ornge! Aw shucks!
It is a pretty poem for a pretty scene. You have to choose that "a" line ending carefully to allow for all the rhymes you have to produce in this rondeau form.
Comment Written 13-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2015
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Thank ya Pantygynt. Cowboys off-ten injoy an o-range out on thee range. Or sumfin like da.
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
Very insightful, the roses are pretty and I get the flow of the poem, never knew there is so much to learn about poems. I can almost smell the roses, I only have difficulty reading it, the orange font doesn't work well on the green background, it might be my eyes only, but maybe you can just adjust the background or the font colour
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2015
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Very insightful, the roses are pretty and I get the flow of the poem, never knew there is so much to learn about poems. I can almost smell the roses, I only have difficulty reading it, the orange font doesn't work well on the green background, it might be my eyes only, but maybe you can just adjust the background or the font colour
Comment Written 13-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2015
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Thank you Sandra. I will. Take a look and see it i can soften it.
Comment from Joan E.
Thank you for sharing the inspiration for this Rondeau--the intense color of the roses and the dew drops are striking. Your rhymes and repeats are quite effective. Cheers- Joan
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2015
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Thank you for sharing the inspiration for this Rondeau--the intense color of the roses and the dew drops are striking. Your rhymes and repeats are quite effective. Cheers- Joan
Comment Written 13-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2015
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Thank you Joan. Alway wonderful to here from you.
Comment from rspoet
This an interesting form I've only seen a few times before.
You have brought it to life very well
The rhymes are exact to the pattern you noted (good you did because I did not remember it)
The repeating line is a perfect match to the photograph.
The poem has a very good meter and flows well
Nicely framed in grass green with a font of orange roses.
Well done
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2015
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This an interesting form I've only seen a few times before.
You have brought it to life very well
The rhymes are exact to the pattern you noted (good you did because I did not remember it)
The repeating line is a perfect match to the photograph.
The poem has a very good meter and flows well
Nicely framed in grass green with a font of orange roses.
Well done
Comment Written 12-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2015
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Thank you very much, rspoet.
Comment from JourneyHolm
Well done. This is a lovely poem. Might I suggest ending the first stanza similarly to the second and third? It kind of threw me for a loop. Regardless, I thought this was very nice. The rhyme was sweet as roses.
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2015
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Well done. This is a lovely poem. Might I suggest ending the first stanza similarly to the second and third? It kind of threw me for a loop. Regardless, I thought this was very nice. The rhyme was sweet as roses.
Comment Written 12-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2015
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Thank you JourneyHolm. I hear what you say, but that is not the format.
