Picture Poems
Viewing comments for Chapter 214 "Another Day Dawns"Photograph Inspired Poems
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Comment from Look4depth
This is quite beautiful, and you've done a lovely job with the presentation too!
My only suggestion is in your final stanza, it's not as rhythmic as the first two.
I like the style you chose, as the refrain is like another day to be thankful for. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2015
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This is quite beautiful, and you've done a lovely job with the presentation too!
My only suggestion is in your final stanza, it's not as rhythmic as the first two.
I like the style you chose, as the refrain is like another day to be thankful for. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 10-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2015
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Thank you Look4depth.
Comment from Serendipity!
This poem is so beautiful, so well written. How can I find anything to correct? It has been carefully written to express the beauty, the perfection of the dawning of a new, especially a summer's day. It deserves a place of honor...somewhere, but certainly not in a garden shed. A sunroom, perhaps, or ...where does one first greet the dawn?
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2015
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This poem is so beautiful, so well written. How can I find anything to correct? It has been carefully written to express the beauty, the perfection of the dawning of a new, especially a summer's day. It deserves a place of honor...somewhere, but certainly not in a garden shed. A sunroom, perhaps, or ...where does one first greet the dawn?
Comment Written 10-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2015
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Thank you Serendipity. How about on a porch or deck?
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Right!
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Right!
Comment from mumsyone
Great poem and photo. I like the fact that you use punctuation and use it well.
While sipping on our daily brew(,)
Our grateful eyes may soon uplift
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2015
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Great poem and photo. I like the fact that you use punctuation and use it well.
While sipping on our daily brew(,)
Our grateful eyes may soon uplift
Comment Written 10-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2015
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Thank you mumsyone. I use it in some, and not in others. Depends on the style of the poem.
Comment from tennesseerose
Well done. The poem paints a wonderful picture of how a day can be. Reading this makes one look forward to the day coming in. You did very well on the style-rhymes beautifully where it is supposed to. If one reads this every morning, the day, at least, will start out right. I like it very much!
reply by the author on 19-May-2015
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Well done. The poem paints a wonderful picture of how a day can be. Reading this makes one look forward to the day coming in. You did very well on the style-rhymes beautifully where it is supposed to. If one reads this every morning, the day, at least, will start out right. I like it very much!
Comment Written 19-May-2015
reply by the author on 19-May-2015
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Thank you tennesseerose. Great thought!
Comment from Nosha17
I think the flowers are slightly bigger than our harebells, very pretty with the tinges of dew. Lovely imagery and rhyming to convey your thoughts on an early spring morning. Faye
reply by the author on 19-May-2015
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I think the flowers are slightly bigger than our harebells, very pretty with the tinges of dew. Lovely imagery and rhyming to convey your thoughts on an early spring morning. Faye
Comment Written 19-May-2015
reply by the author on 19-May-2015
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Thank you Faye.
Comment from rod007
The precious gift of life. Mine has become a quest for healing for the hurt that has been inflicted on me. Yours is an observation. Different perspectives but the end is the same--peace--love with God. Well done, Tom.
reply by the author on 17-May-2015
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The precious gift of life. Mine has become a quest for healing for the hurt that has been inflicted on me. Yours is an observation. Different perspectives but the end is the same--peace--love with God. Well done, Tom.
Comment Written 17-May-2015
reply by the author on 17-May-2015
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Thank rod. We each travel our own roads, my friend.
Comment from Angel Debbie
A wonderful write with beauty in every line
This write is tender yet up lifting to the soul
The picture is wonderful and beautiful a great match for this write.
Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 17-May-2015
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A wonderful write with beauty in every line
This write is tender yet up lifting to the soul
The picture is wonderful and beautiful a great match for this write.
Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 17-May-2015
reply by the author on 17-May-2015
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Thank you Angel Deb. I really appreciate your comments.
Comment from Shirley E Kennedy
A lovely image which complements the subject perfectly.
As I head towards winter any spring blessings make my heart happy.
Well written Quatrains which stay true to stated rhyme and meter.
Yes indeed, the refrain does add extra depth.
:-) Shirley
reply by the author on 17-May-2015
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A lovely image which complements the subject perfectly.
As I head towards winter any spring blessings make my heart happy.
Well written Quatrains which stay true to stated rhyme and meter.
Yes indeed, the refrain does add extra depth.
:-) Shirley
Comment Written 17-May-2015
reply by the author on 17-May-2015
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Thank you Shirley. I am so pleased you liked it.
Comment from Eric1
Hi tom, firstly I have to say that the repeated refrain does it's job, it adds impact to your already perfect poem
great use of imagery and description, wonderful rhyming,rhythm and flow and excellent use of alliteration my friend.
reply by the author on 16-May-2015
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Hi tom, firstly I have to say that the repeated refrain does it's job, it adds impact to your already perfect poem
great use of imagery and description, wonderful rhyming,rhythm and flow and excellent use of alliteration my friend.
Comment Written 16-May-2015
reply by the author on 16-May-2015
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Thank you very much Eric.i appreciate that wonderful review.
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Sorry about calling you Tom Roy LOL!
Comment from Brett Matthew West
Author seems to be saying each new day that dawns is a gift and uses statements such as "each new day is a gift," "dawning day's rebirth," and more to illustrate his idea.
reply by the author on 16-May-2015
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Author seems to be saying each new day that dawns is a gift and uses statements such as "each new day is a gift," "dawning day's rebirth," and more to illustrate his idea.
Comment Written 16-May-2015
reply by the author on 16-May-2015
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Thank you Brett. Yup, that's it.
