Comment from Joan E.

Excellent

Your photograph of the home altar establishes the mood for your tanka perfectly. I particularly admired your pivot line in this 5-7-5-7-7 composition. Best wishes in the contest- Joan

 Comment Written 18-Mar-2015

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reply by the author on 18-Mar-2015

Thank you Joan

Comment from Selina Stambi

Excellent

I have to be honest, Tom, I haven't quite mastered the Japanese forms. Actually ... I'm clueless!

So .. tanka very much. :) You've done a good job as far as I can see. Best wishes for the contest.

Sonali

 Comment Written 17-Mar-2015

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reply by the author on 17-Mar-2015

Thank you Sonali. I tend to agree with you. To me the Japanese take all the beauty out of poetry with all their esoteric rules. No rhyme, no alliteration, no punctuation, no capital letters, makes no sense. But i try everything, because it's good to be diverse.

Comment from TAB_that's me

Excellent

Petitions placed for answers is a very poignant phrase. Great alliteration. Perfect tanka form. Good luck in the contest.
Teresa

 Comment Written 16-Mar-2015

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reply by the author on 16-Mar-2015

Thank you Teresa.

Comment from emrpoems

Excellent

perfect syllable count for the form
you place all you petitions at the altar and I am sure they are answered
Well paired picture and poem.

 Comment Written 16-Mar-2015

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reply by the author on 16-Mar-2015

Thank you Erica.

Comment from patcelaw

Excellent

May we all keep our prayer altar bight with the light of His word and pray for peace and light for the world. May we have a heart in our prayers for those who don't know the Lord. Patricia

 Comment Written 16-Mar-2015

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reply by the author on 16-Mar-2015

Thank you Patricia. I didn't mention it, because it is in a contest , but that is in my house.

Comment from meggie13

Excellent

Most people have an altar at home. It's their refuge to say their prayers in a quiet environment. A special moment for a talk with Jesus. Beautiful picture to mirror your poem.

 Comment Written 16-Mar-2015

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reply by the author on 16-Mar-2015

Thank you meg give. Yes, that is the one in mine.

reply by meggie13 on 16-Mar-2015

You are most welcome. I am a Christian too.