Sins of My Father
Viewing comments for Chapter 46 "Fifteen Year Old's Wisdom"A coming of age story.
8 total reviews
Comment from Rosalyne
Hi, Gretchen.
Another great chapter. You have shown well Dean's pain, and lack of forgiveness toward his mother. Rory, an astute kid, has picked up on this. Roles are reversed, Rory taking on the adult responsibility, trying to coax his father into forgiveness. You showed this well throughout the chapter.
Bye
Rosalyne :)
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2014
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Hi, Gretchen.
Another great chapter. You have shown well Dean's pain, and lack of forgiveness toward his mother. Rory, an astute kid, has picked up on this. Roles are reversed, Rory taking on the adult responsibility, trying to coax his father into forgiveness. You showed this well throughout the chapter.
Bye
Rosalyne :)
Comment Written 20-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2014
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Thank you so much for the wonderful review and the nice comments. Gretchen
Comment from Gladness
I am trying to remember what his mom did that he needs to forgive. ... was it taking Rory to the AA place? Or something else?
Very good at showing the ajitation of Rory's dad.
The ending of this chapter could be better. It seemed to just stop without ending. Or maybe that's what you wanted.
Anita
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2014
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I am trying to remember what his mom did that he needs to forgive. ... was it taking Rory to the AA place? Or something else?
Very good at showing the ajitation of Rory's dad.
The ending of this chapter could be better. It seemed to just stop without ending. Or maybe that's what you wanted.
Anita
Comment Written 19-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2014
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There is another book on my profile, The 'Shine baby. It is all about Dean. Gives a lot of insight into Why he is the way he is in Sins of My Father. Thank you so my for the wonderful review. Gretchen
Comment from Misrael
It looks like the table has been turned and Rory is forcing his dad to face up to what is and could be. I did find one very small mistake but don't remember where it was. Good read and keep up the good work.
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2014
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It looks like the table has been turned and Rory is forcing his dad to face up to what is and could be. I did find one very small mistake but don't remember where it was. Good read and keep up the good work.
Comment Written 19-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2014
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Thank you for the great review and the helpful comments. Gretchen
Comment from Sankey
This is a very poignant chapter. Some good advice in here for young people to their Dads and so on. You did real good. A lot of positive philosophy or psychology in here.
Trouble is people will not learn these lessons. There is a scripture in the bible that talks about not despising their youth. Meaning that some times a young person does have the right word for a particular time. Good Onya as we say Down Under!
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2014
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This is a very poignant chapter. Some good advice in here for young people to their Dads and so on. You did real good. A lot of positive philosophy or psychology in here.
Trouble is people will not learn these lessons. There is a scripture in the bible that talks about not despising their youth. Meaning that some times a young person does have the right word for a particular time. Good Onya as we say Down Under!
Comment Written 19-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2014
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Well, thank you kindly, as we say here in the south. I really appreciate the six and the kind words. Gretchen
Comment from nancy_e_davis
Rory is like a pit bull. He is hanging in there but I don't know if he will get through to his dad. Dean is stubborn. All Carolyn needs is to know that Dean loves her. She needs to hear it. She has helped him raise Rory, I think she has atoned for any misdeed that he is holding on to. Now is when she needs his support. Good job Gretchen. Great imagery during the
dinner talk. xsx Nancy
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2014
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Rory is like a pit bull. He is hanging in there but I don't know if he will get through to his dad. Dean is stubborn. All Carolyn needs is to know that Dean loves her. She needs to hear it. She has helped him raise Rory, I think she has atoned for any misdeed that he is holding on to. Now is when she needs his support. Good job Gretchen. Great imagery during the
dinner talk. xsx Nancy
Comment Written 19-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2014
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I think deep down, Carolyn knows he loves her, but it probably would be good to hear it spoken. But Dean is a stubborn one. Thank you so much for the great review and the insightful review. Gretchen
Comment from Jay Squires
when she would want to lay down and die, [to LIE down]
"You told me I was brave for going to see Kathleen. I had to get that bravery from somewhere." [Good, telling line.]
"Forget it," I mumbles. "Let's just go get some dinner." [I MUMBLE]
A good, important chapter showing Rory's growing maturity.
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2014
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when she would want to lay down and die, [to LIE down]
"You told me I was brave for going to see Kathleen. I had to get that bravery from somewhere." [Good, telling line.]
"Forget it," I mumbles. "Let's just go get some dinner." [I MUMBLE]
A good, important chapter showing Rory's growing maturity.
Comment Written 19-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2014
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Got the spag. Thank you for pointing it out. Sometimes these fingers have a mind of their own. Thanks for the great review. Gretchen
Comment from AAud
I like how realistic the relationship is between Rory and his father. Great dialog. And I like how thoughtful Rory is.
Only two minor typos - Since the story is told in present tense, "Granddad asked" should have been "Granddad (asks)". the other one was: "Forget it," I mumbles. (I mumble)
Other than that - stellar. Looking forward to seeing how it wraps up.
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2014
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I like how realistic the relationship is between Rory and his father. Great dialog. And I like how thoughtful Rory is.
Only two minor typos - Since the story is told in present tense, "Granddad asked" should have been "Granddad (asks)". the other one was: "Forget it," I mumbles. (I mumble)
Other than that - stellar. Looking forward to seeing how it wraps up.
Comment Written 19-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2014
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Thank you for pointing out the spags. I appreciate the wonderful review. Gretchen
Comment from Spiritual Echo
You must be a remarkable woman. For the analogy about the snake and the coach's advice about winning--well both are memorable and will stick in my head forever.
Good stuff.
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2014
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You must be a remarkable woman. For the analogy about the snake and the coach's advice about winning--well both are memorable and will stick in my head forever.
Good stuff.
Comment Written 19-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2014
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Thank you for the compliment and the nice review. I appreciate it. Gretchen
