Sins of My Father
Viewing comments for Chapter 44 "The liar unmasked"A coming of age story.
12 total reviews
Comment from Gladness
Boy that girl is some piece of work. I kept wondering if his dad had a similar experience with Cassie's mom. I noticed you are writing in present tense, no doubt you have been all along, I finally noticed.
Good chapter
Anita
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2014
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Boy that girl is some piece of work. I kept wondering if his dad had a similar experience with Cassie's mom. I noticed you are writing in present tense, no doubt you have been all along, I finally noticed.
Good chapter
Anita
Comment Written 19-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2014
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So far it has been in present tense. Thank you for the great review. Gretchen
Comment from Sefiros
Good for Rory. He may not know who he is, but he knows what he isn't. And he's smart enough to see through all the bullshit that Cassie is a manipulator.
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2014
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Good for Rory. He may not know who he is, but he knows what he isn't. And he's smart enough to see through all the bullshit that Cassie is a manipulator.
Comment Written 17-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2014
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Thank you so much for the great review and the nice comments. Gretchen
Comment from Rosalyne
Hi, Gretchen.
Great chapter. I really like how you have shown the growth in Rory. Confronting Cassie isn't an easy step, but you carried this out well. Rory no longer under her spell has broken free to believe in himself, and come to accept who he is, while at the same time seeing Cassie's inner ugliness. Again, another great chapter.
Bye
Rosalyne :)
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2014
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Hi, Gretchen.
Great chapter. I really like how you have shown the growth in Rory. Confronting Cassie isn't an easy step, but you carried this out well. Rory no longer under her spell has broken free to believe in himself, and come to accept who he is, while at the same time seeing Cassie's inner ugliness. Again, another great chapter.
Bye
Rosalyne :)
Comment Written 17-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2014
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Thank you for the continued support and the wonderful review. Gretchen
Comment from Misrael
Well I hope that means that he has accepted himself as he is and knows that he is ok. I keep on enjoying this story and look forward to each post. Keep up the good work.
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2014
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Well I hope that means that he has accepted himself as he is and knows that he is ok. I keep on enjoying this story and look forward to each post. Keep up the good work.
Comment Written 16-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2014
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Thank you so much for the nice comments and the excellent review. Gretchen
Comment from nancy_e_davis
Rory is growing as a person. He won't be so ga-ga over the next girl he likes. He is learning the value of the people he loves as well. His Grandmother is the only mother he has and he is worried. Good chapter Gretchen. I am glad he let Cassie
know what he thinks of her. He brought her down a peg too! LOL Nancy
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2014
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Rory is growing as a person. He won't be so ga-ga over the next girl he likes. He is learning the value of the people he loves as well. His Grandmother is the only mother he has and he is worried. Good chapter Gretchen. I am glad he let Cassie
know what he thinks of her. He brought her down a peg too! LOL Nancy
Comment Written 16-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2014
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Again, thank you for the great review and the nice comments. Gretchen
Comment from adewpearl
I love the dialogue with Cassie - I really like that he sticks up for himself and confronts her. She is one piece of work to expect an apology from him. She really is clueless.
Good dialogue with his dad, too, about his grandma and if he has told the grandparents about Rory's theft. Great character development through both conversations. Brooke :-)
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2014
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I love the dialogue with Cassie - I really like that he sticks up for himself and confronts her. She is one piece of work to expect an apology from him. She really is clueless.
Good dialogue with his dad, too, about his grandma and if he has told the grandparents about Rory's theft. Great character development through both conversations. Brooke :-)
Comment Written 16-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2014
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Thank you for the great review and the nice comments. Gretchen
Comment from Sankey
As we say here..."Good onya mate!" This is going along nicely. Always great when the star of the show faces reality and realises when a chick is just using him. Be interesting to see if she (Cassie) "gets a bun in her oven!" Do you know that saying?
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2014
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As we say here..."Good onya mate!" This is going along nicely. Always great when the star of the show faces reality and realises when a chick is just using him. Be interesting to see if she (Cassie) "gets a bun in her oven!" Do you know that saying?
Comment Written 16-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2014
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Thank you for the great review and the nice comments. Gretchen
Comment from Jay Squires
The muses would come and crap on my head if I didn't give you a 6 for this superb chapter, Gretchen.
I don't like to wash my hair twice in one day.
Below is an example why you deserve it (actually, that inventive line and the ones that follow, showing a significant change in his character.
"You're not real popular," he says. [Very creative! Good!]
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2014
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The muses would come and crap on my head if I didn't give you a 6 for this superb chapter, Gretchen.
I don't like to wash my hair twice in one day.
Below is an example why you deserve it (actually, that inventive line and the ones that follow, showing a significant change in his character.
"You're not real popular," he says. [Very creative! Good!]
Comment Written 16-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2014
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Thank you again for the great review and the nice comments. Gretchen
Comment from c_lucas
Digging into the mind of a modern day teenager fifty years after the fact does not leave one with a clear image. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very interesting read. Good job.
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2014
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Digging into the mind of a modern day teenager fifty years after the fact does not leave one with a clear image. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very interesting read. Good job.
Comment Written 15-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2014
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Thank you so much for the excellent review. Gretchen
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You're welcome, Gretchen. Charlie
Comment from Msmasero
Here I can conclude that the character has made his mind the master of his body. He decides the next move, he doesn't wait for fate to choose the way. -not playing her game.
The way the scene has changed from the sick grandma to ladies troubles is smooth. There is a connection. ...it's flowing.
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reply by the author on 17-Jul-2014
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Here I can conclude that the character has made his mind the master of his body. He decides the next move, he doesn't wait for fate to choose the way. -not playing her game.
The way the scene has changed from the sick grandma to ladies troubles is smooth. There is a connection. ...it's flowing.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 15-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2014
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Thank you for the great review and the nice comments. Gretchen
