Sins of My Father
Viewing comments for Chapter 42 "Clueless"A coming of age story.
11 total reviews
Comment from Rosalyne
Hi, Gretchen.
What a great chapter. You've really taken the emotional elements and shown so well how Rory feels, completely used. This is the worst feeling anyone can go through, and so common to many teens. The ending works so well showing the changes to come between Rory and Dean. You have a wonderful YA book! Looking forward to the next scene.
Bye
Rosalyne :)
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2014
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Hi, Gretchen.
What a great chapter. You've really taken the emotional elements and shown so well how Rory feels, completely used. This is the worst feeling anyone can go through, and so common to many teens. The ending works so well showing the changes to come between Rory and Dean. You have a wonderful YA book! Looking forward to the next scene.
Bye
Rosalyne :)
Comment Written 17-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2014
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Thank you for the great review and the nice comments. Gretchen
Comment from padumachitta
Hi. Oh crap. But we knew, stupid hormones. Least he wasn't drinking.
This chapter had life....I was hoping them legs were a drnk friend....ok, on to the next....i figure that's the best eview....wanting the next bit:-)padumachitta
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2014
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Hi. Oh crap. But we knew, stupid hormones. Least he wasn't drinking.
This chapter had life....I was hoping them legs were a drnk friend....ok, on to the next....i figure that's the best eview....wanting the next bit:-)padumachitta
Comment Written 15-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2014
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Thank you for he great review and the nice comments. Gretchen
Comment from Gladness
So he does finally find out she wasn't worth it and in such a dramatic way. I hope he is wrong about his relationship with his dad being forever changed, after all, they are all they have.
The writing grabs you and keeps you, and leaves you ready for more.
How many chapters do you plan on having in the book?
Anita
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2014
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So he does finally find out she wasn't worth it and in such a dramatic way. I hope he is wrong about his relationship with his dad being forever changed, after all, they are all they have.
The writing grabs you and keeps you, and leaves you ready for more.
How many chapters do you plan on having in the book?
Anita
Comment Written 13-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2014
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Thank you again for the sixth star. I really appreciate it. Gretchen
Comment from Misrael
I was afraid this would happen and I was right but wish that I would have been wrong. I hope that Rory doesn't get the third degree from his Father. Good read and keep up the good work.
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2014
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I was afraid this would happen and I was right but wish that I would have been wrong. I hope that Rory doesn't get the third degree from his Father. Good read and keep up the good work.
Comment Written 12-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2014
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Thank you so much for the wonderful review. Gretchen
Comment from DanielEkine
Very well paragraphed.
The use of spelling is nicely done.
I like the expertise in presentation and eloquent flow of the story. The punctuation does a lot of justice to this piece. A perfect length for the average FS story reader. Good job.
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2014
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Very well paragraphed.
The use of spelling is nicely done.
I like the expertise in presentation and eloquent flow of the story. The punctuation does a lot of justice to this piece. A perfect length for the average FS story reader. Good job.
Comment Written 12-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2014
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Thank you for the great review. Gretchen
Comment from Jay Squires
Wow, That was unexpected. I thought he was going to get in a stupid fistfight, but it never dawned on me it was his father.
Now as I stand on the other side of the line, [An inspired line, Gretchen, after you said, "there is a line you don't cross with Dean French."
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2014
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Wow, That was unexpected. I thought he was going to get in a stupid fistfight, but it never dawned on me it was his father.
Now as I stand on the other side of the line, [An inspired line, Gretchen, after you said, "there is a line you don't cross with Dean French."
Comment Written 12-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2014
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Thank you so much for the great review and the nice comments. Gretchen
Comment from Sankey
Oh no! I wonder if the cops reported his truck or something.
I guess we will find out what gives in the next chapter. These are really good and very true to life for me anyway.
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2014
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Oh no! I wonder if the cops reported his truck or something.
I guess we will find out what gives in the next chapter. These are really good and very true to life for me anyway.
Comment Written 12-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2014
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Thank you so much for the great review. Gretchen
Comment from Spiritual Echo
Man oh man, you have really written a 'real' book for young adults. So damn good, authentic, touching every emotion, every self-doubt and zeroed in--right into the emotional life of a teenager.
Tres impressive! I'm so glad you continued this chapter after Boyd kicked the door closed. For me, it's a perfect chapter, giving me, the reader, total satisfaction and yet still wanting, but content to wait for the next scene.
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2014
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Man oh man, you have really written a 'real' book for young adults. So damn good, authentic, touching every emotion, every self-doubt and zeroed in--right into the emotional life of a teenager.
Tres impressive! I'm so glad you continued this chapter after Boyd kicked the door closed. For me, it's a perfect chapter, giving me, the reader, total satisfaction and yet still wanting, but content to wait for the next scene.
Comment Written 12-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2014
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Again, thank you for the wonderful review and the sixth star. Gretchen
Comment from royowen
A pretty sad sequel to the previous chapter I read, that's how life tends to be with all your plotting and planning, self deception and all those negative little wrongs that seem to catch up with us all at once, great write in this, absorbing and the maintenance of tension was non stop, I really enjoyed this, a most enjoyable work. Blessings, Roy.
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2014
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A pretty sad sequel to the previous chapter I read, that's how life tends to be with all your plotting and planning, self deception and all those negative little wrongs that seem to catch up with us all at once, great write in this, absorbing and the maintenance of tension was non stop, I really enjoyed this, a most enjoyable work. Blessings, Roy.
Comment Written 12-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2014
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Thank you so much for the wonderful review. Gretchen
Comment from nancy_e_davis
What a shame. It is really hard to outsmart your parents. My
son and daughters still can't fool me. I read them like a book. Of course I don't have to pay that much attention anymore. They are over their games. I wonder how Dean knew where the party was. Now you really have my attention. What will he do? .Hmmmmmmm! Nancy
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reply by the author on 17-Jul-2014
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What a shame. It is really hard to outsmart your parents. My
son and daughters still can't fool me. I read them like a book. Of course I don't have to pay that much attention anymore. They are over their games. I wonder how Dean knew where the party was. Now you really have my attention. What will he do? .Hmmmmmmm! Nancy
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Comment Written 12-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2014
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THank you so much for the great review and the nice comments. Gretchen
