Comment from lancellot

Excellent

Very well crafted and I like the message, it is one that should be further explored. Are we really shepherds of the land and should work hand-N-hand with the world? Thoughtful piece.

 Comment Written 12-Jul-2014

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reply by the author on 12-Jul-2014

Thank you Lancelot

Comment from Dawny53

Excellent

I do believe one of the finest triolet's I have had the pleasure of reading so far. Yours flowed so nicely and I loved your choice of non traditional words. Did I say that right? It was a nice refreshing change to see. Good luck to you.

 Comment Written 12-Jul-2014

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reply by the author on 12-Jul-2014

Thank you very much Dawny for both the review and best wishes.

Comment from RYME4U

Excellent

What an excellent triolet this is./ So true and the point you are making is clearly expressed. The rhythm and rhymes are delightful to read. Great job!

 Comment Written 12-Jul-2014

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reply by the author on 12-Jul-2014

Thank you Ryme4u

Comment from 9999pool

Excellent

I have seen cranes perching on lighted lamp posts and such a delight to watch the pink ones on them.
There do not often perched there except maybe for the light and warmth or just a short rest, before beginning their flight path again.
A great triolet and fits the picture poem very well too. Smiles.
Cheerio, best, Ritchie. :))
Have a great evening.

 Comment Written 06-Jul-2014

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reply by the author on 06-Jul-2014

Thank you so much Ritchie, id love to see that.

Comment from sunnilicious

Excellent

Birds on the lamppost are quite classic. Good visual imagery created. Creative. The repeat lines work well. Good flow of rhythm and rhymes. Nice.

 Comment Written 05-Jul-2014

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reply by the author on 06-Jul-2014

Thank you Alicia.

Comment from adewpearl

Excellent

strong rhymes in good triolet pattern
effective incorporation of the triolet's repeating lines
great pairing of your stunning photo with the poem
I like your consistent use of iambic meter, which this contest has not made mandatory, so that many of the entries lack the form's musicality
one nit - where sky and roadway coincides needs to be coincide - I know you want the S for a true rhyme, but I'd rather see a tiny hitch in perfect rhyming than incorrect grammar :-) Brooke

 Comment Written 05-Jul-2014

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reply by the author on 05-Jul-2014

Thank you Brooke. Ill change it.

Comment from Angel Debbie

Excellent

Perfect Perch is a great Triolet for the contest. Instructions were followed perfectly just like your write.
Thank you for sharing this contest entry. Good luck with contest.

 Comment Written 05-Jul-2014

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reply by the author on 05-Jul-2014

Thank you Angel.

Comment from Jannypan (Jan)

Good

Your illustration is perfect. It was taken from a perfect perch! Why did you use "coincides" and not "coincide"? Your picture is perfectly framed, and the context of the poem is perfect for it.

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 Comment Written 04-Jul-2014

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reply by the author on 05-Jul-2014

Thanks jannypan. Just to carry the rhyme more concisely.

reply by Jannypan (Jan) on 05-Jul-2014

Thank you. It makes sense.

Comment from Preston McWhorter

Excellent

Hi, Treischel,
"A Perfect Perch" is an excellent poem that that meets the rhyme scheme of the triolet that is required by the writing prompt. It has good rhyme, flow and figurative language and imagery (where sky and road coincide). Good luck in the contest.
Preston

 Comment Written 04-Jul-2014

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reply by the author on 05-Jul-2014

Thank you Preston

Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell

Excellent

This is a really good contest entry, Tom. It is meaningful and the repeating line is perfect. (no pun) If only man and nature could work together all the time, what a wonderful world we would live in. Good luck in the contest. xsx Sandra

 Comment Written 04-Jul-2014

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reply by the author on 04-Jul-2014

Thank you Sandra. I appreciate the review and comments.