Sins of My Father
Viewing comments for Chapter 35 "Fair is Fair"A coming of age story.
10 total reviews
Comment from Rosalyne
Hi, Gretchen.
What a powerful chapter. Dean's confession to Rory would shake the ground of any kid or adult. To feel such hatred toward his parents is so sad. To share this with your kid, even though Rory is in his teens, is a very hard concept to adjust to. Rory is forced to grow up quickly.
Great write. Sorry I haven't any six stars left to give. ******!
Bye
Rosalyne :)
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2014
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Hi, Gretchen.
What a powerful chapter. Dean's confession to Rory would shake the ground of any kid or adult. To feel such hatred toward his parents is so sad. To share this with your kid, even though Rory is in his teens, is a very hard concept to adjust to. Rory is forced to grow up quickly.
Great write. Sorry I haven't any six stars left to give. ******!
Bye
Rosalyne :)
Comment Written 28-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2014
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Don't care about the six star, but I am thrilled this is getting my purpose across. Great review and wonderful comments. Gretchen
Comment from Eric1
Unfortunately, (or perhaps not) I reviewed 'Pigs with green sheets' prior to reading this, it matters not! it doesn't detract from your beautiful writing and wonderful characters, I am well and truly hooked now!,I want to know why Dad hated his parents so much, great hook!
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2014
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Unfortunately, (or perhaps not) I reviewed 'Pigs with green sheets' prior to reading this, it matters not! it doesn't detract from your beautiful writing and wonderful characters, I am well and truly hooked now!,I want to know why Dad hated his parents so much, great hook!
Comment Written 27-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2014
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Dad has his own book, detailing his unfortunate life. It is in my portfolio under "The 'Shine Baby" Thank you for such a wonderful review and the great rating. I am glad you enjoyed it.
Comment from nancy_e_davis
Just when things were going so well. That was unfair of Dean to lay that thought at Rory's feet and leave it there. That is a lot for a fifteen year old to take in. Dean is finally seeing all the mistakes he has made and it maybe a start to understanding who he is and why. Seems he is soul searching.
Nancy .
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2014
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Just when things were going so well. That was unfair of Dean to lay that thought at Rory's feet and leave it there. That is a lot for a fifteen year old to take in. Dean is finally seeing all the mistakes he has made and it maybe a start to understanding who he is and why. Seems he is soul searching.
Nancy .
Comment Written 25-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2014
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I think Dean uses Rory as a confessional of sorts. He also is uncomfortable with Rory thinking he's superman or flawless. Dean is trying to carry on but any abused child is going to have a ton of anger and resentment. Thanks, Nancy, for the great review. Gretchen
Comment from padumachitta
Hi. The last line has been an echo all my life. It rings true,prabably for many with screwed up parents.
He seems stable, but under it, this line could undercut his life.
The only hope is full disclosure....IMHO...:-)padumachitta
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2014
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Hi. The last line has been an echo all my life. It rings true,prabably for many with screwed up parents.
He seems stable, but under it, this line could undercut his life.
The only hope is full disclosure....IMHO...:-)padumachitta
Comment Written 25-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2014
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Thank you so much for giving me enough insight to let me know I am on the right track. Great review and I really appreciate it. Gretchen
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I learn about myself when I read these...my reactions, my emotional response. So, I thank you.padumachitta
Comment from Sankey
Yeah Rory has probably got it right. There is a scripture that says something like "The sins of the fathers shall be visited on the children to the second and third generations" I think I used it in my Autobiography about the behaviour of my father and the siblings and so on.
Good read again THANKS.
oNE LITTLE SPAG. His confession still(-s) sits in my gut
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2014
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Yeah Rory has probably got it right. There is a scripture that says something like "The sins of the fathers shall be visited on the children to the second and third generations" I think I used it in my Autobiography about the behaviour of my father and the siblings and so on.
Good read again THANKS.
oNE LITTLE SPAG. His confession still(-s) sits in my gut
Comment Written 25-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2014
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Thank you so much for the wonderful review. The dad was the one the one who said it. Rory didn't understand what he was talking about. Glad you picked up on the importance of the sentence. Thanks again. Gretchen
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If you have not done so I recommend you look at my Autobiography especially the chapters from where my Mum and Dad get back together if you did already then disregard ok!
Comment from Misrael
Wow that must have been a real shock to hear that from your own father. Of course I suppose it could have been worse but still that is real bad. Good read and keep up the good work.
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2014
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Wow that must have been a real shock to hear that from your own father. Of course I suppose it could have been worse but still that is real bad. Good read and keep up the good work.
Comment Written 24-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2014
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Thank you so much for the wonderful review. Gretchen
Comment from Spiritual Echo
What merit would a good book have unless the secrets of the character are leaked onto the page?
Still tuned in...and waiting...hmmph!
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2014
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What merit would a good book have unless the secrets of the character are leaked onto the page?
Still tuned in...and waiting...hmmph!
Comment Written 24-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2014
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More to come probably tomorrow night. Housework is rearing it's ugly head and won't be ignore any longer. Thanks for the wonderful review. Gretchen
Comment from Jay Squires
Another dynamic chapter, Gretchen. We got so close to Dean with this one.
Just one tiny nit:
His confession stills sits in my gut and my head. [STILL sits in...]
Great job!
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2014
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Another dynamic chapter, Gretchen. We got so close to Dean with this one.
Just one tiny nit:
His confession stills sits in my gut and my head. [STILL sits in...]
Great job!
Comment Written 24-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2014
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Thank you, Jay. Went back and fixed the nit. Glad you enjoyed it. Gretchen
Comment from Righteous Riter
Good opening lines that reveal the setting of the piece. Clear dialogue between the son and his dad. The conversation raised by curiosity. Through the conversation, the emotion surfaces and secrets emerge. Nice steady pace leading to a fitting conclusion.
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2014
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Good opening lines that reveal the setting of the piece. Clear dialogue between the son and his dad. The conversation raised by curiosity. Through the conversation, the emotion surfaces and secrets emerge. Nice steady pace leading to a fitting conclusion.
Comment Written 24-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2014
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Thank you for the great review. Doing descriptive passages is the hardest thing for me to do. I feel like sometimes it seems forced. Glad this passed. LOL. Thank you for the great review. Gretchen
Comment from innerworlds
Well written and believable. You have done an excellent job of getting inside a teenager's mind, and also the father's revelation both that he doesn't value the mother or grandparents, followed by suddenly not not wanting to discuss the topic anymore. This is very accurate for a dysfunctional family situation. I'll be waiting for the next installment. Thanks!
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2014
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Well written and believable. You have done an excellent job of getting inside a teenager's mind, and also the father's revelation both that he doesn't value the mother or grandparents, followed by suddenly not not wanting to discuss the topic anymore. This is very accurate for a dysfunctional family situation. I'll be waiting for the next installment. Thanks!
Comment Written 24-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2014
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Thank you for the great review and the nice comments. The French family is very dysfunctional, but at least they are trying. Thanks again, Gretchen
