Picture Poems
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Comment from Joan E.
Thank you for penning this timely Father's Day tribute. I enjoyed your rhythmic quatrains with alternating rhymes. Your use of alliteration is effective as well. Cheers- Joan
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2014
Thank you for penning this timely Father's Day tribute. I enjoyed your rhythmic quatrains with alternating rhymes. Your use of alliteration is effective as well. Cheers- Joan
Comment Written 09-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2014
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Thank you Joan.
Comment from Shirley E Kennedy
Nicely written in iambic tetrameter and a very worthy subject choice.
Dads are so important in the lives of their children an to promote spending time together having fun is good to see.
The image and words complement each other well
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reply by the author on 08-Jun-2014
Nicely written in iambic tetrameter and a very worthy subject choice.
Dads are so important in the lives of their children an to promote spending time together having fun is good to see.
The image and words complement each other well
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Comment Written 08-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2014
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Thank you Shirley.
Comment from rod007
Dad's savior is always near and kids who know their dad love them will always reach out for that love as mine do. Being a father is a wondeful magic of life. Well done, Tom.
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2014
Dad's savior is always near and kids who know their dad love them will always reach out for that love as mine do. Being a father is a wondeful magic of life. Well done, Tom.
Comment Written 07-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2014
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Thank you rod. Enjoy those cherished blessings they bring.
Comment from sunnilicious
I remember my childhood friends with me at the park. Not my parents. Is that normal?
This is a wonderful poem to commemorate dear old daddy. Good visual imagery created. Good rhymes. Good poetic form. Nice work.
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2014
I remember my childhood friends with me at the park. Not my parents. Is that normal?
This is a wonderful poem to commemorate dear old daddy. Good visual imagery created. Good rhymes. Good poetic form. Nice work.
Comment Written 07-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2014
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Thanks Alicia. Not unusual at all. When you very young, it's the parents with you, but as you grow older, it's your friends there.
Comment from Preston McWhorter
Hi, Treischel,
"Ups and Downs" is an excellent Fathers Day poem honoring Dads for what they do for us. It has good rythem and rhyme. It has good figurative language and imagery (fickle fortune frowns)
Preston
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2014
Hi, Treischel,
"Ups and Downs" is an excellent Fathers Day poem honoring Dads for what they do for us. It has good rythem and rhyme. It has good figurative language and imagery (fickle fortune frowns)
Preston
Comment Written 06-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2014
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Thank you Preston.
Comment from LIJ Red
Very poetic. Very well spelled and grammatical. Excellent.
The center man on the seesaw at my grammar school was the one to start the teetertottering-and accelerate it until someone was bucked off and beaten up. Sweet kids.
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2014
Very poetic. Very well spelled and grammatical. Excellent.
The center man on the seesaw at my grammar school was the one to start the teetertottering-and accelerate it until someone was bucked off and beaten up. Sweet kids.
Comment Written 06-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2014
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Thank you LIJ Red. That sounds like a very tough neighborhood. Very different from what I'm depicting here, 4 sure.
Comment from Angel Debbie
Nice Fathers Day though.
Words and picture goes very well together.
Rhythum and rhyme are perfect no errors.
Poem style fits the way written.
Thanks you for sharing both talents once more.
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2014
Nice Fathers Day though.
Words and picture goes very well together.
Rhythum and rhyme are perfect no errors.
Poem style fits the way written.
Thanks you for sharing both talents once more.
Comment Written 06-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2014
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Thank you Angel Debbie.
Comment from 9999pool
Up and down we go on the swing of life from fortunes and then misfortunes. The ride can be rough, but with Dad's steadying the ebb and flow of things, we will survive it all.
Somehow parents never relinquished their love and responsibilities on us children, even when we are old, smiles.
Great loving story about our dads and how they will come to our rescue financially or otherwise.
Cheerio, Ritchie. :))
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2014
Up and down we go on the swing of life from fortunes and then misfortunes. The ride can be rough, but with Dad's steadying the ebb and flow of things, we will survive it all.
Somehow parents never relinquished their love and responsibilities on us children, even when we are old, smiles.
Great loving story about our dads and how they will come to our rescue financially or otherwise.
Cheerio, Ritchie. :))
Comment Written 06-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2014
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Thank you Ritchie. Yes, they take care of us in many ways.
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Smiles, Ritchie. :))
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Smiles, Ritchie. :))
Comment from Capricorn30
A well-penned Father's Day dedication;
Good alliteration: "fickle fortune frowns";
The writing also serves as an ode to all fathers do, and all they mean to us.
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2014
A well-penned Father's Day dedication;
Good alliteration: "fickle fortune frowns";
The writing also serves as an ode to all fathers do, and all they mean to us.
Comment Written 06-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2014
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Thank you Capricorn.
Comment from Mystic Angel 7777
This is a lovely Father's Day sentiment expressed in a most delightful way. You infuse the reader with joy and memories of childhood in this simple, yet well penned piece. Nicely done and I thank you so much for sharing this with me.
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reply by the author on 06-Jun-2014
This is a lovely Father's Day sentiment expressed in a most delightful way. You infuse the reader with joy and memories of childhood in this simple, yet well penned piece. Nicely done and I thank you so much for sharing this with me.
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Comment Written 06-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2014
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Thank you so much Mystic Angel.