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Comment from Joan E.
Oh, my--we could use some of your excess water in drought-plagued California. The Rondeau form is an excellent choice for your theme. I admired your rhymes and use of alliteration of "f's," "r's" and "s's" for additional intensity. Have a peaceful weekend- Joan
reply by the author on 31-May-2014
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Oh, my--we could use some of your excess water in drought-plagued California. The Rondeau form is an excellent choice for your theme. I admired your rhymes and use of alliteration of "f's," "r's" and "s's" for additional intensity. Have a peaceful weekend- Joan
Comment Written 30-May-2014
reply by the author on 31-May-2014
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Thank you Joan, you have a good one too.
Comment from 9999pool
I somehow link this poem as a tribute to Honeycomb if that was what it was intended.
A flooded river overflowing the banks and fertilizing it for plants and shrubs to grow better after the flood recedes. Once Honeycomb rest enough due to her flood vessel in hospital, she will get better with the flood receding and she comes back to make Fanstory a more fertile ground for writers to share. Just my muse.
Either way, the poem works for me and the beauty inherent can be felt for spring's awakening.
Great write and well pen.
Cheerio, Ritchie. :))
reply by the author on 31-May-2014
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I somehow link this poem as a tribute to Honeycomb if that was what it was intended.
A flooded river overflowing the banks and fertilizing it for plants and shrubs to grow better after the flood recedes. Once Honeycomb rest enough due to her flood vessel in hospital, she will get better with the flood receding and she comes back to make Fanstory a more fertile ground for writers to share. Just my muse.
Either way, the poem works for me and the beauty inherent can be felt for spring's awakening.
Great write and well pen.
Cheerio, Ritchie. :))
Comment Written 30-May-2014
reply by the author on 31-May-2014
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Thank you Ritchie. Yes i link the link you made.
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My pleasure, Tom.
My greatest gift from Gd is my muse - with it, life becomes a fantasy land filled with hope and miracles while accepting life, to be what it has always been - difficult, happy, sad and amusing at times, smiles. :)).
Cheerio, Ritchie. :))
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Typo error. Gd = God, smiles.
Comment from Shirley E Kennedy
Nature has a way of replenishing resources and spring is a great time for this.
This well written rondeau follows the format guidelines perfectly and
Captures the cycle of water replenishment well .
reply by the author on 30-May-2014
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Nature has a way of replenishing resources and spring is a great time for this.
This well written rondeau follows the format guidelines perfectly and
Captures the cycle of water replenishment well .
Comment Written 30-May-2014
reply by the author on 30-May-2014
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Thank you Shirley. Given your recent flood stories, you truly know.
Comment from Preston McWhorter
I have already submitted a review. I want to know if it was accepted before I go to the truouble of rewriting it. I believe that review as exemplary.
The first attempt was not saved but lost through a fanstory glitch. I am not going to rewrite it.
reply by the author on 30-May-2014
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I have already submitted a review. I want to know if it was accepted before I go to the truouble of rewriting it. I believe that review as exemplary.
The first attempt was not saved but lost through a fanstory glitch. I am not going to rewrite it.
Comment Written 30-May-2014
reply by the author on 30-May-2014
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No Preston, I didn't see a previous review on this poem.
Comment from Jacqueline M Franklin
Hey Treischel,
Neat photo to compliment your poem. I know up close and personal how flooding water can ruin your day. We lied near a 100 yr wash, and the 100th yr struck when we lived there. Three rooms of muddy water later! UGH!! Not a pretty site.
Great poem, though!
Cheers,
Keep Smilin'... Jax
reply by the author on 30-May-2014
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Hey Treischel,
Neat photo to compliment your poem. I know up close and personal how flooding water can ruin your day. We lied near a 100 yr wash, and the 100th yr struck when we lived there. Three rooms of muddy water later! UGH!! Not a pretty site.
Great poem, though!
Cheers,
Keep Smilin'... Jax
Comment Written 30-May-2014
reply by the author on 30-May-2014
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Thank you Jax. Yeah a 100 year floor is scary.
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is very well written, treschel, you did an excellent job writing this rondeau poem about the banks that overflowed and had to recede for the joy to come back into the park again
reply by the author on 30-May-2014
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this is very well written, treschel, you did an excellent job writing this rondeau poem about the banks that overflowed and had to recede for the joy to come back into the park again
Comment Written 30-May-2014
reply by the author on 30-May-2014
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Thank you very much sweetwoodjax.
Comment from STEPHEN A CARTER
Flooded river with frothing foam, Love the 'f's
Its spill that overflows the banks
Washes/Within
Spring's syndrome
As Earth refills its water tanks Love this line
We praise the Lord and give Him thanks
For blessings sweet as honeycomb.
Flooded river.
Well crafted and presented. First cold, ice, snow, floods, wind, heat then bugs. The 'promised' land or the 7 plagues?
Regards:
reply by the author on 29-May-2014
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Flooded river with frothing foam, Love the 'f's
Its spill that overflows the banks
Washes/Within
Spring's syndrome
As Earth refills its water tanks Love this line
We praise the Lord and give Him thanks
For blessings sweet as honeycomb.
Flooded river.
Well crafted and presented. First cold, ice, snow, floods, wind, heat then bugs. The 'promised' land or the 7 plagues?
Regards:
Comment Written 29-May-2014
reply by the author on 29-May-2014
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Thank you Stephen. Hah! Good guestion.
Comment from Maureen's Pen
Dear Tom - we had so much flooding up this way too. As high as it's ever been.
Great skilled writing as always your format and rhyme is flawless...and mind boggling to me:)
Thanks for sharing.
Maureen
reply by the author on 29-May-2014
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Dear Tom - we had so much flooding up this way too. As high as it's ever been.
Great skilled writing as always your format and rhyme is flawless...and mind boggling to me:)
Thanks for sharing.
Maureen
Comment Written 29-May-2014
reply by the author on 29-May-2014
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Thank you Maureen. I just comes naturally to me. It's harder for me not to rhyme.
