Sins of My Father
Viewing comments for Chapter 23 "Best tea Ever"A coming of age story.
10 total reviews
Comment from Norbanus
You've shown Rory is as astute observer in recognizing Dad as an 'Asshole', without stirring up and bigger argument. It took a lot of imagination to come up with Dad's excuse for his drinking binge. Excellent dialogue.
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2014
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You've shown Rory is as astute observer in recognizing Dad as an 'Asshole', without stirring up and bigger argument. It took a lot of imagination to come up with Dad's excuse for his drinking binge. Excellent dialogue.
Comment Written 01-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2014
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Thank you for the great review and the nice comments. Gretchen
Comment from Bill Schott
I think that this dialog connects the two in a way we seldom see. Dads and sons seldom communicate with such candor. This is an interesting play off of characters.
reply by the author on 31-May-2014
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I think that this dialog connects the two in a way we seldom see. Dads and sons seldom communicate with such candor. This is an interesting play off of characters.
Comment Written 31-May-2014
reply by the author on 31-May-2014
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Thank you very much for the great review and the nice comments. Gretchen
Comment from adewpearl
Extremely believable scene as the father embarrasses his son in public
good dialogue - I can feel the tension
a moving conversation about the dad's drinking
Brooke
reply by the author on 31-May-2014
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Extremely believable scene as the father embarrasses his son in public
good dialogue - I can feel the tension
a moving conversation about the dad's drinking
Brooke
Comment Written 31-May-2014
reply by the author on 31-May-2014
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Thank you for the great feed back and the nice comments Gretchen
Comment from Zinnia48
Excellent ongoing storyline and character developement. Your representation of abstinence, relapse, and recovery is realistic. As usual the characters have their own stron voices. caroline
reply by the author on 31-May-2014
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Excellent ongoing storyline and character developement. Your representation of abstinence, relapse, and recovery is realistic. As usual the characters have their own stron voices. caroline
Comment Written 29-May-2014
reply by the author on 31-May-2014
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Thank you for the great review. Gretchen
Comment from Spiritual Echo
Think there are two minor things in this segment.
Those hoops you're holding, instead of YOU
And, fall into the creek BY accident, instead of ON accident.
It continues with a great flow, but I really have to wait and have two or three chapters to read at a time. I just get into it and it's over.
reply by the author on 31-May-2014
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Think there are two minor things in this segment.
Those hoops you're holding, instead of YOU
And, fall into the creek BY accident, instead of ON accident.
It continues with a great flow, but I really have to wait and have two or three chapters to read at a time. I just get into it and it's over.
Comment Written 29-May-2014
reply by the author on 31-May-2014
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I corrected the you're holding , but the on accident I kept as just a way of Dean misusing the English language. Thanks for the great review. Just posted a long (for me) chapter. Gretchen
Comment from Sankey
Good chapter, yet again. Wondering if there was gonna be more said but oh well. SouNds like everything is normal.
oNE POSSIBLE SPAG...creek on (by)accident
reply by the author on 31-May-2014
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Good chapter, yet again. Wondering if there was gonna be more said but oh well. SouNds like everything is normal.
oNE POSSIBLE SPAG...creek on (by)accident
Comment Written 29-May-2014
reply by the author on 31-May-2014
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The on accident is just how Dean speaks. I thought about correcting it but it is just his way of saying things. Thank you for the great review. Gretchen
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No worries I have had reviewers comment on the way or spelling of things I have done and we do need to allow for culture and so on.
Comment from padumachitta
Hi. This gives the reader more character building. The play between the two fellas and the waitress says so much about how these two tick. Rory's dad is on a leaking boat to hell, I just hope he bails before everyone drowns...I know the angst f a kid caught in this.You make it all to real.
Well down.
padumachitta
By the way...I like reading July and this together...brings the town alive...
reply by the author on 31-May-2014
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Hi. This gives the reader more character building. The play between the two fellas and the waitress says so much about how these two tick. Rory's dad is on a leaking boat to hell, I just hope he bails before everyone drowns...I know the angst f a kid caught in this.You make it all to real.
Well down.
padumachitta
By the way...I like reading July and this together...brings the town alive...
Comment Written 29-May-2014
reply by the author on 31-May-2014
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I have all of my novels in Patterson, and I will introduce one character in one and then give him a whole story in another. It's good to have a home away from home. LOL. Thanks for the great review. Gretchen
Comment from Jay Squires
Dang git! This just KEEPS getting better.
A frantic smile comes to her lips,[Love this line. It's so descriptive of what must have been going through her mind.]
Keep 'em coming.
reply by the author on 31-May-2014
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Dang git! This just KEEPS getting better.
A frantic smile comes to her lips,[Love this line. It's so descriptive of what must have been going through her mind.]
Keep 'em coming.
Comment Written 28-May-2014
reply by the author on 31-May-2014
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Thank you so much for the great review Gretchen
Comment from Jacqueline M Franklin
Hi Gretchen,
What 15-yr old doesn't think they are hard done by? I think it's a right of passage all kids go through, though it can be a definite pain in the backside!
Nice chapter.
Cheers,
Keep Smilin'... Jax
reply by the author on 31-May-2014
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Hi Gretchen,
What 15-yr old doesn't think they are hard done by? I think it's a right of passage all kids go through, though it can be a definite pain in the backside!
Nice chapter.
Cheers,
Keep Smilin'... Jax
Comment Written 28-May-2014
reply by the author on 31-May-2014
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Thank you for the great review. Gretchen
Comment from Misrael
Poor Rory! He has to put up with a lot of crap doesn't he? Parents should be more grown up and try not to embarrass their children so much. But parents can be very big jerks. I can identify with poor Rory as my parents did all they could to humiliate me. Keep up the good work.
reply by the author on 31-May-2014
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Poor Rory! He has to put up with a lot of crap doesn't he? Parents should be more grown up and try not to embarrass their children so much. But parents can be very big jerks. I can identify with poor Rory as my parents did all they could to humiliate me. Keep up the good work.
Comment Written 28-May-2014
reply by the author on 31-May-2014
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Thank you for the great review. Gretchen
