Savannah Love
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Comment from A Matter Of Words
Finally...something gained from all of that pain. I do hope the rescue workers are safe. Once again, great dialogue and easy flow to the writing....Stephanie
reply by the author on 31-May-2014
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Finally...something gained from all of that pain. I do hope the rescue workers are safe. Once again, great dialogue and easy flow to the writing....Stephanie
Comment Written 28-May-2014
reply by the author on 31-May-2014
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Thank you for the kind review and dropping by.
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The pleasure was mine. I look forward to reading the final chapter(s).
Comment from N.K. Wagner
I'm not sure about the logistics of moving three boxes of treasure that quickly. perhaps they're small boxes? Gold is particularly heavy. Brick-size, it'd be a piece at a time. Good suspense with the impending tunnel collapse. Well done. : nancy
reply by the author on 31-May-2014
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I'm not sure about the logistics of moving three boxes of treasure that quickly. perhaps they're small boxes? Gold is particularly heavy. Brick-size, it'd be a piece at a time. Good suspense with the impending tunnel collapse. Well done. : nancy
Comment Written 28-May-2014
reply by the author on 31-May-2014
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Thank you for the kind review. They are fairly small boxes.
Comment from Patrick G Cox
Hi Barbara,
So they've finally found the treasure - all three boxes of it - and got out. Let's hope the Rescue Squad does as well! Be a bit of a shame if the rescuers get killed at this point. Be a bit mean of ole Bradley not to have got them out. Maybe someone can give Bradley's bones a decent burial now as well.
Well done.
Patrick
reply by the author on 31-May-2014
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Hi Barbara,
So they've finally found the treasure - all three boxes of it - and got out. Let's hope the Rescue Squad does as well! Be a bit of a shame if the rescuers get killed at this point. Be a bit mean of ole Bradley not to have got them out. Maybe someone can give Bradley's bones a decent burial now as well.
Well done.
Patrick
Comment Written 28-May-2014
reply by the author on 31-May-2014
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Thank you for the kind review and dropping by.
Comment from jjstar
Good job, Barb. The sense of urgency was right on, and I loved Amos. I think I missed that part while I was gone. It just reminds me of Tom Sawyer, which I love!
reply by the author on 31-May-2014
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Good job, Barb. The sense of urgency was right on, and I loved Amos. I think I missed that part while I was gone. It just reminds me of Tom Sawyer, which I love!
Comment Written 28-May-2014
reply by the author on 31-May-2014
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Thank you for the kind review and dropping by.
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is very well written, Barbara, you did an excellent job writing this chapter where the cave in helps them find the treasure, but others may have been killed in the cave in that happened when they got back in the house
reply by the author on 31-May-2014
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this is very well written, Barbara, you did an excellent job writing this chapter where the cave in helps them find the treasure, but others may have been killed in the cave in that happened when they got back in the house
Comment Written 28-May-2014
reply by the author on 31-May-2014
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Thank you for the kind review and dropping by.
Comment from NaughtieScribe
Oh wow, are you seriously leaving me with this heart wrenching cliffhanger? I don't think your mean enough to let those men (rescue squad) go out like that. Then again if their all Bookmans - oh well. lol.
Now I wonder what's going to happen regarding those three boxes of treasure. I know the whole town is gonna put in a claim of some kind. And what about Amos and his boys, aren't the due for little reward? Just asking.
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Oh wow, are you seriously leaving me with this heart wrenching cliffhanger? I don't think your mean enough to let those men (rescue squad) go out like that. Then again if their all Bookmans - oh well. lol.
Now I wonder what's going to happen regarding those three boxes of treasure. I know the whole town is gonna put in a claim of some kind. And what about Amos and his boys, aren't the due for little reward? Just asking.
Comment Written 27-May-2014
reply by the author on 31-May-2014
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Thank you for the kind review and dropping by.
Comment from JB Lynn
Well, I'm glad all our little adventurers seem to be alright, but now I'm worried for the rescue squad. Hopefully they were prepared and left some men on the outside to help? Eeek! The suspense is killing me! Wonderful stuff, as always. And, I'll say it again, I love that your work contains a lot of dialogue.
reply by the author on 31-May-2014
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Well, I'm glad all our little adventurers seem to be alright, but now I'm worried for the rescue squad. Hopefully they were prepared and left some men on the outside to help? Eeek! The suspense is killing me! Wonderful stuff, as always. And, I'll say it again, I love that your work contains a lot of dialogue.
Comment Written 27-May-2014
reply by the author on 31-May-2014
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Thank you for the kind review and dropping by.
Comment from Dawn Munro
This is great, Barbara, and once again you've left us in suspense - are the rescuers going to be alright? I enjoyed this one very much.
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This is great, Barbara, and once again you've left us in suspense - are the rescuers going to be alright? I enjoyed this one very much.
Comment Written 27-May-2014
reply by the author on 31-May-2014
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Thank you for the kind review and dropping by
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My pleasure, Barbara.
Comment from elgone
Finally they find the treasure! but where is the rescue squad? Are they safe. I wonder if they brought out all the treasure. Guess we'll find out.
You know, going through the editing process with a real professional who has been doing it for 25 years, has been enlightening. A lot of the stuff FS people told me I needed to do to my stories was true but a whole lot was not. The present trend in writing is to drive the plot with dialogue which is something you and I both do. So, next time someone tells you that's not a good thing or you need to block dialogue between narrative pieces., that is not the current way stories are told in novels. Narrative is used to set a scene, describe characters and little else. There is a trend now to use action tags, using the standard speech tags sparingly and only when there is confusion as who whom is speaking.
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reply by the author on 31-May-2014
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Finally they find the treasure! but where is the rescue squad? Are they safe. I wonder if they brought out all the treasure. Guess we'll find out.
You know, going through the editing process with a real professional who has been doing it for 25 years, has been enlightening. A lot of the stuff FS people told me I needed to do to my stories was true but a whole lot was not. The present trend in writing is to drive the plot with dialogue which is something you and I both do. So, next time someone tells you that's not a good thing or you need to block dialogue between narrative pieces., that is not the current way stories are told in novels. Narrative is used to set a scene, describe characters and little else. There is a trend now to use action tags, using the standard speech tags sparingly and only when there is confusion as who whom is speaking.
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Comment Written 27-May-2014
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Thank you for the kind review and dropping by. HUGS!!!
Comment from bhogg
You apologize for the heavy use of dialog, and it is something I very much admire. Your use of dialog has always whizzed me through your posts. I'm always sorry to see them end. Warm regards, Bill
reply by the author on 27-May-2014
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You apologize for the heavy use of dialog, and it is something I very much admire. Your use of dialog has always whizzed me through your posts. I'm always sorry to see them end. Warm regards, Bill
Comment Written 27-May-2014
reply by the author on 27-May-2014
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I get many insults for using too much dialogue. I prefer it. So I warn people that I use it. Thank you for dropping by and leaving the great review.
