Comment from DanielEkine

Excellent

I'm really drawn in to the author's work. It's not a stand alone and it shows. The author did a great job with the length and size for Fanstory readers. The SPAG usage is incredible. The entirety of this work is definitely worthy.
""Found it!" Paige pointed to the spot.

"She's too light to activate it. Billy Joe, stomp on it." Mary Pat stepped aside. "I'd better warn you. There's a skeleton on the other side."

Cash and Billy Joe's glances switched between the two women. Finally, Billy Joe said, "No shit?"

"No shit." Mary Pat nodded." My favorite part. Great job to the author.

 Comment Written 01-Jun-2014

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Comment from kiwijenny

Excellent

This is exciting...I love the way there are secret tunnels ,,,imminent danger and finally the treasure,,,,the skeleton is a nice touch...and I love the dialogue and accents...well done ...good writing
God bless

 Comment Written 31-May-2014

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Comment from missjosi

Excellent

Well I have obviously come on in the middle of a story here lol your characters seem well developed, and you are obviously a well crafted writer. Will they make it out alive? Guess Ill have to keep reading... Many blessings and kind regards Josi :))

 Comment Written 31-May-2014

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Comment from chasennov

Excellent

"CHAPTER TWENTY; PART FIVE" I finally caught up with reading one of your beautifully written chapters of Savannah Love, Barbara. Absolutely well done.

 Comment Written 31-May-2014

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reply by chasennov on 31-May-2014

It's been a real pleasure, Barbara.

Comment from Cumbrianlass

Excellent

I LOVE that they found treasure! How exciting. Can't wait to see all that is in those boxes.

I hope the rescue party got out in time! Great excitement and tension, Barbara! Well done. Glad to hear the wedding was perfect. I look forward to hearing more about that too.

Hugs,

Av

 Comment Written 30-May-2014

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Comment from Hareem.S

Excellent

As usual, this is another good chapter of your novel that I like a lot. I like how the story unfolds so vividly in front of the reader's eyes. Enjoyed it much.

 Comment Written 30-May-2014

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Comment from jadapenn

Excellent

Hi Barbie, I found no excitement or tension around the finding of the treasure. Paige doesn't seem to have emotions in this section. It's as if it's nothing to care about. Perhaps a bit more tension and conflict. luv jada

 Comment Written 30-May-2014

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Comment from arnie47

Excellent

The story is beginning to tidy up to what looks like a pretty good ending. The only thing I would point out is that you used the word thunder twice to describe falling rocks. I'd use a different adjective in one of the instances.

 Comment Written 30-May-2014

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Comment from angelface2

Excellent

Very nice, Barbara. good writing and good excitement. I'm glad they found the treasure and sure hope everyone is all right. Loved it. Miss Sally

 Comment Written 29-May-2014

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Comment from LIJ Red

Excellent

I did not find any gross spag errors or unreality of dialect, and since I have read no other part of this work,
I'll assume the storyline and pace to be as good as the
mechanics. excellent.

 Comment Written 29-May-2014

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