Comment from Shirley E Kennedy

Excellent

How proud and beautiful this male cardinal appears.
It must be so lovely to see these beautiful birds in Spring.
The essence of the bird is captured in this clever 3/5/3 poem.
The amazing colour is shown in the image and the birdsong is
Mentioned as an occurrence each morning.

 Comment Written 24-May-2014

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reply by the author on 24-May-2014

Thank you Shirley, it is very lovely.

Comment from rod007

Excellent

A great poem and I think most of us would love to hear the cardinal song in the morning. There are no trees outside my bedroom window and no cardinals so I envy your good fortune. Well done, Tom.

 Comment Written 23-May-2014

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reply by the author on 23-May-2014

Thank you rod.

Comment from Preston McWhorter

Excellent

Hi, Treischel,
"Morning Sounds" is a good poetic vignette in 3-5-3 format picturing and early morning scene. It has figurative language
(staccato birdsong) that captures the atmosphere.
Preston

 Comment Written 23-May-2014

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reply by the author on 23-May-2014

Thank you Preston.

Comment from sunnilicious

Excellent

Cardinals are such beautiful birds. That is a nice photograph. A natural alarm clock. Well, that is nice. Good alliteration sounds/staccato/(bird)song. Great poem.

 Comment Written 22-May-2014

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reply by the author on 23-May-2014

Thank you Alicia.

Comment from 9999pool

Excellent

Right on cue every morning are the cardinals with their staccato cheerful songs. There is no need for the rude alarm for their singing is the lovely tune of the day to brighten our sleepy morning moods.
Great write and well done.
Cheerio, Ritchie. :))

 Comment Written 22-May-2014

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reply by the author on 23-May-2014

Thank you Ritchie

reply by 9999pool on 23-May-2014

Welcome, Ritchie. :))

Comment from Joan E.

Excellent

Delightful presentation--your photographs are always a treat. Aren't you lucky to have such a lovely alarm clock! Thank you for sharing your cardinals with us. Your tiny poem is a pleasure to read, and you even included alliteration. Smiles- Joan

 Comment Written 21-May-2014

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reply by the author on 22-May-2014

Thank you Joan. Yup, s alliteration, that's why I didnt claim to be a haiku.

Comment from Angel Debbie

Excellent

Short and sweet:

morning sounds
staccato birdsong
Cardinal

Beautiful picture of Cardnial. We have many plus Blue Jays around our home.

 Comment Written 21-May-2014

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reply by the author on 21-May-2014

Thank you Angel.

Comment from donette1914

Excellent

morning sounds staccato birdsong Cardinal, what a cute little poem of this beautiful bird singing first thing in the morning very sweet to wake up too well done

 Comment Written 21-May-2014

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reply by the author on 21-May-2014

Thank you Donette.

Comment from STEPHEN A CARTER

Excellent

morning sounds
staccato birdsong
Cardinal

Loved the piece. You've inspired me. Will put on FS later. Question: Is this a Haiku?

EVENING SOUNDS

annoying
staccato tattoo
woodpecker

Regards:

 Comment Written 21-May-2014

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reply by the author on 21-May-2014

Thank you Stephen. I like yours too. Yes, it would be a Haiku. One caution, the Japanese frown on using "ing" words.