Savannah Love
Viewing comments for Chapter 94 "CHAPTER TWENTY; PART THREE"Can a fallen confederate soldier encourage love?
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Comment from Ben Colder
I'm still hook on this write. What a cliff hanger leaving me now what has these crazy people found. Maybe Bradley will come to their rescue. Another goodie. Shalom.
reply by the author on 11-May-2014
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I'm still hook on this write. What a cliff hanger leaving me now what has these crazy people found. Maybe Bradley will come to their rescue. Another goodie. Shalom.
Comment Written 11-May-2014
reply by the author on 11-May-2014
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I'm beginning to wonder what Bradley has planned for these people. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Gungalo
Boy Mary Beth and Paige sure must love their men to put their lives on the live the way they do. The rescue people are coming but they are impatient and worried.
reply by the author on 11-May-2014
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Boy Mary Beth and Paige sure must love their men to put their lives on the live the way they do. The rescue people are coming but they are impatient and worried.
Comment Written 11-May-2014
reply by the author on 11-May-2014
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Yes, patience is some Paige isn't really good at. Thank you for the kind review.
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Smile.
Comment from Patrick G Cox
Hi barbara,
Now there is a cliff-hanger ending to leave your readers on. "Paige screamed."
Why? What new twist have you got for us here. As usual you've moved it forward well, now, the question is where are Cash and Billy Joe trapped?
Patrick
reply by the author on 11-May-2014
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Hi barbara,
Now there is a cliff-hanger ending to leave your readers on. "Paige screamed."
Why? What new twist have you got for us here. As usual you've moved it forward well, now, the question is where are Cash and Billy Joe trapped?
Patrick
Comment Written 11-May-2014
reply by the author on 11-May-2014
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Thank you for the kind review and the encouraging words.
Comment from Maureen's Pen
Dear Barbara - you have bumped up the emotion and action in this one. Now you have me dying to read the next part of this story. Great mystery unfolding.
Well penned post my friend - I loved it.
Thanks for sharing it.
Maureen
reply by the author on 11-May-2014
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Dear Barbara - you have bumped up the emotion and action in this one. Now you have me dying to read the next part of this story. Great mystery unfolding.
Well penned post my friend - I loved it.
Thanks for sharing it.
Maureen
Comment Written 11-May-2014
reply by the author on 11-May-2014
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Thank you for the kind review and the encouraging words.
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Thank you for the kind review and encouraging words.
Comment from adewpearl
You create suspense and tension well as the women continue their search. I can feel Paige's determination to find her guy and her honest belief Bradley will help her do it. You also depict other people's reaction to her plans and faith effectively. Good dialogue and description of setting throughout - and a great cliff hanger closing. Brooke
reply by the author on 11-May-2014
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You create suspense and tension well as the women continue their search. I can feel Paige's determination to find her guy and her honest belief Bradley will help her do it. You also depict other people's reaction to her plans and faith effectively. Good dialogue and description of setting throughout - and a great cliff hanger closing. Brooke
Comment Written 11-May-2014
reply by the author on 11-May-2014
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Oh my, FS made a huge mistake. I only received the last seven words of your review. LOL, I love it.
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Thank you for the kind review and encouraging words.
Comment from mumsyone
Good chapter, Barbara. Nice to see that Bradley is helping the girls.
Firing a gun would be over kill (overkill) and collapse the rest of the tunnel."
The two women and Morgan headed for the opening,(no comma) Paige had walked through.
they descended the damp moss(-)covered stairs
reply by the author on 11-May-2014
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Good chapter, Barbara. Nice to see that Bradley is helping the girls.
Firing a gun would be over kill (overkill) and collapse the rest of the tunnel."
The two women and Morgan headed for the opening,(no comma) Paige had walked through.
they descended the damp moss(-)covered stairs
Comment Written 11-May-2014
reply by the author on 11-May-2014
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Thank you for the help. I have made the corrections.
Comment from JB Lynn
"You're just as bad as they are. At least you have a little sense.["] -I think quotes got left off by accident.
I like the use of the bold text for this Bradley, whom I'm assuming is a ghost of some kind?
As for me, I love reading dialogue, since it always drives the story forward much faster than narration. Funny the things we feel we have to "warn" readers about on FS. I haven't been following the story, but this section of your chapter felt smooth and well thought out. I could see the action as the women struggled to patiently wait for the rescuers, and then made the decision to go into the tunnels, anyway, but through an alternative entrance. Terrific cliffhanger ending because, of course, I'm now dying to know what the women discovered.
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reply by the author on 11-May-2014
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"You're just as bad as they are. At least you have a little sense.["] -I think quotes got left off by accident.
I like the use of the bold text for this Bradley, whom I'm assuming is a ghost of some kind?
As for me, I love reading dialogue, since it always drives the story forward much faster than narration. Funny the things we feel we have to "warn" readers about on FS. I haven't been following the story, but this section of your chapter felt smooth and well thought out. I could see the action as the women struggled to patiently wait for the rescuers, and then made the decision to go into the tunnels, anyway, but through an alternative entrance. Terrific cliffhanger ending because, of course, I'm now dying to know what the women discovered.
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Comment Written 11-May-2014
reply by the author on 11-May-2014
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Thank you for the kind review and the catch. I appreciate the encouraging words.
Comment from c_lucas
It seems like the ghost will have his hands full, trying to get every one out safely. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words.
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reply by the author on 11-May-2014
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It seems like the ghost will have his hands full, trying to get every one out safely. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words.
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Comment Written 11-May-2014
reply by the author on 11-May-2014
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I am sure Bradley is up for the challenge. Thank you for the kind review.
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You're welcome, Barbara. Charlie
