Comment from jaydub99

Excellent

I liked this poem. You have created a whimsical and romantic tone, along with solid structure and word choice. The pic is impressive and adds to the piece without it taking the readers attention away. Good alliterative bounce and an easy flow. This is a solid submission.

 Comment Written 18-May-2014

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reply by the author on 18-May-2014

Thank you jaydub.

Comment from Nosha17

Excellent

Willows have that wistful quality about them, guess that's why they are called weeping willows. Your picture compliments your writing very well. You have made good choice of words and rhyming and it was a smooth, enjoyable read. Faye

 Comment Written 18-May-2014

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reply by the author on 18-May-2014

Thank you Faye. Appreciate the comments.

Comment from rod007

Excellent

A weeping willow happy and serenading his dream:
" I will dream there all my thoughts about tomorrow,
Bring my lady there to kiss and clench."
Well done, Tom.

 Comment Written 04-May-2014

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reply by the author on 04-May-2014

Thank you rod. It is a lovely spot.

Comment from lakeport

Excellent

A pretty proposition, that's a beautiful photo, that's a beautiful expressed poem with an romantic touch, I enjoyed reading it.God bless you.Lakeport,

 Comment Written 03-May-2014

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reply by the author on 04-May-2014

Thank you Lakeport.

reply by lakeport on 04-May-2014

your welcome.Lakeport.

Comment from Joan E.

Excellent

Yes, quite "pretty," including your words and photograph! I enjoyed your regular syllable count and rhymed quatrains. I liked the immediacy of your use of the first person, and your addition of alliteration for even more intensity. Happy weekend- Joan

 Comment Written 03-May-2014

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reply by the author on 04-May-2014

Thank you Joan. The weekend was delightful. I got out along the swollen waters of the Mississippi with May camera.

reply by Joan E. on 05-May-2014

I look forward to seeing your photos and more descriptions of the surging Mississippi. Smiles- Joan

Comment from Preston McWhorter

Excellent

Hi, Trische,
"A Pretty Proposition" is an excellent quatrain structured poem with good flow. It has a rhyme scheme of abcb consistently followed. It has good figurative language and imagery. (sit beside your shadow)
Preston

 Comment Written 03-May-2014

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reply by the author on 04-May-2014

Thank you Preston.

Comment from adewpearl

Excellent

Yet another gorgeous photo from you :-)
solid use of abcb rhyming
nice alliteration in sweet spot that sets the stage
and in kiss and clench
a wonderfully romantic merging of setting a couple enjoying each other in the setting :-) Brooke

 Comment Written 03-May-2014

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reply by the author on 03-May-2014

Thank you Brooke. I did like that kiss and clench line a bit myself. :-)

Comment from Jacqueline M Franklin

Excellent

Hi

We used to have a weeping willow tree in our yard when I was kid. Boy, did we have fun using it as hideout, hide-n-seek!

The artwork you chose could be a very romantic setting by the pond. I like these lines ===

A sweet spot that sets the stage for happy lovers,
Whispers, "Go ahead and take the chance."

Very nice

Cheers
Keep Smilin'... Jax

 Comment Written 03-May-2014

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reply by the author on 03-May-2014

Thank you Jax

Comment from ravenblack

Excellent

To kiss and clench...which is why I will never understand weeping in conjunction with willow. My wife and I have our favorite willow, and, well, we never wept.

 Comment Written 02-May-2014

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reply by the author on 03-May-2014

Thank you ravenblack. That's the spirit!

Comment from Michael Ludwinder

Excellent

Very nice. You draw a beautiful picture with your words. Wonderful word choices. I found this to be a place I would very much like to visit!

 Comment Written 02-May-2014

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reply by the author on 02-May-2014

Thank you Michael. It is a lovely spot.