An April shower of Poems
Viewing comments for Chapter 27 "Waste not your time"a challenge of a poem a day for a month
19 total reviews
Comment from Sanku
magnificent photo.True these mountains stand for millions of years as a tribute to eternity .They have seen it all.Your message is very apt for this time when people are tearing in a hurry
reply by the author on 05-May-2014
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magnificent photo.True these mountains stand for millions of years as a tribute to eternity .They have seen it all.Your message is very apt for this time when people are tearing in a hurry
Comment Written 05-May-2014
reply by the author on 05-May-2014
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Thank you Sanku, for this wonderful review. I appreciate your thoughtful comments. :-) Carolyn
Comment from adewpearl
What a fantastic photo you shot :-)
good proximate rhyme in time/unkind
excellent use of enjambment
effective use of parallel construction in each verse
insightful observations and wise recommendations
in good poetic form :-) Brooke
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2014
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What a fantastic photo you shot :-)
good proximate rhyme in time/unkind
excellent use of enjambment
effective use of parallel construction in each verse
insightful observations and wise recommendations
in good poetic form :-) Brooke
Comment Written 30-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2014
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Thanks Brooke,
I forced myself to pull out the camera, then it became a catharsis as we traveled on this sad journey to AZ.
Glad you liked this poem. I appreciate you,
:-) Carolyn
Comment from Spitfire
What a view and what a good view. Love the inversion of "Waste not your time." Never thought of comparing the length of life with eternity. Time doesn't exist there, you're right.
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2014
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What a view and what a good view. Love the inversion of "Waste not your time." Never thought of comparing the length of life with eternity. Time doesn't exist there, you're right.
Comment Written 29-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2014
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Thanks Shari, I am happy you enjoyed this one. I always appreciate your comments. :-) Carolyn
Comment from angelface2
That is a beautiful picture, Carolyn. Thanks for sharing. I have never been to New Mexico. I love the write about eternity and you are right, we can't waste our time there. Praise God. Miss Sally
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2014
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That is a beautiful picture, Carolyn. Thanks for sharing. I have never been to New Mexico. I love the write about eternity and you are right, we can't waste our time there. Praise God. Miss Sally
Comment Written 29-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2014
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I'm glad you liked the pic and poem. Not many left to go. :-) Carolyn
Comment from AprilShower
That's quite a picture, Carolyn. This free verse has quite a message. I enjoyed reading it. It would do us all well to take this to heart. Well done.
April
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2014
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That's quite a picture, Carolyn. This free verse has quite a message. I enjoyed reading it. It would do us all well to take this to heart. Well done.
April
Comment Written 29-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2014
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Glad you liked it April. When I write something like this , then read it again later, I think, I guess that was written for me.
:-) Carolyn
Comment from The Death
Hi, Carolyn.
This is a lovely free verse--philosophical and delivering some inspirational messages.
Very impressive and strong opening lines:
Waste not your time
On being unkind
with immaturity
in the forefront
of each decision
It's so easy to connect with your thoughts here. Nice use of N,T consonance and assonance of O.
Waste not your time
on trying to be right
but rather
dwell more on
what is right
Such a potent verse it is. We don't need to try to be right, but if we stand for the right, we'll be a better person already.
Waste not your time
life is too short
when compared to
eternity
which knows no end
These lines are insightful and deep. Excellent use of R,T,N consonance again assonance of O.
Only one suggestion--use a 'for' before 'life' for better flow as you haven't opted for the use of punctuation.
This line provides such a important 'pause' to let the reader ponder and then flow into the depth of the closing lines.
Time, sweet time
My favorite is the well-crafted closing:
In Eternity
you can't waste it
you can't save it
and, you can't spend it
Time is not of the essence
Eternity is forever
These lines are profound and thought-provoking, too. I like how you have captured the timeless beauty of 'eternity' and its influence on the essence of time. Fine use of N,R,T consonance and O,E assonance.
I read this one twice and then realized the beauty of your deep thinking here. As I said, it makes one ponder and highlights the fact that we don't need to worry about anything else if our desires are pure. Our life is really short and one should live it freely before achieving the eternity.
It has smooth flow and presentation is beautiful as well.
Personally, this is your best work for me--simple, elegant and profound. It certainly deserves the six stars. :)
Warm regards,
Anupam
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2014
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Hi, Carolyn.
This is a lovely free verse--philosophical and delivering some inspirational messages.
Very impressive and strong opening lines:
Waste not your time
On being unkind
with immaturity
in the forefront
of each decision
It's so easy to connect with your thoughts here. Nice use of N,T consonance and assonance of O.
Waste not your time
on trying to be right
but rather
dwell more on
what is right
Such a potent verse it is. We don't need to try to be right, but if we stand for the right, we'll be a better person already.
Waste not your time
life is too short
when compared to
eternity
which knows no end
These lines are insightful and deep. Excellent use of R,T,N consonance again assonance of O.
Only one suggestion--use a 'for' before 'life' for better flow as you haven't opted for the use of punctuation.
This line provides such a important 'pause' to let the reader ponder and then flow into the depth of the closing lines.
Time, sweet time
My favorite is the well-crafted closing:
In Eternity
you can't waste it
you can't save it
and, you can't spend it
Time is not of the essence
Eternity is forever
These lines are profound and thought-provoking, too. I like how you have captured the timeless beauty of 'eternity' and its influence on the essence of time. Fine use of N,R,T consonance and O,E assonance.
I read this one twice and then realized the beauty of your deep thinking here. As I said, it makes one ponder and highlights the fact that we don't need to worry about anything else if our desires are pure. Our life is really short and one should live it freely before achieving the eternity.
It has smooth flow and presentation is beautiful as well.
Personally, this is your best work for me--simple, elegant and profound. It certainly deserves the six stars. :)
Warm regards,
Anupam
Comment Written 29-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2014
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What a wonderful way to start my day... Thank you Anupam for this sincere and thoughtful review. I appreciate all you have said and am delighted 'Waste not your time', was of interest to you. The shining six star is a plus. :-) Carolyn
Comment from GracieAnn
Carolyn, I knew immediately that this shot was in New Mexico. I have taken many similar to it when we purchased some land there. Like another planet. The meat of the write is full of wisdom to live in the now, not in the past, or too much in the not yet. Good thoughts to challenge us. :0 GracieAnn
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2014
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Carolyn, I knew immediately that this shot was in New Mexico. I have taken many similar to it when we purchased some land there. Like another planet. The meat of the write is full of wisdom to live in the now, not in the past, or too much in the not yet. Good thoughts to challenge us. :0 GracieAnn
Comment Written 28-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2014
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Thanks GracieAnn, we are on the count down now. 3 left to go. I am glad you enjoyed this one. I have a lot of shots from NM. It is such an awesome state. We came back through Santa Fe, Taos, and into Colorado. The Santa Fe mountains are a 'shorter' version of the Rockies.
Have a great week my friend, :-) Carolyn
Comment from l.raven
you sound like you are on the road as much as I am....hoping soon to be able to stay put more time...another wonderful poem and a stunning picture...love it...very well written...Luff Linda xxoo
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2014
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you sound like you are on the road as much as I am....hoping soon to be able to stay put more time...another wonderful poem and a stunning picture...love it...very well written...Luff Linda xxoo
Comment Written 28-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2014
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We plan travel several times of the year, then at other times, as in this trip, family calls the shots. When Larry's dad passed away we were actually in Tennessee visiting our eldest son. Then we came home and started the 1,500 mi trip to Arizona. I am glad you enjoyed this one and the picture. Do you travel for leisure, I used to travel for business a lot as well, Thank God , those days are over. Luff, Carolyn
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I travel for family and other loved ones...I drive it by myself...I love the quiet...I put the oldies but moldies on and cruse on down the road...when I go to Florida I go 600 miles a day...Texas is a little less...Texas is prettier senery...Florida mostly corn fields...but I do love Kentucky...luff Linda
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I still have family in Kentucky, mother passed away in 2007 and had lived in Paducah for a number of years. Kentucky and Tennessee are both lovely. Actually I enjoy something about every state. Have you seen the Cadillac Ranch outside Amarillo? The Cadillac cars are buried on their noses, a sight to see. Luff
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OMG Sounds like it...my father who passed when I was 2...sister 4 brother 1...was from Kentucky...
Comment from Petriesan
Waste not your time
on trying to be right
but rather
dwell more on
what is right
this confused me. . . if one learns what is right should one then not try to do it?
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2014
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Waste not your time
on trying to be right
but rather
dwell more on
what is right
this confused me. . . if one learns what is right should one then not try to do it?
Comment Written 28-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2014
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Sometimes we run into people who feel they are never wrong. About anything! So it becomes, not so important to always 'be right' as it is to do, 'what is right'. Does that help? Thank you so much for reading and your fine comments. :-) Carolyn
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ok, well, I would say I was mistaken, but then, I am never wrong. . .
thank you for explaining what now appears obvious
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Well said, LOL
Comment from krys123
Carolyn,A beautiful shot by the camera by the way. It is so true that when we live and eternity we can do whatever we want with time because it is endless. I like your philosophical commentary in short form. Thank you so much for sharing and posting this for everyone and may the Lord be with you always.
Alex
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2014
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Carolyn,A beautiful shot by the camera by the way. It is so true that when we live and eternity we can do whatever we want with time because it is endless. I like your philosophical commentary in short form. Thank you so much for sharing and posting this for everyone and may the Lord be with you always.
Alex
Comment Written 28-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2014
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Thank you Alex for this fine review. I appreciate all your comments. Glad you liked the picture. :-) Carolyn
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You are so sincerely welcome Carolyn
