Savannah Love
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Comment from Maureen's Pen
Dear Barbara - excellent post, and I loved that you have Bradley having a sense of humor, witty ghost made me smile. I enjoyed this work - great writing.
Thanks for sharing it. I'm catching up slowly my friend.
Maureen
reply by the author on 11-May-2014
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Dear Barbara - excellent post, and I loved that you have Bradley having a sense of humor, witty ghost made me smile. I enjoyed this work - great writing.
Thanks for sharing it. I'm catching up slowly my friend.
Maureen
Comment Written 11-May-2014
reply by the author on 11-May-2014
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Thank you for the kind review and encouraging words.
Comment from Auroraboreal800
Wonderful chapter, I'm so happy about the back and forth between Paige and Brady. Great dialogue. Thanks for teaching in this very well written about American Story.
Happy days Barbara!
:)
reply by the author on 03-May-2014
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Wonderful chapter, I'm so happy about the back and forth between Paige and Brady. Great dialogue. Thanks for teaching in this very well written about American Story.
Happy days Barbara!
:)
Comment Written 01-May-2014
reply by the author on 03-May-2014
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Thank you for the kind review and encouraging words.
Comment from Zue65
I think I have missed some of your post for I am quite confused. Who is Bradley, is he a ghost? Is Paige hallucinating or the ghost is actually helping her find the way out? Anyway I enjoyed this chapter, at least I can still follow the thread. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 03-May-2014
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I think I have missed some of your post for I am quite confused. Who is Bradley, is he a ghost? Is Paige hallucinating or the ghost is actually helping her find the way out? Anyway I enjoyed this chapter, at least I can still follow the thread. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 01-May-2014
reply by the author on 03-May-2014
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Yes Bradley is the ghost, who was introduced in the first two chapters. He was killed during the Civil War. He has been helping Paige throughout the novel. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from nelliesellie
I love the story. You have the north and the south trying to work together. One is a ghost so that makes it harder. Having an animal makes it easier. They believe in ghosts. Great work.
reply by the author on 03-May-2014
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I love the story. You have the north and the south trying to work together. One is a ghost so that makes it harder. Having an animal makes it easier. They believe in ghosts. Great work.
Comment Written 30-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 03-May-2014
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Sasha
I cannot imagine anyone complaining about too much dialogue. I get the opposite...not enough. Great work with this one and I am so thrilled Bradley finally decided to reveal himself. He does seem to be enjoying himself. He also seems to have some secrets he plans to hold onto until the time is right. Great work with this one. I anxiously look forward to reading the next post.
reply by the author on 03-May-2014
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I cannot imagine anyone complaining about too much dialogue. I get the opposite...not enough. Great work with this one and I am so thrilled Bradley finally decided to reveal himself. He does seem to be enjoying himself. He also seems to have some secrets he plans to hold onto until the time is right. Great work with this one. I anxiously look forward to reading the next post.
Comment Written 30-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 03-May-2014
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Bradley is a real stinker. Thank you for the kind review and encouragement.
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is very well written, barbara, you did an excellent job writing this chapter where bradley leads paige from the tunnel just in time. i enjoyed reading this one...
reply by the author on 03-May-2014
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this is very well written, barbara, you did an excellent job writing this chapter where bradley leads paige from the tunnel just in time. i enjoyed reading this one...
Comment Written 30-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 03-May-2014
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Thank you for the kind review and encouragement.
Comment from JB Lynn
"I used to think 'patience, child' was my name." - Hehe...this made me laugh out loud.
"I guess. I don't have any choice, do I? I guess it's possible I missed the door,..." - I might suggest eliminating the second "I guess" because it sounds a bit redundant. Maybe just start that with "It's possible I missed the door, but I don't think so."
I love the little verbal sparring between Paige and Bradley.
reply by the author on 03-May-2014
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"I used to think 'patience, child' was my name." - Hehe...this made me laugh out loud.
"I guess. I don't have any choice, do I? I guess it's possible I missed the door,..." - I might suggest eliminating the second "I guess" because it sounds a bit redundant. Maybe just start that with "It's possible I missed the door, but I don't think so."
I love the little verbal sparring between Paige and Bradley.
Comment Written 29-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 03-May-2014
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Thank you for the kind review and encouragement. I made the correction.
Comment from Liandra
That was a lucky escape. I have read earlier chapters which gives me a bit of an idea about this story. I will jump back and catch up on a few.
I like the suspense, it holds the attention.
:)Liandra
reply by the author on 03-May-2014
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That was a lucky escape. I have read earlier chapters which gives me a bit of an idea about this story. I will jump back and catch up on a few.
I like the suspense, it holds the attention.
:)Liandra
Comment Written 29-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 03-May-2014
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from brentman99
Overall, this is a very well written piece. This is the first part I've read, but it still works well as I can see where it is going. It flows quite nicely and the dialogue does a good job of helping moving the story along. I have just a few comments that you can use or ignore:
She petted her dog, who wagged his tail. - since you called the dog Morgan earlier, why not say "She petted Morgan, who wagged his tail in response." But you're not wrong.
You'll find out all in good time. - how about "You'll find out. All in good time." Doesn't flow quite as well as you have it.
That's what my mom and Aunt Paula used to tell me. - how about "That's what Mom and Aunt Paula used to tell me."
The tunnel's caving in. I think that this should have been bolded as it seems like Bradley is speaking.
I enjoyed it. Thanks for sharing, Brent.
reply by the author on 04-May-2014
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Overall, this is a very well written piece. This is the first part I've read, but it still works well as I can see where it is going. It flows quite nicely and the dialogue does a good job of helping moving the story along. I have just a few comments that you can use or ignore:
She petted her dog, who wagged his tail. - since you called the dog Morgan earlier, why not say "She petted Morgan, who wagged his tail in response." But you're not wrong.
You'll find out all in good time. - how about "You'll find out. All in good time." Doesn't flow quite as well as you have it.
That's what my mom and Aunt Paula used to tell me. - how about "That's what Mom and Aunt Paula used to tell me."
The tunnel's caving in. I think that this should have been bolded as it seems like Bradley is speaking.
I enjoyed it. Thanks for sharing, Brent.
Comment Written 29-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 04-May-2014
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Thank you for the help with my writing. I appreciate the time it took to help. I have made the corrections.
Comment from Ben Colder
Sort of spooky. Still suspenseful. I think one of these days people will get it right about the intent of the Civil War. Although slavery was an issue, the fact of force government actions upon the states without a plan for economy recovery lit the fuse. The irony was they still held the blacks in educational slavery for a hundred years later. John Kennedy and King had the right idea but no plans to make it happen with dignity. Turning loose uneducated people into the a new way of life gives you todays violence you experience with black on black killings that drug lords adore .
reply by the author on 03-May-2014
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Sort of spooky. Still suspenseful. I think one of these days people will get it right about the intent of the Civil War. Although slavery was an issue, the fact of force government actions upon the states without a plan for economy recovery lit the fuse. The irony was they still held the blacks in educational slavery for a hundred years later. John Kennedy and King had the right idea but no plans to make it happen with dignity. Turning loose uneducated people into the a new way of life gives you todays violence you experience with black on black killings that drug lords adore .
Comment Written 29-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 03-May-2014
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I work everyday educating those children and to be honest have little luck. Not because they are not capable of learning but because of societies stigma and the environment they are raised in.
