Finding Love
Love Poem Poetry Contest Submission35 total reviews
Comment from Gladness
What a beautiful poem! I like the way it shows how love made the world more beautiful, washed away the mundane, and put sparkle in every direction.
Good job!!
Anita
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What a beautiful poem! I like the way it shows how love made the world more beautiful, washed away the mundane, and put sparkle in every direction.
Good job!!
Anita
Comment Written 25-Apr-2014
Comment from Dorothy Farrell
Seven stanzas in aabb rhyme scheme, with some near rhyme not/caught. A poem showing how love can open up your eyes to beauty around you that you were not aware of before. A very nice final stanza, beautifully written. Good Luck in the contest. Regards Dorothy
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Seven stanzas in aabb rhyme scheme, with some near rhyme not/caught. A poem showing how love can open up your eyes to beauty around you that you were not aware of before. A very nice final stanza, beautifully written. Good Luck in the contest. Regards Dorothy
Comment Written 25-Apr-2014
Comment from zanya
A heartfelt poetic tribute to love and its power to transform our lives 'seemed so mundane'- to realising 'love exists'-perhaps love does find us 'whispered my name'. Inspiring
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A heartfelt poetic tribute to love and its power to transform our lives 'seemed so mundane'- to realising 'love exists'-perhaps love does find us 'whispered my name'. Inspiring
Comment Written 25-Apr-2014
Comment from Uniqusatya
Lovely poem well written.Indeed finding love is a greatest task of ones life,On which rest all depends directly or indirectly.Unfortunately not all can find someone who can make us feel so ;)
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Lovely poem well written.Indeed finding love is a greatest task of ones life,On which rest all depends directly or indirectly.Unfortunately not all can find someone who can make us feel so ;)
Comment Written 25-Apr-2014
Comment from mfowler
The rhythm of this poem is quite intoxicating. I had to read it rapidly and twice to capture the detail of the journey towards love that it expounds. I loved:
And then surrender settled in
As love seeped through my thickened skin
And melted all the bitter cold
I stepped out from my broken mould ...all throughout, you've used these subtle passages of imagery filled verse to enhance the emotional impact eg love seeping through the skin thickened by past rejection and failed hope. Excellent poem. Good luck in the contest!
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The rhythm of this poem is quite intoxicating. I had to read it rapidly and twice to capture the detail of the journey towards love that it expounds. I loved:
And then surrender settled in
As love seeped through my thickened skin
And melted all the bitter cold
I stepped out from my broken mould ...all throughout, you've used these subtle passages of imagery filled verse to enhance the emotional impact eg love seeping through the skin thickened by past rejection and failed hope. Excellent poem. Good luck in the contest!
Comment Written 25-Apr-2014
Comment from emrpoems
Good aabb rhymesThe sun`s rays touched my darkened soul
I felt somehow I`d lose control
Each sense seemed heightened to extreme
I tried to resist Cupid`s scheme ---loved this
Good visuals.
strong entry in he contest
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Good aabb rhymesThe sun`s rays touched my darkened soul
I felt somehow I`d lose control
Each sense seemed heightened to extreme
I tried to resist Cupid`s scheme ---loved this
Good visuals.
strong entry in he contest
Comment Written 25-Apr-2014
Comment from Njorgensen
Great ode to love. It's true that so many times we huddle and protect, but love finds its way into our hearts. Good use of rhyme in this piece.
Njorgensen
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Great ode to love. It's true that so many times we huddle and protect, but love finds its way into our hearts. Good use of rhyme in this piece.
Njorgensen
Comment Written 24-Apr-2014
Comment from Jacqueline M Franklin
Hi Idamarty
Real nice fluidity with this one. I really like the way did the photo too. Very nice.
~ This was my favorite stanza ~
And then surrender settled in
As love seeped through my thickened skin
And melted all the bitter cold
I stepped out from my broken mould
Well done!
Keep Smilin'... Jax
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Hi Idamarty
Real nice fluidity with this one. I really like the way did the photo too. Very nice.
~ This was my favorite stanza ~
And then surrender settled in
As love seeped through my thickened skin
And melted all the bitter cold
I stepped out from my broken mould
Well done!
Keep Smilin'... Jax
Comment Written 24-Apr-2014
Comment from ravenblack
Love certainly does clear the senses and render everything in high definition. You have described your awakening well. The first line is also a good play on "love is blind". I know you wanted "restrain" to fit with the rhyme scheme, but it is a bit awkward. Restraint is a better fit.
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Love certainly does clear the senses and render everything in high definition. You have described your awakening well. The first line is also a good play on "love is blind". I know you wanted "restrain" to fit with the rhyme scheme, but it is a bit awkward. Restraint is a better fit.
Comment Written 24-Apr-2014
Comment from royowen
A beautifully written work and a most worthy entry in this contest! It's a most wonderfully worded narrative, the descriptive language is sublime and articulately written, the aabb rhyme scheme is sound and the meter even. Well done, Blessings, Roy.
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A beautifully written work and a most worthy entry in this contest! It's a most wonderfully worded narrative, the descriptive language is sublime and articulately written, the aabb rhyme scheme is sound and the meter even. Well done, Blessings, Roy.
Comment Written 24-Apr-2014
