Finding Love
Love Poem Poetry Contest Submission35 total reviews
Comment from harmony13
Excellent Poem! The poem flowed and connected well. The author's words were strong, descriptive and thought provoking. The reader found this poem heart felt with much emotion. The artwork is perfect and compliments this poem.
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Excellent Poem! The poem flowed and connected well. The author's words were strong, descriptive and thought provoking. The reader found this poem heart felt with much emotion. The artwork is perfect and compliments this poem.
Comment Written 26-Apr-2014
Comment from Petriesan
Interesting, that love was not blind. . .
and this si explained in the last verse. . .and the trip through the poem to get there was worth it.
good image to go with the poem,
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Interesting, that love was not blind. . .
and this si explained in the last verse. . .and the trip through the poem to get there was worth it.
good image to go with the poem,
Comment Written 26-Apr-2014
Comment from expressions9
Dear Idamarty,
This is a wonderful expression of how love found you! There's lovely imagery in your choice of words and good aabb rhyme. I noticed that the rhythm alters in places, affecting the flow for the reader, but then I imagined that if you (the writer) were reading it aloud, you would give it emphases and pauses at such places would cause it to make sense. (I guess it's the difference between reading and listening to poetry). I especially liked:
"`Twas you that found the long lost key
`Twas you that made me truly see
That love exists, it can be real
`Twas you that showed me how to feel"
Lovely contest entry - all the best!
God bless, Christine
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Dear Idamarty,
This is a wonderful expression of how love found you! There's lovely imagery in your choice of words and good aabb rhyme. I noticed that the rhythm alters in places, affecting the flow for the reader, but then I imagined that if you (the writer) were reading it aloud, you would give it emphases and pauses at such places would cause it to make sense. (I guess it's the difference between reading and listening to poetry). I especially liked:
"`Twas you that found the long lost key
`Twas you that made me truly see
That love exists, it can be real
`Twas you that showed me how to feel"
Lovely contest entry - all the best!
God bless, Christine
Comment Written 26-Apr-2014
Comment from N.K. Wagner
Love. The beautiful, distorting trap one tries so hard to avoid until one is caught. It seduces and enthralls until there is no other place to be. Well done. :) Nancy
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Love. The beautiful, distorting trap one tries so hard to avoid until one is caught. It seduces and enthralls until there is no other place to be. Well done. :) Nancy
Comment Written 26-Apr-2014
Comment from JavaJunkie
Very beautifully written and expertly crafted. I love how you have taken us through the characters different feelings about love and then brought your message with home with how I think all of us must feel when we find that person who teaches how and even why we would even want to try this thing called love.
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Very beautifully written and expertly crafted. I love how you have taken us through the characters different feelings about love and then brought your message with home with how I think all of us must feel when we find that person who teaches how and even why we would even want to try this thing called love.
Comment Written 26-Apr-2014
Comment from DALLAS01
The rhythm, rhyme and word choices make this a lyrical read. But the import of the message is what grabs me. I understand the fear of allowing the good stuff in. It is born in the fear of eventual loss.
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The rhythm, rhyme and word choices make this a lyrical read. But the import of the message is what grabs me. I understand the fear of allowing the good stuff in. It is born in the fear of eventual loss.
Comment Written 26-Apr-2014
Comment from gazzagodbod
aww the way the dew drops kissed the lawn love that a lovely line in a beautiful poem well done my friend xxgazzagodbodxx
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aww the way the dew drops kissed the lawn love that a lovely line in a beautiful poem well done my friend xxgazzagodbodxx
Comment Written 26-Apr-2014
Comment from visionary1234
What a sweet entry for this competition! Very conversational in style in parts, and sounding deeply personal. Rhythm a little bumpy in parts, which is a pity as so much of it is regular iambic tetrameter.
First verse is a mix of rhythms,
I was blind, but love was not
DUM DA DUM DA DUM DA DUM
Whispered my name and I was caught
DUM DA DA DUM DA DUM DA DUM
then reverts to iambic ...
I tried to resist Cupid`s scheme
da dum da da dum dum da dum
From days lived in constant restrain
da dum dum da dum da da dum
:)Sharyn
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What a sweet entry for this competition! Very conversational in style in parts, and sounding deeply personal. Rhythm a little bumpy in parts, which is a pity as so much of it is regular iambic tetrameter.
First verse is a mix of rhythms,
I was blind, but love was not
DUM DA DUM DA DUM DA DUM
Whispered my name and I was caught
DUM DA DA DUM DA DUM DA DUM
then reverts to iambic ...
I tried to resist Cupid`s scheme
da dum da da dum dum da dum
From days lived in constant restrain
da dum dum da dum da da dum
:)Sharyn
Comment Written 26-Apr-2014
Comment from honeytree
Absolutely loved both the art work and words written here.
At times within our lives we find love
That is not true love.
When we find true love nothing can replace this love.
honey tree
I have no six
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Absolutely loved both the art work and words written here.
At times within our lives we find love
That is not true love.
When we find true love nothing can replace this love.
honey tree
I have no six
Comment Written 26-Apr-2014
Comment from DonandVicki
I enjoyed your love poem because it speaks to the heart. Nicely thought out and well composed with good rhyming structure. Don
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I enjoyed your love poem because it speaks to the heart. Nicely thought out and well composed with good rhyming structure. Don
Comment Written 25-Apr-2014
