Your Own Cliche
Quatrains - Unmetered44 total reviews
Comment from Adri7enne
Moving, Gun! You really hit the spot, right now. The way I have to let my mind go to follow you, it's exactly what I need to get me out of the maze. You're a very compelling poet when you're hitting your stide. Loved it, girl!
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2014
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Moving, Gun! You really hit the spot, right now. The way I have to let my mind go to follow you, it's exactly what I need to get me out of the maze. You're a very compelling poet when you're hitting your stide. Loved it, girl!
Comment Written 24-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2014
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Thanks Adri for a wonderful review.
Comment from krys123
Gungalo, A loving home for the ages and in this one you outdid yourself by mastering the creativeness and inventiveness of the new style. This new rhyming style is very unique and very illuminative where your rhymes are neither forced, labored or strained but rather unique in being couplets adding a tecet in the last line of each verse. Your rhythm flowed smoothly throughout your poem making it easy for one to read your poem so clearly. Thank you for sharing a posting this for others and may the Lord be with you always.
Alex
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2014
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Gungalo, A loving home for the ages and in this one you outdid yourself by mastering the creativeness and inventiveness of the new style. This new rhyming style is very unique and very illuminative where your rhymes are neither forced, labored or strained but rather unique in being couplets adding a tecet in the last line of each verse. Your rhythm flowed smoothly throughout your poem making it easy for one to read your poem so clearly. Thank you for sharing a posting this for others and may the Lord be with you always.
Alex
Comment Written 24-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2014
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Thanks so much Alex for a wonderful review.
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You are so sincerely welcome Gungalo
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Smile.
Comment from Lysa Schuler
I like this poem. It's very meaningful. It has a fascinating subject, with a profound positive message, and outlook. You shared apart of yourself in this poem, versed very well. It was very moving to read. Inspiring. I would have liked to have given this one a six, but alas, I'm all out. Exceptional work, and many blessings.
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2014
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I like this poem. It's very meaningful. It has a fascinating subject, with a profound positive message, and outlook. You shared apart of yourself in this poem, versed very well. It was very moving to read. Inspiring. I would have liked to have given this one a six, but alas, I'm all out. Exceptional work, and many blessings.
Comment Written 24-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2014
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Thanks Lysa so very much for a beautiful review.
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You're so very welcome, and thank you for sharing, God bless.
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Smile.
Comment from emrpoems
I want your feet to tread,
not on my soul, but instead
across the waters of mind ...
down deep where poetry's bred.
I need you to feel my soft spots,
mingle within my forget-me-nots,
to squeeze into the places
that hide my reflected thoughts.
these two verses say it all in your special way
Very unique concept of what poetry means to you
Stunning presentation
Best of luck in the contest
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2014
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I want your feet to tread,
not on my soul, but instead
across the waters of mind ...
down deep where poetry's bred.
I need you to feel my soft spots,
mingle within my forget-me-nots,
to squeeze into the places
that hide my reflected thoughts.
these two verses say it all in your special way
Very unique concept of what poetry means to you
Stunning presentation
Best of luck in the contest
Comment Written 24-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2014
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Thanks so much EMR for a great review and your comments.
Comment from lakeport
Your own cliche, if you like I shall stay, that's a beautiful poem with an romantic touch Pami, Very nice rhyming,I enjoyed reading it.God bless you.Hugs!Lakeport.
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2014
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Your own cliche, if you like I shall stay, that's a beautiful poem with an romantic touch Pami, Very nice rhyming,I enjoyed reading it.God bless you.Hugs!Lakeport.
Comment Written 24-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2014
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Thanks so much Erich for a great review.
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your welcome Pami!
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Smile.
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smile, there is rain on the way>>>>>>>>>>
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Oh lordie lordie.
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Smile,pleasant dreams Pami! Gute Nacht!
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Good morning Erich.
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good afternoon Pami,the sun is shining after the rain>>>>>
Comment from Amenian Aypotheeno
Well you know I often try and walk either hand in hand with you or try the spring waters of your mind with the tip of my toe with my reviews and I know I cause a few ripples here and there but I don't think I could ever pigeon hole your personality nor your written work, as to never embroil myself in a cliché, because your work and style never becomes that... one of the many reasons why I come back for more, time and time again. Your mind and pen in liquid ink though is like a cascading waterfall, sprinkling a million splashed drops of thought down in to the body of creativity.
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2014
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Well you know I often try and walk either hand in hand with you or try the spring waters of your mind with the tip of my toe with my reviews and I know I cause a few ripples here and there but I don't think I could ever pigeon hole your personality nor your written work, as to never embroil myself in a cliché, because your work and style never becomes that... one of the many reasons why I come back for more, time and time again. Your mind and pen in liquid ink though is like a cascading waterfall, sprinkling a million splashed drops of thought down in to the body of creativity.
Comment Written 24-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2014
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Sigh Dale, it's wonderful to have such an understanding friend. I really appreciate it. Sigh.
Comment from maggieadams
This is such a twist coming from you, I was looking for sexual clues and they were all there, but it was poetry that was caressing you. You are an amazing poet with your aaba rhyme and such sensory imagery...fantastic. I have no sixes left, but this deserves one.
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2014
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This is such a twist coming from you, I was looking for sexual clues and they were all there, but it was poetry that was caressing you. You are an amazing poet with your aaba rhyme and such sensory imagery...fantastic. I have no sixes left, but this deserves one.
Comment Written 24-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2014
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Thanks Maggie for a wonderful review and your comments.
Comment from Dawn Munro
First of all, I love the title of this poem, Gungalo - it is what every single soul should do, and you do so perfectly! I know no one who writes as you do, and I think I would recognize your poetry from among thousands of poems. (Have I told you that already?)
I am SURE your poetry is an extension of you - that's different than what I always object to - people thinking it's our real life - what it IS, is my heart, my soul, my life experience and my observations, in the way I perceive things or I think the protagonist perceives - and that is what you do so amazingly - your view is unique and always beautiful, my friend! This poem is a shining example of that - "Listen, I wanna take ya to sea, deep into the why of me..."
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2014
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First of all, I love the title of this poem, Gungalo - it is what every single soul should do, and you do so perfectly! I know no one who writes as you do, and I think I would recognize your poetry from among thousands of poems. (Have I told you that already?)
I am SURE your poetry is an extension of you - that's different than what I always object to - people thinking it's our real life - what it IS, is my heart, my soul, my life experience and my observations, in the way I perceive things or I think the protagonist perceives - and that is what you do so amazingly - your view is unique and always beautiful, my friend! This poem is a shining example of that - "Listen, I wanna take ya to sea, deep into the why of me..."
Comment Written 24-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2014
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Thanks so very much Dawn for a beautiful review. Nah you never told me that before.
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Well, I should have - I've thought it for a long time! That's the sign of a truly great writer, in my opinion. You have a distinctive style, all your own - beautiful. It shows up even when you write to a specific form - it's your view on life and love, I think. :)
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Sigh Dawn you are really awesome.
Comment from Righteous Riter
Good end rhyming. Good description that creates a clear image in my mind. Good alliteration with through/the...to/tread...down/deep...soft/spots...makes/me. Good rhythm and flow. Good complimentary photo followed by a clear message.
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2014
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Good end rhyming. Good description that creates a clear image in my mind. Good alliteration with through/the...to/tread...down/deep...soft/spots...makes/me. Good rhythm and flow. Good complimentary photo followed by a clear message.
Comment Written 24-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2014
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Thanks Righteous for a wonderful review.
Comment from c_lucas
You have a good entry for the contest. I like how you keep things simple and give viewers a sincere look at you. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words.
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2014
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You have a good entry for the contest. I like how you keep things simple and give viewers a sincere look at you. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words.
Comment Written 24-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2014
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"Ceptin' I didn't enter it Charlie. Thanks for liking it though.
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You're welcome, Gungalo. Charlie
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Smile.
