Comment from Dorothy Farrell

Excellent

Eight very good stanzas in a challenging and interesting rhyme scheme - aaba. A very unusual rhyming successfully executed. I enjoyed the whole of your poem but in particular the lines 'to squeeze into the places that hide my reflected thoughts'. Very imaginative write. Regards Dorothy

 Comment Written 25-Apr-2014

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reply by the author on 25-Apr-2014

Thanks so much Dorothy for a wonderful review.

Comment from mfowler

Excellent

This is a daring invite to a partner. You offer to show your inner self, what makes you tick, what excites you and drives your thinking. That could be too much for some men. But, to me, it's a beautiful thing; the sort of thing on which great relationships are built. I love the poetry metaphors employed here. They connect not only to the voice, but also to the poet at work here. Love this:
I want your feet to tread,
down deep where poetry's bred.
and
Wear me in your own cliche,
think often of me each day

 Comment Written 25-Apr-2014

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reply by the author on 25-Apr-2014

Thanks so much M for a wonderful and in depth review. It was absolutely beautiful.

Comment from Dom G Robles

Excellent

I love this poem, its appeal, and I'm captivated by it.
It is an open invitation to the feelings of the writer's inner self.. .see what is inside of her...the glow and the pride she has. The last two stanzas drew me more on the appeal: "Here within the confines of a platitudes of defines... you will know me...by my thought waves in design...wear me in your own cliche...never let my dreams wander, gather them from deep and stay," Congratulations.Dom

 Comment Written 25-Apr-2014

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reply by the author on 25-Apr-2014

Thank you so much Dom for your wonderful review.

Comment from Carolyn 'Deaton' Stephens

Excellent

Good show..
find me, feel me, understand me
get lost in me, enjoy me
dream me, write on my heart
This one is full of lighthearted depth, If that makes sense.
Well done, :-) Carolyn

 Comment Written 25-Apr-2014

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reply by the author on 25-Apr-2014

Thanks so much Carolyn for a fantastic review.

Comment from ProjectBluebook

Excellent

I detect a few rhymes. Romance is not my strong suit. I have limited experience on writing romantic poetry. never done one intentionally. Does soothes romance and some nice lines speaking of, whatever. I bet you are surrounded by the sea. I bet you got some great weather in the Carribean. I like between hearts of ecstasy. Down through the foggy mirror. That sounds spooky. Exceptional, are you outside enjoying the rays as you create this lovely poem? wackydo

 Comment Written 24-Apr-2014

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reply by the author on 25-Apr-2014

A few? LOL oh well. Thanks Wacky. No but pretty nearly so.

Comment from Njorgensen

Excellent

Wonderfully written piece that sums up an innate appreciation for poetry. That appreciation truly is gift. The ability to feel something so personal and then to share it with others...amazing.

Njorgensen

 Comment Written 24-Apr-2014

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reply by the author on 25-Apr-2014

Oh thanks so much Njor for a wonderful review.

Comment from kiwijenny

Excellent

Listen, I wanna take ya to sea,
deep into the why of me.
Down through the foggy mirror
into depths that you can't see.
Poetry is the deep down why of you and me...
I love this
God bless

 Comment Written 24-Apr-2014

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reply by the author on 25-Apr-2014

Thanks so much Jenny for a beautiful review.

Comment from royowen

Excellent

A lovely poem about knowing and wanting to be known! A journey of reaching to those you hold dear and to those you desire to know you. A beautifully written work! A good entry into this contest, with an interesting Rhyme scheme! Well done, Pam. Blessings, Roy.

 Comment Written 24-Apr-2014

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reply by the author on 25-Apr-2014

Thanks Roy for a wonderful review. Thanks too for noticing the rhyme scheme.

Comment from l.raven

Excellent

HI Blue Moon, this is a winner...takes ya from your nose to your toes....deep into your heart and soul...you live poetry...and this poem is pure proof...yeah...that's you ...check out the pictures....and by the way...feel your own soft spots and forget-me-nots...love it you...Luff Linda xxoo love

 Comment Written 24-Apr-2014

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reply by the author on 25-Apr-2014

Hey LInda, thanks so much girlie for noticing. Sigh. We writers have to just keep plodding on eh?

reply by l.raven on 25-Apr-2014

your sooooooooooo welcome...long day today....hope for much better ones....Jake (dog) had seven teeth pulled...poor thing in a lot of pain...giving him his pain pills...but he seems to still feel some pain...should pass in time...sooooooo glad to see ya...beautiful day here today...luffff

reply by the author on 25-Apr-2014

Ooooh I hope he is better girl. I'm suffering from a severe allergy attack. Love you.

reply by l.raven on 25-Apr-2014

I am so sorry...I know what they can be like...think I have some sinus going on myself...it's a bad year for it....love you back...luff

reply by the author on 25-Apr-2014

Thanks girlie.

reply by l.raven on 25-Apr-2014

smile...xxoo

reply by the author on 25-Apr-2014

Sigh

reply by l.raven on 25-Apr-2014

sighhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhing...

reply by the author on 25-Apr-2014

Laughing girl.

reply by l.raven on 25-Apr-2014

that's good news...so happy...xxoo

Comment from Jackarrie

Excellent

I'm offering boldly to share
what makes me tick and dare,
it's a chance for you alone to see
what keeps me coming to share.

I'm really like a blank page,
you may write upon my cage,
words of hallowed emotions
wage forth on a proverbial stage.

this is beautifully written Pam, I can see why you are a great poet.

well done. Mary

 Comment Written 24-Apr-2014

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reply by the author on 24-Apr-2014

Sigh thanks Mary for a wonderful review. Your comments are fantastic.