Comment from Sarah Butterfly

Excellent

I love the sight of these fields when they are in full bloom! Good rhyme used throughout the poem which make it an enjoyable read. Well done, Carolyn.

Kind regards

Sarah

 Comment Written 24-Apr-2014

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reply by the author on 25-Apr-2014

Thanks Sarah, I always enjoy your reviews. :-) Carolyn

Comment from MizKat

Excellent

Hi Carolyn,

You come up with so many great ideas to write poetry about. I've never even heard of Rapeseed before you wrote this poem about it. I love the rhyming in each of the four line stanzas.

Kat

 Comment Written 24-Apr-2014

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reply by the author on 25-Apr-2014

Thanks Kat, I have a few more to go then my 'well' will probably dry up. LOL I am some glad you enjoyed this one. Love, Carolyn

Comment from 9999pool

Excellent

A great tribute to rapeseed.
The many uses of the oil and the rapeseed folder to feed the hungry cattle to grow bigger.
Nothing is wasted. A good harvest will depend on the weather and the timing of the planting season.
To the perils of the weather, the rapeseed will grow into a dense meadow of yellow fields.
Excellent write and well expressed.
Informative too in the author's notes.
Cheerio, hugs, bro Ritchie. :))

 Comment Written 24-Apr-2014

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reply by the author on 25-Apr-2014

Thanks my dear friend, Ritchie, glad you enjoyed this one, :-) Carolyn

reply by 9999pool on 25-Apr-2014

Welcome.
Cheerio, hugs, Ritchie. :))

Comment from Cajungirl

Excellent

This is an excellent poem. It is perfect for what we call planting season. I tilled my 20 rows about two weeks ago. I've planted bell peppers, melons, peppers, green beans, okra, and lots more.

Thanks for sharing. I enjoyed the poem

 Comment Written 24-Apr-2014

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reply by the author on 25-Apr-2014

I am still away from home, when I get back I will be digging' and plantin'. So glad you enjoyed this one. :-) Carolyn

Comment from Joy Graham

Excellent

I'm more familiar with canola I think. We see the yellow fields here a lot. Good to know the background of these crops. Thank you for that! Good rhyme scheme. I prefer to read the shorter style poems, so thank you for that :)

 Comment Written 24-Apr-2014

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reply by the author on 28-Apr-2014

Hi Joy, I am trying to have a variety of forms as I go through the month. I appreciate your time as usual and the fine comments. This was interesting research and I enjoyed writing the poem, short though it was. :-) Carolyn

reply by Joy Graham on 28-Apr-2014

I meant no offense.

Comment from bichonfrisegirl

Excellent

Hi Carolyn,

Great job on this one. A farmer's life is not an easy life, and you have conveyed this well with this particular poem, indicating that the outcome depends upon the weather and pest control.

Well written with good aabb rhyming. The last line sums up the farmer's goal nicely.

Thanks for the author notes on Rapeseed.

Fave line ... "financial drought will be repealed" (I learned a new word here ... repealed").

Connie

 Comment Written 24-Apr-2014

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reply by the author on 28-Apr-2014

Thanks Connie, I am glad I could help with the vocabulary. LOL And I am especially happy you liked the poem. It was interesting to research the information.
:-) Carolyn

Comment from The Death

Good

Hi, Carolyn.

It is an interesting poem about the plantations being done by farmers during Spring and how they depend upon rainfall for prosperity.

You made excellent use of rhymes and near-rhymes in these quatrains.

Yellow haze on rapeseed field
Tons of rapeseed oil will yield
When harvest time and combine wield
Financial drought will be repealed

Rapeseed field will yield 'rapeseed' oil only, so it's use in the second line isn't sensible.

I would suggest you to use 'greenish' to signify its color.

Rain come down so sweet and pure
Water fields and growth assure
But blights and pest this year detour
Let blessings fall and faith endure

The second line in the above verse has forced rhyming. Also, the 'Farmer brown' seems a bit forced.

Suggestion:

Water fields for the green allure

You have used 'assure' twice in a very short space and should replace it with a synonym such as 'ensure' or have:

Thanksgiving for His crops' restore.

You haven't capitalized 'h' in the last line.

All these forced rhymes hinder the flow.

I will be happy to re-review if you edit this.

Warm regards,
Anupam


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 Comment Written 24-Apr-2014

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reply by the author on 28-Apr-2014

Thanks Anupam, for taking time to read and giving the poem a through review. Actually, I repeated the 'rapeseed' intentionally. God said, and will produce after its own kind. So I emphasized it twice. I always appreciate you, :-) Carolyn

Comment from misscookie

Excellent

I thought the photo is awesome.
Like the poem it captured my attention from the start.
I like the movement of your write.
Thank you for sharing.

 Comment Written 24-Apr-2014

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reply by the author on 28-Apr-2014

And thank you misscookie, for faithfully reading each poem in this series. I am happy you liked the 'Farmers field.'
Love, Carolyn

reply by misscookie on 28-Apr-2014

You're very welcome, I pray you had a blessed day.

Comment from Tomes Johnston

Excellent

This is a very topical piece of writing that the author has created with this post. Biofuels are becoming popular these days. I have seen so many programs about it but I would rather see renewable energy and solar energy used more and leave the crops to feed the world.

 Comment Written 24-Apr-2014

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reply by the author on 28-Apr-2014

As we traveled through the various states on this trip, we saw more and more of the wind generators and solar panels being used. Thanks Tom, for your great comments. :-) Carolyn

Comment from jmdg1954

Excellent

Carolyn, great artwork, followed by a well thought out and rhyming poem, yet followed by interesting historical notations. All combining for a enjoyable read.

Just one point... You use the word 'assure' twice within a couple of lines. Would the word 'ensure' in place of one provide the same result? Tell me to jump in a creek if you will. Just a thought.

Nicely done, John

 Comment Written 24-Apr-2014

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reply by the author on 28-Apr-2014

I will take a look and 'ensure', do I drink it or.... just kidding. I think my original had that, who knows what ended up. As you can see, I am very far behind.... so glad you liked this one John, please don't ever hesitate to assist when you can with edits. I always appreciate them, Now jumping in the creek, however ,if we had a fishin' pole does sound good.
:-) Carolyn

reply by jmdg1954 on 28-Apr-2014

Nooo... Not that 'ensure ya goofball.